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2267017 No.2267017 [Reply] [Original]

I am an aspiring poet/writer
I have just finished a book consisting of 50 poems: I am barely 18, and this would be my first published work.

How do I go about publishing it, /lit/?

>> No.2267019

>>2267017
Gonna bump until you help, /adv/

>> No.2267020

>>2267019
>>2267019
Stupid me. I meant /lit/

>> No.2267023

don't, they're probably all shit

if they're not, try and submit individual ones to journals and get some out there that way, then maybe if they're really good someone will publish a collection or something, but don't expect to make any money off it

>> No.2267024

>>2267017
Post one and we can make fun of your shitty angsty poetry.

>> No.2267028

>>2267024
>>2267024
Stupid me. I meant post one and we can appreciate your shitty angsty poetry.

>> No.2267029

>>2267023
I'm not expecting money, not at all.
And they're not shit.

Why is it more advisable to submit them as individuals rather than as a collection?
And how do I go about doing that?

>> No.2267032

They are probably all not very good, you might find them cringeworthy in a few years.

You won't be able to get it published but you can try submitting your best to journals and such, keep an eye out for competitions and try to develop some sort of name for yourself.

Mind posting some examples of your work?

>> No.2267034

The poetry I wrote has nothing to do with emotions. Imagine it as being in the same vein as 'Gods of Pegana' by Dunsany.

And don't be stupid- I've been working on these poems for years. I'm not giving them out so you can take and claim them as your own.

>> No.2267035

>>2267029
nobody wants to publish a poetry collection because nobody wants to buy some no-name motherfucker's poetry

but people still read literary journals sometimes so there's some profit there

research literary journals & submit them according to instructions

also, post one or two of them here so we can find out that they're shit (your poems are probably shit, btw, even if you don't think so)

>> No.2267039

>>2267029

literary journals and magazines solicit poetry all the time but i can't imagine any publishers out there are champing at the bit to publish a 50 poem book of poems by an unpublished writer

once you start getting some stuff in journals or whatever maybe get at some publishers about doing a chapbook or whatever?

>> No.2267041

>>2267017
1.Post one of your poems
2.??????
3. Profit!

>> No.2267042

>>2267035
The Lonely West

In sundered hills
The flowers grow

In open skies
The Great birds soar

On distant peaks
The Thunder roars

In empty lands
Dead cities mourn
---
The murals fade,
Yet stone remains

The flowers die,
The World turns grey

The courts are stilled,
And Silence reigns

>> No.2267044

>>2267042
haha suck shit OP, i'm stealing this. imma be rich and knee deep in hipster pussy.

>> No.2267045

>>2267044
Good luck: that was one out of 50 poems.

>> No.2267046

Hey OP, nobody cares about poetry.

>> No.2267049

>>2267042
Eh Corazon, toss me your email address won't you?

>> No.2267050

>>2267046
This poetry serves to establish a vague sense of feeling for the full-fledged novels that I plan to write.

>> No.2267052

>>2267042
it's not as terrible as i would have thought but it's also not really interesting

>> No.2267057

>>2267052
It's only one poem out of fifty, and it's not even the first one. There is a context in which it is placed. Poetry can tell a story, you know.

>> No.2267062

>>2267057
I thought /lit/ would have offered better advice.
You think I didn't go to people I know for reviewing? I went with friends and english teachers - it was my teacher who suggested I publish. These poems were just a way to pass time for me.

>> No.2267066

>>2267042
Yes, OP, nearly not overwrought.
Give it some time. Read some James Merrill and some Andrew Hudgins for narrative poetry.

>> No.2267069

>>2267062

you've gotten good advice -- submit piecemeal to journals/magazines instead of submitting the poems all in one chunk

also your teacher's on crack but that's beside the point

>> No.2267072

>>2267066
What exactly is it you mean?

>> No.2267074

>>2267042
Not unpleasant, but definitely banal.

>> No.2267076

>>2267069
Please, you over-estimate the importance of your advice.

>> No.2267077

Submit them to a manuscript contest. The Poets & Writers website has a database of them. You can also try Duotrope Digest, search set to "manuscript" length. The Yale Younger Poets and The National Poetry series are the most prestigious.

>> No.2267080

>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062
>>2267062

Would you prefer to have my email? It's kokoro rococo at geemail, minus the space between the kokoro and the rococo.

