/lit/ - Literature

>>9991971
Post an excerpt for meaningful advice.

>>9991971
Read, read and read. Percieve the writing and analyze it.

>>9991994
sounds like lots of work

Read the classics and study why they are considered classics. My writing got better after reading something like desolation angels. It always does, friendo.

>>9991992
"he looked at her in the eyes and then down at her lips, he slowly brought his to hers until they touched. We really shouldn't big bro. Our lips continued on anyway until I found my hands caressing her breasts. She started crying. I can't. She stood up and ran away from me"

>>9992049
Yeah, that's horrible. Stop now and never touch a writing implement again.

>>9992074
Thats why I came here for advice

>>9992085
>cant stop cringing at writing
>writes incest loli shit
gee i ponder the cause

>>9992085
Well you got the advice and yet you're still here, shitting up lit. Fuck off. Don't touch your fucking keyboard, as it is a writing implement or can't you read, fucker??

>>9992085
writing average erotica is not difficult
if you can't even manage that you should probably stop writing altogether

>>9992092
This is a good point. Since your subject is so disgusting and your writing is novice level its a perfect storm for cringe.

Try writing about your fucking day.

>>9992107
>>9992092
|>>9992134
I never should have came here.

>>9992206
At least we agree on that

>>9992228
Try hard pseud. Why dont you post your own writing?

>>9992049
I can fix this for you -
"he looked at her in the eyes and then down at her lips, he slowly brought his to hers until they touched. We really shouldn't big bro. Our lips continued on anyway until I found my hands caressing her breasts. She started crying. I can't. She stood up and ran away from me. I thought to myself that if people were rain, I was drizzle and she was a hurricane"

>>9992232
There are glaring grammatical errors in most of your posts, but none in his.

>>9992049

>>9992206
true

>>9992117
>aiming this low
>missing

Start by keeping a journal and write without any kind of literary aspirations or lack of them. Do this everyday for a year and just then try to write fiction
Also keep reading, hopefully the greeks
Xiao

>>9992206
Obviously not. This is a board about literature, after all.

>>9992243
So in other words you wont. Embarassing

>>9992267
Literature is anything writen you dolt

>>9992206
You should have posted in the critique thread. People are nicer and more helpful in the critique thread.

>>9991971
stop writing that way, then. it's simple as that. but do you have the strength to let go of the habits that protect you?

>>9992318
>his
>you

>>9992342
Put out or get out. So far im objectively the better writer because you have nothing to show

Grow a pair

>>9992049
>onii-san dame desu

>>9991971
Stop writing about cringey fucking subject matter and maybe you're writing will be worth reading some day.

>>9991971
Think of the guy that doesn't cringe at his own writing. Unlike you, he has no idea he needs to improve, and no direction.

>>9991971
1. Identify what's wrong with it.

2. Correct it.

>>9992359
Your skill at wielding logic rivals that of your prose

>>9992363
why is there a router glued to the back of the monitor? No way Johnson would approve of that shit

>>9992206
oh fuck off, did you post because you wanted people to compliment your writing?

>>9993916
Don't ask me, I didn't make the picture.

>>9992029
This is great advice. I will also throw in the suggestion to read current, good lit to see where it is at the moment.

>>9992490
This is the actual and only answer.

>read
>write
>read more
>write more

there's literally nothing else you can or need to do to improve writing

>>9991971
you always will

>>9992240
What you just did was sprinkle some gold on some shit

If writing is what truly draws you will you always return from darkness for that flicker of inspiration. Each return your hands grip tight pages of text in tribute to both regained vision and that dull flame of inspiration. You'll scatter the writings to ash; for every sacrifice grows the timid fire's gentle radiance over what can not be seen. Over time you will tend flame until either mastering control over its illumination, or ceasing return out from darkness in hope of some other faint glow.

>>9992049

>>9992049
One fellow degenerate to another, don't write this like a hentai manga, write it like a published book from America.
Here, have a revised version:
Looking from her eyes to her lips, he slowly went for a kiss.
"We really shouldn't your my brother" she said, yet they still gave in to their lust until his hand made its way to her bosom.
"I can't" she said, this time truly meaning it enough to storm off crying from him.

I can't stand my own writing too, but other people like it a lot. They tell me that its really good and how much they enjoy it. I have subscribers and fans and stuff. But I just see it as terrible and I can't enjoy it the way they can.....Will I ever feel better about my own stories?

>>9992049

>>9992240
This is a timely reminder for everyone to please donate to those devastated by hurricanes Harvey, Irma and Jose.

>>9997312
Bruh that sucks too. Fuck but I think it's unfixable, it's such a gay scene in general.

>>9991971
OP: stop cooking your mind and settling for mediocrity with anime. Challenge yourself with platinum genius tier writing and you will absorb it.

>>9992328
absolutely not correct.

>>9992049
Why do you change from third to first person mid paragraph? Why aren't you using quotation marks?

>>9997331
personally I think you can appreciate certain bits. but thats all. as a whole you will always be inadequate because you will never be perfect, and being where you are, you can see something better exists. when people look from below, they see where you are as the top.

>>9992049

Here is my attempt:

He stared into her quivering little eyes for quite some time before his gaze travelled south, running over her soft features before finally reaching her plump, pink lips; slightly parted to reveal two large white front teeth. His heart pounded in his chest as he lent into her, clumsily pressing his lips against hers. As heir tongues thrashing about in one another’s mouth his hands crept up her lithe body to caress her firm little breasts, his fingers dancing across her now erect nipples. He closed his eyes and began to tumble into warm blissful oblivion.

Suddenly she broke away from him, violently wrenching him back into reality.
“I cant do this...” she stammered, before running out of the room.

>>9991971
confidence

>>9992049
>We really shouldn't big bro.
Change this to say "Onii-Chan" and you'll be golden.

>>9998325
Certainly better than OP's, but I feel like it goes too far in the other direction. A bit too descriptive.