/lit/ - Literature

Can someone explain exactly how he is a bugman? He seems like he's successful.

>>14980161
not that anon but here's actual crit
>she declared' at first paragraph.
Delete. I already know who's talking. Most of your dialogue tags are weird. This is kind of taste but 99% of the time 'she said' is all you need
>Caitlyn's eyebrows shot up
too much
>sigh
people sigh twice in the first half of the first page. Repeated words elsewhere, eg ...likely fueled his guilt. In all likelihood...'
>a warlord with an army of the dead
>burn every kingdom to the ground
what the fuck. Is this a fantasy novel? I refuse to crit genre fiction
>she made an attempt at a coherent response
cut it. her stutter says all it needs
>i was getting out of my armor
fuck me it's fantasy