>> No.2267081

OP, /lit/ is a slow as shit board. Also you've been a total fuckwit I don't think many people are going to be willing to help you.

>> No.2267084

youre not even 18, are you

>> No.2267093

>>2267084
Good luck proving I'm not.

>> No.2267089

>>2267080
Thing is, there's a chance I might know you in real life, for I know many friends that frequent this site (I know of at least five who said they regularly frequent /lit/)

>> No.2267096

My poetry, when combined, creates this legendarium or mythology, similar to Yeats and his Byzantium mythology that he created in his poems.

>> No.2267098

>>2267089
>>2267093
I don't really care, it's just that you've been acting like a real fuckwit here. Despite the fact that we've given you pretty useful advice. So idek.

>> No.2267100

>>2267042
I like it. Don't know whats ruffling everyone else's feathers

>> No.2267101

You jelly?
Just because here comes a real old-school poet who can actually rhyme (not like those awful modern poets with their discordant freestyle) and stares into your face, you feel like putting me down, because hardly anyone here has any writing talent, though you pretend to be big fucking intellectuals by posting threads about books whose plots you read off of Wikipedia and owning big books and using big words in the hopes you look smarter.

>> No.2267103

>>2267096
Pro-tip: don't say "does" say "I try to," "aims," etc. Saying "does" makes you sound like you're full of yourself.

>> No.2267105

>>2267100
The poem's not the issue.

>> No.2267107

>>2267101
lol. humility is a virtue, man.

you probably will achieve more as a writer than 9/10 of the people on this board if you keep working (not that this is saying much) but you gotta check your fucking ego

>> No.2267108

>>2267101

you are a beautiful person

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=LBeg7CZqSx0

>> No.2267109

>>2267100
Thank you

>> No.2267110

>>2267107
Thing is, I don't really mnd If i achieve much or not - I just want the poetry to be published. Even if NO one reads it. I want it out there.

>> No.2267112

>OP comes in here for help
>Acts high and mighty, disses people who have offered help

uhuh...

>> No.2267114

>>2267110
Then make a blog

>> No.2267115

>>2267112
>Implying your insults are advice.

Seriously? So I should just remain all humble and complacent while you bash my work? I understand if you say it's not good, but some of you people immediately start jumping on it for no reason other than your jealousy.

If you're going to criticize it, then tell me WHY you criticized it.

>> No.2267117

>>2267115

>> No.2267118

>>2267114
Go kill yourself instead.

>> No.2267119

>>2267101
You think you're hot shit? Your poem's nothing. It's got rhyme, meter, sure, but you're trading in psuedo-profundity. If you slap "the" onto something, it doesn't make it momentous. Hey, some birds, some flowers, some thunder, some mountains, they signify the ephemeral nature of things -- wow, this sounds new and interesting, especially the brilliant metaphors.

>> No.2267120

>>2267119
Again, you fail to understand that this poem is out of context. You would need to read the rest of the other poems to find a meaning to it.

>> No.2267121

>>2267115
People have offered honest advice and you've called them stupid and put them down.

I haven't seen much criticism about the poem at all, it seems fine to me but you're just a total arsehole.

>> No.2267122

>>2267115
people were offering sincere, legitimate advice when they told you to submit pieces to individual journals & that it would be nearly impossible to get 50 poems published as a collection, duder

>> No.2267123

>>2267115
People have said what's wrong with it: it doesn't really say anything or have any overly interesting images. That's not to say it doesn't have potential. People have given you places to look for possible submission, have given you specific writers to look at. That's pretty good advice.

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2267124

>>2267119
I'm sure you're a poetic genius.
I'm certain your works are astounding masterpieces-to-be.

>> No.2267125

>>2267123
Oh my god, it seems that I underestimate the stupidity and/or blindness of some people here.

Did you not read? The above poem is OUT OF CONTEXT. It serves only to reinforce that which other poems that I have written have introducted.

>> No.2267129

>>2267120
Mediocre ingredients do not make an excellent meal.

>> No.2267130

>>2267125
This is the advice /lit/ gives?
Come on, even /x/ gave better commentary, and they're a bunch of delusional teenagers.

>> No.2267131

>>2267130
There's an old Italian saying... "If you act like a pompous dickhead, no one wants to help you."

