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3637031 No.3637031 [Reply] [Original]

what are you working on /lit/

>> No.3637041

issue 18 of /lit/ writers

it should be up later tonight

>> No.3637044

>>3637031
Brushing my teeth thoroughly, going to bed soon.

>inb4 plebs criticize brushbrowsing

>> No.3637048

OP are you talking about literature wise or in general??

>> No.3637051

The only thing I could say I'm actively working on right now is this dystopian novella collaboration with a friend across the country.
I never realized how easy it is to cliche with this pseudo-genre.

>> No.3637056
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3637056

A memoir of my recent life

>> No.3637059

>>3637031
i am writing a story about a deaf mute teenage girl who runs away from home after being molested then has to struggle to live on the street becomes a criminal which leads to a conflict with the mafia and then is put into witness protection in a (secret plot twist)

>> No.3637060
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3637060

the new american hermeneutic,
sprawling po-mo historical fiction maximum edge,
1L advantage course getting ready for based law school,
mirin my e-trade portfolio, putting in stop-loss order in case of negative result from this clinical biotech company which i have high hopes in,
working on this truffle-brie smoked salmon sandwitch,
waiting for based game of thrones episode at 9,
working on my fackn pecs ,as i type this post, with this annoying muscle stimulator i bought,
feels ubermayne

>> No.3637062

I started writing a novel this month after years of procrastinating. I've only written about 6600 words so far but I'm enjoying myself. The story is about someone who drinks a lot and is going insane but it doesn't really make a difference. I don't even know what my story actually is about yet and /lit/ will very much judge me for it but that's okay, too. I also created a secondary character whom my protagonist knows from the internet. His name is Tao. He just went to bed a few lines earlier.
Please just kill me now. It's going quite well. I'm enjoying myself. I wish I knew what I was doing but I'm enjoying myself. I am at 3am. Boy, am I enjoying myself. At least you're going to respond. Or are you not. I don't care because I am enjoying myself. This is getting repetitive. Please help.

>> No.3637066

>>3637041
what the hell is that?
>issue 18 of /lit/ writers

>> No.3637067

A fantasy descriptive-narrative. The only downside is I can already hear the publishing companys telling me it sounds to much like lord of the rings. Even though its completely different

>> No.3637072

>>3637066
>tar
compilation of anal discharge, mildly congealed

>> No.3637076

>>3637062
what does he drink? any drugs or just booze?
Any sex? does he fall asleep in his own vomit?
(these are all serious questions )
Wait is character a man or women?

>> No.3637083

A short story collection but I only write when I'm in the good mood for a certain story so it's taking a while. I have all the time, though.

Finished a novella a month ago.

I get the feeling I'm too young to be taken seriously as an author so I'll wait with publishing and just continue writing.

>> No.3637084

>>3637072
is tar an insult or am i supposed to know what that means? also brie sucks

>> No.3637085

>>3637067
To be honest, it really does sound a lot like Lord of the Rings.

>> No.3637091

>>3637062
>Please just kill me now. It's going quite well. I'm enjoying myself. I wish I knew what I was doing but I'm enjoying myself. I am at 3am. Boy, am I enjoying myself. At least you're going to respond. Or are you not. I don't care because I am enjoying myself. This is getting repetitive. Please help.

What

>> No.3637088

>>3637083
>>3637062
>>3637060
>>3637051
Are you planning on self publishing or will u be looking for a publisher?

>> No.3637092

>>3637085
No all fantasy novels are lotr rip offs..

>> No.3637093

I am considering a novel(la) called the "The Four Roommates of -- ---" (I have yet to invent a good name). It is basically about how some schizo dude projects his fantasies onto his four (rather mediocre) roommates. By the end he is winning Nobel Prizes, fighting rebels in the desert (a la Lawrence of Arabia), making top-charting rap-music, and writing acclaimed philisophical tomes with his roommates, at which point it becomes obvious that he is nutso. And I intend the book to have many footnotes explicating the author's delusions (including appendices such as his Nobel Acceptance speeches, etc). I intend for comments pouring adulation on the writer to line the margins (it was a pretty common device in Chinese literature, as I recall). It will be written in a very highfalutin manner and will conclude ambiguously.

