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Post your work. Other anons describe your prose and writing style

>> No.18371334
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>>18371321
Here's another

>> No.18371676

too lazy to decipher your handwriting

>> No.18371886

>>18371321
Minimalist, I'd guess focus is on the narrative rather than setting or themes. Depending on the execution, I think it could work really nicely, especially since the minimalist aspect is slightly Hemingwayan.

>> No.18371903

>>18371321
>>18371334
this is RWBY fanfic

>> No.18371905

Roses are red
Violets are blue
Fire incinerates them
Just like a

>> No.18372440

>>18371321
https://www.deviantart.com/uthp/journal/The-Legend-of-Twilight-Zelda-Princess-part-I-348420007

>> No.18372639

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSYnS0B9aFHJwr95QLy1mCVeXQ2TvGlE-k2BimG2MGlNGbyJUP0fDm-9fRdo902e6m86f3rs4emZQ9C/pub

I've been doing tone practice in lieu of actual writing. What do you guys think of my style? It's far too condensed, but it's been that way for years and at this point I'm going to have to learn to work with it

>> No.18374509

>>18371903
Yep

>> No.18374540

>>18374509
so why don't you post the part where they fuck

>> No.18374618

>>18372639
I think it's pretty good, Anon. While you stated your writing style is condensed, I think it can work to your advantage in writings

>> No.18374765

>>18374540
They're sisters

>> No.18374894

>>18372639
The action's hard to follow but as you said you've accepted it, and this is frankly pretty good.

I personally find lines like "...Shiningstone had to give her that much." assert the author more than Shiningstone. I prefer lines structured like "Each of the friars had this effect on him, lodging themselves in his mind, individual and immutable where everything else flowed like free water" that use imagery or experience and are firmly rooted in the character's brain rather than the prose, if that makes any sense.

Lines like 'current circumstances being what they were', also assert the author rather than the character, imo. I would avoid 'even' for the same reason. And it could stand to lose some adverbs.

Its pretty good in general, and would be very solid if you put more description and setting-the-scene in (although as you say that's not what you're going for).

>> No.18374937

>>18372440
>https://www.deviantart.com/uthp/journal/The-Legend-of-Twilight-Zelda-Princess-part-I-348420007

How does Edward sneak up on the Nazis when he's so shiny in the sun? Really broke realism for an otherwise Man-Booker worthy story for me.

>> No.18375072

>>18374765
So? I didn't have a specific pairing in mind anyway. Got any whiterose?

>> No.18375231

>>18374618
>>18374894
Thanks guys, I'll see if I can turn this into something