>> No.2267136

GIVE ME YOUR HELP YOU FUCKING PLEBS. YOU'RE ALL FUCKING STUPID FUCKS YOU CAN'T WRITE FOR SHIT, HELP ME! I WANT TO BE PUBLISHED, MY ENGLISH TEACHER SAID SO YOU FUCKING PLEBS, SO FUCKING HELP ME YOU WORTHLESS WRITERS. MY FRIENDS SAY MY POEMS ARE GOOD. FUCK YOU FUCKING FUCKS, HELP ME GET PUBLISHED.

>> No.2267133

>>2267129
>calling this poem mediocre

And, yes you could. You can have the most mediocre food, but with preparation and dedication, make it taste great.

>> No.2267137
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2267137

Calm your tits people. He asked for help, you called it shit, he got defensive, you got pissed at him being defensive

50% of you people need to head back over to /b/

>> No.2267138

>>2267131
>>2267131
>implying i'd take advice from Italy, one of the worst nations in Europe.

>> No.2267139

>>2267125

>It serves only to reinforce that which other poems that I have written have introducted.

So it's a an unnecessary poem? Also stop whinging about how people take the poem YOU CHOSE TO REPRESENT YOUR WORK
Also: introduced

>> No.2267140

>>2267130
>delusional teenager

>> No.2267141

>>2267042
Yuck
"Silence reigns"
"Thunder Roars"
"Birds soar"

>> No.2267142

Alright guise, I've cooled my jets. Yes, I have a bit of an ego, which sometimes comes out.
Just to set the other one more in context, here's another one I penned but this gloaming.

When dreaming I'm guided to another world
Time and time again
At sunrise I fight to stay asleep
'Cause I don't want to leave the comfort of this place
'Cause there's a hunger, a longing to escape
From the life I live when I'm awake
So let's go there
Let's make our escape
Come on, let's go there
Let's ask can we stay?

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

Although I would like our world to change
It helps me to appreciate
Those nights and those dreams
But, my friend, I'd sacrifice all those nights
If I could make the Earth and my dreams the same
The only difference is
To let love replace all our hate
So let's go there
Let's make our escape
Come on, let's go there
Let's ask can we stay?

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

So lets go there, lets go there,
Come on, lets go there
Lets ask can we stay?

Up high I feel like I'm alive for the very first time
Set up high I'm strong enough to take these dreams
And make them mine
Set up high I'm strong enough to take these dreams
And make them mine

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

Can you take me Higher?
To a place where blind men see
Can you take me Higher?
To a place with golden streets

>> No.2267144

>>2267136
Well, MOST (not all) of you are pretty stupid.
You don't even take time to evaluate: you just start 'trolling', thinking you're all cool.

>> No.2267147
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2267147

well Poetry.com died so your are SOL. they took anything and everything and said it was awesome.

good luck finding a publisher. there are severl books compiled of them that tell you what each is looking for.

>> No.2267148

Good poem.

Too bad OP is a massive douche.

>> No.2267150

>>2267142

This was better when Creed did it.

>> No.2267151

>>2267142
That's not my style.
That is way too contemporary.

>> No.2267155

>>2267125

i love you, heart of poetry

i want to kiss your belligerent little cheek hot with rage

i love the way you cherrypick the least helpful posts to seethe and spit at and blissfully gloss over the ones offering helpful advice

i love the reactionary bile with which you rail at free verse like an enraged grandpa in tweed

stay here forever, corazon

mi corazon

>> No.2267156

>>2267138
lol

>>2267142
this is definitely Not Very Good. first, it's obvious and didactic: there's no imagery or anything, it's just "wouldn't it be nice if the world were a better place?". the rhythm and language and sound are basically unexceptional - they're not horrible but there's nothing good about them, it doesn't really sound like anything. basically in the deployment of image and sound and in most everything a poem should do, it just doesn't.

>> No.2267159

>>2267148
Thanks. And i mean that sincerely.

>> No.2267160

>>2267156
those are creed lyrics.

not that i listen to creed.

>> No.2267162

As the poster of >>2267148
>>2267142
Much better poem+apology is nice.
Sorry that some people aren't very encouraging.

>> No.2267165

>>2267155
God, I swear I know you.

>> No.2267166

lol is that a song by creed

lol

lol

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2267167

ITT: People critique Creed lyrics.

>> No.2267171

Here's some Yeats. OP, ask yourself honestly if you should be comparing yourself.