>> No.3637096

>>3637085
how can u say that he didn't even say anything about it
>>3637067
don't worry LOTR sells big just stick an elf with massive tits on the cover

>> No.3637100 [DELETED] 

>>3637072
>>3637066
/lit/ writers and TAR are different things. If i remember correctly /lit/ writers is a mag that collects all the anon contributions people make on /lit/ in flash fiction and critique threads and the like. I kind of find the ethics of it a bit questionable, publishing it to a publication without permission, and in the process divorcing the work from its creators, even if they were posted anonymously on here

>> No.3637104

>>3637100
author is dead
long live pomo

>> No.3637108

>>3637048
why not a little of both

>> No.3637110

>>3637088
3637051 here.

To be honest, I've not even considered publishing yet. I don't even know if this project is going to make it to the end. We may end up stalling out half way through, in which case I'll probably just use the material we came up with for a few short stories. (I'm sure my friend will be fine with that, she's pretty laid-back about just about everything)

Hell, I wouldn't even know where to start looking to get published.

>> No.3637111

>>3637091
I told you that you're going to respond.
I'm confused, don't even mind me.

>> No.3637114

>>3637066
Issue 014 http://pastebin.com/PbpJxypr
Issue 015 http://pastebin.com/fHLv0krr
Issue 016 http://pastebin.com/KYGDtpfX
Issue 017 http://pastebin.com/nX0YnS67

>> No.3637112

>>3637096
It's about two friends who go to stop a warlock from destroying the kingdoms. The kingdoms are currently at war with eachother and the warlock(s)uses this distraction to corrupt the worlds wild life to destroy the world . No elves. No dwarfs. No goblins..no trolls. No orcs. Just humans

>> No.3637113

>>3637096
>>3637092

It was just a bad joke. Sometimes I say things that I find funny, forgetting that other people won't even smirk or consider they could be jokes. Sorry about that.

>> No.3637116

>>3637111
Hey, I've got a question for you:
What's your favorite substance to use while writing?

>> No.3637118

>>3637093
no please don't conclude ambiguously i hate that shit so much.
have the nutso be murdered commit suicide go to jail or come crashing to reality when the irs do an audit on him
anything but not nothing that makes reading the story a waste of time

>> No.3637126

>>3637100
Holy shit that is totally fucked up. i am definitely keeping everything except poetry of this site i had no idea
If i put something on pastebin and then post the link will that keep it out of this thing?

>> No.3637140

>>3637112
how much magic is in it? cause u can destroy nature with out magic

>> No.3637145

>>3637113
i figured i just didn't want the writer to be discouraged

>> No.3637144

I'm trying to write a crime thriller/mystery. Which is not a genre I've ever written anything in before.
And working on acquiring a pen like in the OP pic.

>> No.3637155

>>3637144
did the butler do it?
modern day?
Gore?

>> No.3637163

>>3637140
Not much. He uses it dark magic to corrupt the nature and wildlife slowly. It spreads like a disease. For example it will pass from one tree to another he dosent have to go from tree to tree or animal to animal. I forgot to mention it will give different perspectives. It will switch from the heros to the waring kingdoms

>> No.3637164 [DELETED] 

>>3637126
see
>>3637114

I get that they probably have genuinely good intentions in collecting all the fiction posted on /lit/ for further reading after threads die, but doing it without author permission, regardless of the fact that theyre anon posts on a public imageboard, kinda doesn't sit well with me

>> No.3637168

>>3637076
He only drinks. I want him to be messed up and not mess the reputation of drugs up any further by doing so. He does fall asleep in his own vomit. He also pees himself. There has not been any sex so far and I don't want to include any, either. He is a woman.

>> No.3637173 [DELETED] 

>>3637126
Just keep your trip secure and use it for whenever you post fiction and you'll be fine-- that way, in the event anyone ever tries to claim something you wrote on here as their own, you can pull up the archives and prove otherwise.

it's the reason i started using a trip on here sometimes

>> No.3637176

>>3637155
No, though to be fair I haven't quite figured out the killer's occupation and that side of his/her life; only their motives, style, and victims.
Yes. Medium sized city, US east coast.
Not gorn, but if someone is looking at say an autopsy or something, I'm not going to skirt around the details. Otherwise gore won't be the focus of any scene just for the sake of gore.

