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Ye, thanks, I honestly tried to emulate a socially isolated autismo hunter in my story, and tried to make his mindset into an "antisocial weirdo'" one who doesn't really show his emotions if that makes sense and it became what it is.
It seemed like he would make a good pair with a mantis girl who is pretty much the same-ish also as the cupid, according to the profile at least.

Maybe the second-person writing style messed me up a little bit too, since it was my first time using it, and it was kinda uncomfortable always doing the 'You did this/You did that' format. I read a lot of MG stories with this style, but you guys made it seem so easy to use, but for me, it was somewhat weird.
Maybe it would have ended up better if I used first person or third.

And I think thermometers were a thing around the 1700's already, but idk I kinda fucked up because I wanted it as the postman tells a joke that the mercury escapes a broken thermometer quickly. The two chairs are actually indeed an old native proverb thingy in my nation, it means in my language 'you fucked up' , because you wanted to sit on both chairs at the same time, but instead, you landed on the ground.

Thanks for the feedback tho, I really appreciate it since I love discussing my stuff, also it helps me grow STRONGER as a writer.

Would you accept a drink from her?

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