The Cat and the Moon

The cat went here and there
And the moon spun round like a top,
And the nearest kin of the moon,
The creeping cat, looked up.
Black Minnaloushe stared at the moon,
For, wander and wail as he would,
The pure cold light in the sky
Troubled his animal blood.
Minnaloushe runs in the grass
Lifting his delicate feet.
Do you dance, Minnaloushe, do you dance?
When two close kindred meet,
What better than call a dance?
Maybe the moon may learn,
Tired of that courtly fashion,
A new dance turn.
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
From moonlit place to place,
The sacred moon overhead
Has taken a new phase.
Does Minnaloushe know that his pupils
Will pass from change to change,
And that from round to crescent,
From crescent to round they range?
Minnaloushe creeps through the grass
Alone, important and wise,
And lifts to the changing moon
His changing eyes.

>> No.2267172

>>2267156
Are you seriously that fucking stupid.
You people asked for a sample of MY writing, and you expect ME to just simply hand you my pieces, my thought-children?

I handed you the most bland and least-valuable poem: you I think I would risk posting one of my more valuable works for you un-talented dimwits to steal and claim as your own?

>> No.2267173

>>2267167
>mfw I called it a much better poem
Excuse me while I bash my head against a wall for being mentally impaired.

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2267178

>>2267160
>not that I listen to creed

>> No.2267183

>>2267172
>thought-children
>implying this is a phrase actually used by people
>implying real poets would ever dream of using such an irritating phrase

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2267184

>>2267172
>you I think I would risk posting one of my more valuable works for you un-talented dimwits to steal and claim as your own?

AHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA!

Oh god my sides.

>> No.2267181

>>2267171
Yeats is alright. though he doesn't come up to me or other poets.

>> No.2267185

>>2267172
never stop, you beautiful creature

(we assumed your poems would be shit because you're under 18 years old and you think that your poems are really good. because in nearly every case people in those situations, they are not very good poets. that's why we thought that. just fyi)

>> No.2267187
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2267187

Mi corazon, mi corazon
Dancing deep within the bathosphere
Himself a raging roid addict
Addic-dick Kick-case
Cuckoo-face, poo-poo-face
In before, nigger jigaboo moo
Cow, cuckoo!, it's jigs in place
A plastic face, strapped over a
Bank robber's facade
But then again, aren't we all
Just de Sade, but perhaps a bit
More moderate
Perhaps a bit more von Sacher-Masoch
Than Sadist
Masochist a bit more
Than poltergeist, poultry-heist
A foul a stench
A monkey's wrench, a hen, a green swan
Black, a Natalie Portman batting down the
Hatches with OP, in their little butthurt
Little black submarine
The Black Keys

>> No.2267189

10/10

>> No.2267191

>>2267185
My God, does it matter if a number of these were written while I was under 18?
What does it matter, at all?
I'm not some general population retard; I'm not generic idiot born of idiots.

>> No.2267197

>>2267187
das racist is the new kool-G rap

>> No.2267202

the back wings
of the

hospital where
nothing

will grow lie
cinders

In which shine
the broken

pieces of a green
bottle

>> No.2267206
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2267206

>>2267191
>I'm not generic idiot born of idiots.

>> No.2267207

>>2267191
because people who are that young are rarely very good at writing poetry. their poetry is nearly always maudlin and overly sentimental, and they rarely have developed any skill at writing.

>> No.2267208
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2267208

>>2267197
Mah nigga.

>> No.2267209

>>2267202
No rhyme, no imagery.
Boring, pretentious.

>> No.2267205

What else did I expect from 4Chan?
I came looking for legitimate commentary.
What do I get?
A troll thread.

>> No.2267211

>>2267205
Yeah, but you're the troll.

(unless your posts ITT are serious? In which case it's even funnier)

>> No.2267216

>>2267096
>>2267142
>>2267042
Holy fuck you actually don't realize how shitty you are. You're boring. You're using cliche images, amateur style, there's nothing setting you apart from the hundreds of other angsty kids who think that they're 'gifted' and get torn apart on here.

Read some actual poetry you fucking pompous kid, and realize yours is shit. I have tons of this kind of shit laying around in old notebooks. I'm also a published poet, because I moved past that immature phase and got into my own style.

Only thing you're going to achieve with this shit is a nice collection of rejection letters.

Also, reported for underage.