>> No.3637178

>>3637116
Used to be weed but then I had to quit smoking.
I would like to write while high on MDMA or coke but I haven't touched anything illegal for over half a year now. You know, the insanity bit.
I do like to drink alcohol. Right now, I've just had a lot of green tea, though.

>> No.3637195

>>3637168
>He is a woman
is he a transsexual or is this just a joke
What does s/he drink Vodka, Beer, moonshine, or Tequila? I vote Tequila the others are typical

>> No.3637206

>>3637088
(short story collection and novella guy)
Publisher.

>> No.3637213

>>3637195
So far they've had vodka and beer and red wine.
It's self-defense.

>> No.3637216

>>3637195
I'd rather say Black Russians. Seems trannycore.

>> No.3637221

>>3637164
i know this is a bit redundant but there should be a disclaimer here i knew there was a chance of my work getting stolen if i posted it here but i figure once the thread is gone its gone but its not

>> No.3637229

>>3637164
>but doing it without author permission, regardless of the fact that theyre anon posts on a public imageboard, kinda doesn't sit well with me

what did you expect would happen when you release your writing into the public domain?

>> No.3637237

>>3637213
have u decided how and when the character hits rock bottom?
>red wine
so it is a tranny post-op or pre-op?(i am kidding but it sounds interesting)

>> No.3637248

>>3637229
at least its not as bad as facebook they will sue you if you publish something that u posted on facebook
no case of this happening but its my fear because i read the terms and conditions

>> No.3637250

>>3637031
Whats OP working on?

>> No.3637268

well currenty I have no satisfactory answer to that question, so I'm crying into my 8th yogurt, browsing 4chan on my phone and glaringly at my broken laptop disapprovingly.

>> No.3637277

>>3637237
Not really. Got any ideas?

>> No.3637289

>>3637248
>>3637229
>>3637221
guys, posting something on here, or posting it on facebook, doesn't void your copyright or throw it into the public domain, and archiving or saving or re-publishing by others doesn't. either. I've written dozen of things that I've put up here and on other boards, and done some on facebook. if pepsi cola started using one of them for an ad campaign my cease and desist order would be just as valid as if I'd never posted it here, and if facebook were to sue me for republishing something I'd posted a copy of on their site, they'd be hard pressed to get a court to listen. I'm pretty sure anything that's copyrighted by anyone doesn't become facebook's property just because it got posted there. If that's true, they certainly own a lot of song lyrics now.

>> No.3637301

I'm trying to write a collection of stories from the fictional world I made up. But I want to include various forms in it (poetry, short story and novella and journal)

>> No.3637306

>>3637289
>posting something on here, or posting it on facebook, doesn't void your copyright or throw it into the public domain,

But it does void your FNASR, which means traditional publishers won't touch it.

>> No.3637334

>>3637277
well When i hit rock bottom i was drinking vodka out of a measuring cup laying on my kitchen floor considering dropping out of college(should have my degree is useless but i would have had the same amount of debt but with no degree). my dad hit rock bottom in my opinion when he woke up one morning couldn't find anything to drink and couldn't find a belt for his pants(he lost alot of weight cause he didn't spend his money on food anymore) so went around the block(hes in NYC) to the liquor store bought a small bottle of vodka to get himself right walking back holding onto a fence his pants fell down he fell over trying to pick them up then he shit himself because he was so "sick" he lost control of his bowels and shit himself in the middle of the sidewalk still only half way to the apt. He decided to crack open the bottle and drink it there sitting in his own shit so now that he didn't have to hold the bottle he could hold his pants with one hand and the fence with the other. when he got back he collapsed right in front of the door
use that i guess
i got more stories that i heard at AA is the character in college, employed or unemployed?

>> No.3637345

>>3637289
i don't wanna sound paranoid are add to this because i already came to terms with the dangers of posting on the web but facebook has more lawyers then i will ever have and if they take anything to court i will go broke before i even see the inside of a court room

>> No.3637347

>>3637301
whats so fictional about your world?water world? i loved that movie even thought it sucked

>> No.3637353

>>3637306
i plan on self publishing anyway not reason i should let people take a percentage when they didn't do any of the work. i can just hire a marketing firm

>> No.3637355

>>3637334
Currently unemployed. But they may have recently graduated from school. I'm not sure, whether I want the story to be primarily about alcoholism but if you have any more anecdotes, feel free to share them. I hope your father is doing better now.