>> No.2267217

>>2267207
As I said, mine is not sentimental.
It is not emotional, it is not love poetry, nor anything connected to my feelings.
These poems are about a place I created which I plan to use for a novel later on (someday....)

>> No.2267222

>>2267208
They're actually really boring live.

>> No.2267223
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2267223

Dear OP,
Please go to bed.

>> No.2267225

>>2267216
Not underage. 18.
But I get banned: who cares?
At least I'll have a reason to stop visiting this cancer-infested site.

>> No.2267226

>>2267222
They kind of seem like they would be.

>> No.2267227

>>2267225
You're just proving the point by ignoring the comments on the poetry. It is a cancer-wrought site, we have faggots like you constantly.

>> No.2267228

>>2267216
I don't think I'm gifted.
I am gifted.
And I'm pretty convinced you are lying.
You could have brought on the point about you being a poet earlier on.

>> No.2267233

>>2267216

corazon di poeta needs not your jejune negativity

corazon di poeta will establish a vague sense of feeling for his full-fledged novels and you cannot stop him nor slow his progress, he throbs with the rhyme and meter of a million glowing shakespeares gone supernova

"they say the heart of poetry is still beating" - huey lewis

>> No.2267237

>>2267216
Againg, >thinking I shared with you one of my more prized works.

This work I posted is but a companion, a reinforcement of a poem that comes before it.

>> No.2267238

Shit got real niggas
Op is pissed about trolls
so he becomes one

>> No.2267241

>>2267228
You're gifted but you don't think you are? Why would you say that you're gifted if you don't think you are?

>> No.2267243

>>2267238
some epic shit ITT

>> No.2267247

My life, your light green eyes
Have /lit/ on me with joy.
There's nothing I don't know
Or shall not know again,
Over and over again.
It's noon, it's dawn, it's night,
I am the dog that dies
In the deep street of Troy
Tomorrow, long ago-
Part of me dims with pain,
Becomes the stinging flies,
The bent head of the boy.
Part looks into your light
And lives to tell you so.

What do you think, OP?

>> No.2267250

>>2267237
>sharing a shit poem to represent yourself
>get mad when people tell you it's shit

it's like having a name immediately turns people into retards

>> No.2267251

Honestly, my writing and creative skills far surpass those of all the people on ALL 4chan combined.

If I had but been born earlier, I would have taken King's or Tolkien's or Lovecraft's or Poe's place; I would have been Tolstoy or Flaubert, or even Shakespeare.

>> No.2267256

>>2267251
Sure.
No need to ridicule you for that post.
Sage for obvious troll.

>> No.2267263

>>2267237
>>2267228
>>2267225
You can't even decide on a comeback fast enough to put it all in one post.

I'm not implying anything other than the fact you're writing shitty, generic poetry that hundreds of thousands of teens have already written and discarded. You're allowed to continue to hide behind a delusion of talent though, you're the only one that's going to fail horribly and get frustrated.

Or you could realize you're fucking shit, and improve. But that would take a minimal amount of intelligence and self-awareness that you clearly lack.

Have fun, kid.

>> No.2267265

>>2267251
ಠ_ಠ

>> No.2267258

sage

>> No.2267260

born from the butt of greatness

>> No.2267261

>>2267250
I do not think it is shit.
I do however think it is unable to be judged fairly because it is out of context and weak by itself.

>> No.2267267

>>2267251
I don't know who that is, but it isn't me. I am Corazon Di Poeta

>> No.2267270

>>2267251
>>2267251

Screenshot this shit now.

>> No.2267271

>>2267247
Idk. It's a little to optimistic.
Whenever light is mentioned in my poems it's always emanating from within my soul and society always stomps it out...

>> No.2267275

"who is corazon di poeta?" - ayn rand

>> No.2267282

>>2267263
I'm 100% sure that no teen has ever written what I have, pops.

I am better, more talented. You simply wish to bring me down, just as the idiots and losers always wish to bring down those that are more skilled than them.

I doubt you are a poet, but if you are, I'm sure you are a total nobody, an unknown.

>> No.2267290

Wouldn't this thread be so much better if everyone was Corazon Di Poeta? Think of the harmony.

>> No.2267284

>>2267267
No, I am Corazon Di Poeta

Ignorant cancer likes me so much they're stealing my name as well as my work

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2267291

WE CORAZON DI POETA NOW

>> No.2267292
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2267292

>>2267270

>> No.2267295

We are the 99%
We are Corazon Di Poeta

>> No.2267298

This has been an absolute waste of time.
I take my leave: I was the fool for having thought any thread on 4Chan could give meaningful advice.