>> No.3637363

>>3637355
Also, thank you for your reply. I will probably use aspects of it.

>> No.3637367

>>3637355
Also, thank you for your reply. I will probably use aspects of what you wrote about your father.

>> No.3637369

4chan is fucking with me.

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>>3637334
>tfw drinking wild turkey from the bottle before getting out of bed in the morning

>> No.3637380

>>3637347
It is a sort of Limbo with gods and the 'planet' is the mother god. Her heart is a great fiery beast that shall be unleashed in the end days. She has three children who represent the three main states of matter. The father it the sun and he is imprisoned in Mother hand.

>> No.3637383

>>3637353
Or you can set up your own marking scheme. Its the era of Viral trends my man, if you strike it big, your 15 minutes of fame will open doors.

>> No.3637398

>>3637367
ya my own rock bottom wasn't really very bottom i just got to the point where i went to AA then they told me the steps and said get to work and i was like "Work no body said anything about work No thanks i think i will just stop drinking" but the stories i heard and read were really helpful in finding my self again. i will try to find one that fits alot of the storys have other drugs or have aspects that u wont be using in your story.

>> No.3637410

>>3637383
my idea of marketing would be painting BUY MY BOOK on a pair of boobs

>> No.3637415

>>3637410
your book must be replete of great ideas

>> No.3637418

>>3637353
Hire a marketing firm?

What would they do, exactly? Where have you ever seen literature advertised?

>> No.3637424

dealing with crippling self doubt

>> No.3637431

>>3637380
What? is Plasma the unwanted child? sounds cool is the solar system the same as ours?
are there people or are all the characters gods?
what do u mean limbo? like a white room where the sun is sitting on a couch and the mother is cooking for her children?

>> No.3637434

>>3637424
damn where can i get me some of that?

>> No.3637435

>>3637424
Just get some crutches or a wheelchair.

>> No.3637443

>>3637418
i see shit pop and pulp novels advertised on the tv or online all the time james patterson stephen king and jkrowling david baldacci and others

>> No.3637452

>>3637443
Hmm.
Well, that's weird to me.
That's new to me.

Maybe it's because I haven't seen an advertisement on the internet since 2006.

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3637467

>have started writing a novel 4 months ago
>15 pages on 12font
Fuck me. This few pages aren't even as good as I planned.
;_;

>> No.3637487

>>3637431
I just realised I forgot plasma. The story is actually more about the people but the Gods Meddle to their own ends. By limbo I mean that at least the few characters I've written so far have died prematurely.

>> No.3637488

A couple days ago I finished the first chapter of a novel. I always have great ideas for books but a couple pages in it always gets so daunting knowing itll take months to finish. But I feel I'll be able to finish this one.

>> No.3637490

>>3637467
That's nearly 31 words per day!

Keep it up, and you'll be done in some eventual time at all!

What's keeping you from progressing?

>> No.3637493

>>3637467
they never are that's we we re-write

>> No.3637495

>>3637493
*why*

>> No.3637506

>>3637467
You should just do what I do. I write a chapter in a notebook and have the page filled with things that need to be corrected and make tons of notes of things that needed to be changed. That way when I finish a chapter I go and type it up and the final version is the best it can be.

>> No.3637504

>>3637487
the main God I've written about so far is the one representing Gas he had wings but he had them torn out for siding with his father. He is bound to the 'widow's waste' he built a bridge around the world on which he made a giant city. Now he runs a bar in the center of the city.

>> No.3637524

>>3637355
well the drinking can always play part in why they are unemployed and all the unemployed drunks i knew had welfare money and they had to budget their purchases.
well i have quite a few stories but they range just all around
a few people were committed to institutions by their family members which seldom helped
one guy would mix cleaning products and other chemicals basically poisoning him self to get messed up
i know a guy who's girlfriends kicked him out and he would get drunk during the day and knock on my door trying to get a place to sleep in the morning we would kick him out then he would knock on the door again at 3 am

>> No.3637526

>>3637452
u don't watch hulu?

>> No.3637530

>>3637504
i like this god i will buy your book when i see it on the shelf

>> No.3637538

>>3637530
I'll post on lit if it ever gets published

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3637547

What does /lit/ think of my work?
Maybe you could give me some tips? I'm kinda new at this.

>> No.3637562

>>3637547
I think it's an okay poem, but it really doesn't have much soul. It's also way too specific to /lit/. Other audiences could never enjoy it.

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>>3637490
I want to do something really good. Put all my intellect into this novel. But turned to be a mess.
The first part, I wrote really quick (12pgs), then I stopped writing. And started reading some things that I got interested.
And now I'm back, with a lot of ideas, but the novel is with a lot of spaces, with blanks, skips, and being really quick at some parts that I expend some good words before.

>>3637493
Thank you for the force. But I think I'll have to do this all again. But I got really intimate with the novel. I really don't want to do this all again.

>>3637506
On this middle time, that I didn't write at all. I took some notes, that what I should put into the story. Some ideas that turned into my mind, that I thought that would be good in a story.
But now, I want to get some short stories that I wrote and include into the novel.

Every step I make, the mess turn to be bigger.

>> No.3637578

I have been working on a novel recently, but my sprained ankle has made my productivity rates suffer. I've posted snippets of the first draft here on /lit/ before. It's a mixture of sci-fi and dystopia for the most part.

Basically, an alien race has complete control of the world, and humans are confined to sectors outside of alien civilization. There are factions who want to resolve the injustice the overlords have brought the humans. Among them, one of them wants to equalize the aliens and humans, and another wants to get rid of them for good. The protagonist belongs to a faction much like the latter one, but is eventually brought into the anti-Alien task force and asked to bring the Equalists' leader to them, in return for a card that will grant him rights that other humans don't have. Just as he's about to unwillingly fulfill this mission, a rogue terrorist leader snatches the card and creates a scene, allowing them to escape. Later on, it hits the news that the aliens' citadel has been kidnapping masses of humans and feeding their souls to a planet-devouring entity that was presumed dead hundreds of years ago when the slavery began. This incites riots, anarchy, and all-out war, and the protagonist and Equalist leader (who happens to be his brother) head over to the citadel, the protagonist having been told by the anti-Alien group's leader that he is the one who had to bring down the aliens' biggest weapon (the planet-devouring entity), for the fate of the world.

I've had this idea since August and have been slowly working things out. I was thinking about writing two sequels as well, but I've reconsidered.

>> No.3637588

>>3637578
do you write with your feet?

>> No.3637591

>>3637588
No. When I'm injured, I just don't give enough of a shit to do anything.

>> No.3637594

There's this kind of out-there idea I've had that involves an engineer waking up in a mysterious clock tower in a city not yet open to the public. The clock tower reaches into the skies, and supposedly contains time travel technology somewhere in it.

The engineer befriends a hermit who's lived in the tower for many years, and it's discovered that a rival engineer also lives within the clock tower and will not allow anyone to leave, alive or dead. The rival engineer wants to find the technology so he can use it for himself and gain some kind of fortune/recognition for it, so he and the hermit had servants (I'm thinking android-type creatures might work) drag the engineer all the way to the tower to assist him in his pursuits. I haven't thought much beyond this, but I think it has potential. I'm kind of aiming for horror (showing the fucked up things that happen to those who try to escape and those who go mad from being in the clock tower so long), as well as an Ico-esque escape story (with the rival engineer and/or hermit always trying to drag him back in).

It's just an idea. Haven't really put much consideration into it.

>> No.3637726

on myself.

>> No.3637815
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2 Plays
1 Novel
1 Comic Book Script
1 Short Story

All are incomplete at 45% done, but they have been for almost a year. They lay untouched. Someone tell me to get my shit together and work. There's something about 45% that stops me from continuing, while I rest on my laurels and admire the little work I've done.

>> No.3637841

>>3637538
I hope to see that.

>> No.3637844

-Right now, seven-page essay. Neoclassical aesthetics vs. Romantic aesthetics. Due tomorrow afternoon.
-A literary journalism piece about comic book conventions.
-A cup of tea.

>> No.3638355

>>3637594

This sounds really cool. The engineer knows the rival engineer before waking up?

>> No.3638370

Just playing with words in a text that might be a novel, might not. I am just plying with words. I hope it's fun enough.
Now I just have to put a story together to put all those lines.

>> No.3638556

>>3638355
sounds like kafka and sci fi. I like it.

>> No.3638557

>>3637815
GET YOUR SHIT TOGETHER AND GET TO WORK.......FAGGOT.

>> No.3638639

a short story about stealing fingernail clippers

>> No.3638645

Does anyone else ever post excerpts from widely praised novels and laugh when people say its shit

>> No.3638651

Writing a story about a man who purposefully cocoons himself in places alien to the outside world.

He's a student who lives on campus which I have always felt very insular and ignorant of the outside world. And he spends his weekends at a local amusement park much like Disneyland which also promotes this fictional, insular world completely alien to everything outside it.

>> No.3638655

>>3638645

On /lit/? Yes, have done so many times but like to tell people after a while it is from a famous novel. Some people shout unfairness but others grow modest and realise maybe they are a little too harsh.

I would like to do an experiment. Where people read a book which is supposedly critically acclaimed and ask what they think of it and another which is panned and say what they think of it. I feel part of the problem with asking for feedback on /lit/ is that everyone assumes it is rubbish as it is coming from a 4chan visitor, not a famous writer.

>> No.3638657

a very short porn fiction as well as a novel about time travel
its gonna be bad.

>> No.3638700

i'm working on three different novels at the moment.

1.)A Young Man falls in love with a woman that sleeps as performance art as he slowly starts to loose grip with reality.

2.)A Story about the final days of a former dictator as he tries to do some good before he dies.

3.)A Spy is sent on the trail of a woman and a man crime duo that plan to release a mutated form of small pox in the United Nations.

well?

>> No.3638707

>>3638700
1 banal edginess
2 the way american media shows the world cliche
3 thriller cliche

are you a screen writer?

>> No.3638710

>>3637380
sounds fishy

>> No.3638714

>>3637424
crippling self doubt crystallizes the genius

>> No.3638718

>>3637578
Seems like a B-category sci-fi.

>> No.3638730

>>3638718
Or a Fallout DLC plot

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>>3638730
90% of the 'writers' in this thread have the capacity of imagination learnt from Hollywood movies and video games. Nobody cared to share the philosophical backbones to their projects, probably because there aren't any.

>fmiling sssemen

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Ive just started my first large work, I dont know if itll end up being novel size.

Starts off with a boy talking to a girl called God who is about half of the time his companion. The boy was adopted, he only has a few blurry memories of his real family, and uses these to try and find his family.

>> No.3638751

>>3638741
Post your work friend :)

>> No.3638754

>>3638751
I'm not your friend and you don't speak my language.

>> No.3638758

>>3638754
Other people might. Do it pal, why deny people your great works? :)

>> No.3638763

It's a long, boring dystopian novel about a lazy rich girl who travels the galaxy trying to find the perfect woman so she can have sex with her. Along the way she meets a giant with a mutilated face and a space hesher who thinks he is the king of the universe and they all wind up traveling together shootin' the shit and smoking a lot and being depressed.

>> No.3638766
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>>3638741
Well
>>3638744
Here

A lot will have to do with skepticism, idealism, and the self. Boy questions his memories, wondering if they are made up, considering how he can know if they are or arent, if he is wasting his time and if he should be doing something else, considering if this isnt worth his time than what is. With the girl a lot is about a crisis in faith or simply trust.

So the two main themes are an existential crisis brought about with the characters past and shaping who he is, which makes him question what he ought to do,which leads to his relationship with the girl, wondering if he can trust her and if he wants to be with her in the future.

>> No.3638773

>>3638758
It's not great and I'm not your pal. Here, have a taste of my creativity from my infantile years:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=KqCgVYhASHk

>> No.3638779

>>3638766
Seems like a solid screenplay for a costume drama. I'm not saying it's shit, just that it isn't special.

>> No.3638796

>>3638707
ummm, no.
and how is 1. edgy? i mean really, is that the new shiggy diggy?

>> No.3638797

>>3638779
Why a costume drama?

>> No.3638799

>>3638796
Not guy you are relying to, but simply putting, he begins to lose his sense of reality, out of context, makes it seem like a forced tragedy

>> No.3638802

>>3638797
Because it will sell that way.

>> No.3638815

>>3638802
To be honest this is the first time ive ever heard of the genre.

So you think itll sell if I take the story and immerse it in some culture that has a distinct appearance? Like the civil war, or punk in the 80's?

Cant you say that about any story?

>> No.3638830

>>3638815
>Cant you say that about any story?
Not really. The point is that what you sketched here shows that the story and concept is pretty solid, yet - I fear - no matter how well written it is, it still requires an external atmosphere to cover up the lack of originality.

>civil war, or punk in the 80's
No, chose something from an era before a great collapse. An apogee of an empire, for instance. Such settings automatically set the feeling of nostalgia, gloominess that would go well with your theme: "recovering something that is lost (maybe) forever"...

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>>3638830
Oh I get what youre saying, a better story could sell on its own whereas this needs an extra umph from somewhere.

Mind giving me an example of a work that is original in contrast to this? Like I said this is my first attempt at a large piece of work so I really, really want some healthy criticism.

Maybe some works where this is already done?

>> No.3638843

>>3638815
>>3638830
Read chapter four: "Melancholy and the Act"
DL: http://simongros.com/text/books/slavoj-zizek/english/did-somebody-say-totalitarianism/

I've gotta go, sorry.

>> No.3638846

>>3638838
This will be a perfect boost for you to form the psyche of your protagonist:
>>3638843
cheers

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>>3638843
>>3638846
Thanks a lot, I really appreciate it

>> No.3638856

Am writing about a twenty something couple finding an abandoned Native indian child, named 'Neveah', in a rural town USA. A post apocalyptic romance about coming of age which dabbles in civilization making, governance, personal affairs, drugs and sex.

>> No.3638904

I'm writing a hypertext. The story concerns a cult community whose leader has, like Peoples Temple founder Jim Jones, been corrupted.

The reader will assume the role of many cultists. Each cultist will be faced with a series of increasingly difficult choices which determine the eventual fate of the cult and, naturally, the outcome of the story.

I'm very excited about this project. I have my reservations about the setting (I've scrapped three others already), but the overall concept has gripped me. I have an obsession, I've discovered, with human corruption in social structures, and this project allows me to write on that theme at length.

(While I understand what I want to do with this project, I'm open to constructive criticism and more than ready to change certain aspects of it.)

>> No.3638991

>>3638855
So, on phone. I'm >>3638846
I thought that Zizek's psychoanalytic approach to melancholy might be useful to your character development. To him (Lacanian school) melancholy comes from the realization that the lost thing won't be missed as much as it was desired before. I think that adding this and other topics in that chapter would produce an interesting case in the young protagonist case: "Is my former memory even desirable?" If mixed with the description of an apogee of an empire focusing on the unhappiness of the common folk still experiencing the objective glory and wealthiness of the state of being an interesting paradox might emerge from the clash of the two (civilization in glory and the melancholic subject): what state is desirable? What is desire, etc...

You have to elevate the story to meaningful and mind boggling levels.

>> No.3639005

>>3638904
Some Marx and Focault might help you supplement that.

>> No.3639026

Short story collection about the post-fossil fuel, post-industrial civilization Pacific Northwest in about 150~ years.

>> No.3639059

Paper on the ways ancient Macedonian aristocracy controlled the population.

>> No.3639093

>>3639026
that's pretty dry so far. details?

>> No.3639291 [DELETED] 

>>3639093

I've already written out most of the "world building" stuff, but I'm still trying to come up with the stories themselves.

The future did not turn out what we wanted it to be. In the wake of ecological overshoot and resource depletion, most of humanity leads an very local, agrarian existence. Most of the series would be "real" local folktales from the Gulf Islands, the most "violent" one being the story about how one particular island community dealt with poachers who preyed on their sheep.

>> No.3641006

A one-shot comic about a guy buying his son a used car from a shady Russian mobster.
>tfw people ask what you want to do with your life.
>That look of pity, condescension and amusement they give you when you say you want to write comics.
W-well at least I'll never be accused of being a pretentious author.
Or a real author...
Or useful...

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>>3641006
Just say you're a graphic novelist.

Nobody needs to know the truth...