>> No.2267299
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2267299

Are you a wiza-CORAZON Di POETA?

>> No.2267301

>>2267298
Never mind guys I'm still here

>> No.2267302

I had to get a tripcode but I assure you that I am the real Corazon Di Poeta.

>> No.2267306

>>2267292
Oh yeah, this one's going on the repost pile.

>> No.2267307

OP can't into
writing poems herp derp
go kill yourself fag

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2267310

OP was an asshole.
But his poem was decent

>> No.2267311

>>2267302
But I'm the real Corazon. Do I need to get a trip too?

>> No.2267312

>>2267302

I assure you that that tripcode is a farce. Pretty much because I'm Shakespeare

>> No.2267313
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>>2267292
Or perhaps a bit more serviceable.

>> No.2267316

Ignore the impostors. It is I, Corazon Di Poeta.

>> No.2267320

>>2267312
Ha! My tripcode is #betterthanshakespeare, this is how you know I am the real one.

>> No.2267325

>>2267320
Out of here, you imposter.

>> No.2267326

>>2267320
Never mind me, I'm just an impostor

>> No.2267327

I hope - no I wait, I KNOW that this kid is so butthurt right now.

"Screw this! I didn't want to be in your club anyway!"

>> No.2267334

>>2267327
OP was a faggot, sure: but his poetry wasn't that bad.
He's the 1% of poets who actually use rhyme, instead of the 99% who don't use rhyme scheme (hurr durr, too hipster - go free verse shit!)

>> No.2267335

>>2267042
So dry it put me to sleep.

>> No.2267337

No, I am Corazon Di Poeta.

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>>2267316
>>2267320
>>2267325
>>2267326

>> No.2267344

>>2267335
Well, I kind of liked it.
It resonates.
But, that's just me.
Because, personally, I think real poetry is a dying art.

>> No.2267355

Stop trying to pretend that you're me guys. You all so fucking jealous that you can't even admit my poetry is better that anything you'll ever writing.

Faggot neckbeard losers.

>> No.2267356

>>2267325
>>2267326
What villainy is this?! I assumed that my tripcode was secure, as any plebeian trying to duplicate what is typed by my hand would have their digits to turn into heart devouring maggots. But you imposters seem to be using black sorcery of some sort and I ask of you to stop before I call the police as tripcode theft is a crime!

>> No.2267360

>>2267355
>implying I would use such banal language as "neckbeard" or "faggot"

Please, you belittle my artistic talent.

>> No.2267362

I love you, Corazon.
Your expression of nature
That is the human kind.
The manifestation of sins into word
Which you spew onto a table of vagrants.
But I love you
If for nothing else the smile your shitty poetry gifts to me.
And if you ever compare yourself to Shakespeare again, I will hire a hitman to rape your mother and kill your dog.

>> No.2267363

>>2267311
>>2267312
>>2267316
>>2267320
>>2267325
>>2267326
>>2267337
>>2267342
>>2267355
>>2267356
Fie, devils! To whom do I complain on account of this attempted literary usurpation!? It is only I and I alone who to be poetry kind! And rhyming no less!

>> No.2267365

You guys clearly show how plebeian you truly are.

>> No.2267366

>Dead art
FTFY

>> No.2267372

Can you post another of your poems so we can better offer you advice OP

>> No.2267376

I have to keep telling myself OP i a troll, because I honestly have known people like this who were so convinced they were so great they could be published, or sponsored, or what have you.

You are no different than anyone else, OP.

Ask yourself: What do you have to offer the literary arts besides boring phrasing and the same images we've all seen again and again.

>> No.2267378

let's form a Corazon Di Poeta society. We'll all contribute terrible poetry and then compliment each other for being better than Shakespeare and Milton

>> No.2267382

>>2267378
This sounds like it has potential.

>> No.2267386

The sky burns blue
As rain falls down
And makes the green brown

And by the way I'm 18 so you can all suck on my pubescent chode,

>> No.2267389

>>2267386
ooooh yes i would like to please

>> No.2267392

>>2267386
Brilliant! A new Milton has arisen!

How about this (I'm 18 yo, btw):

The stick sticks stickly
I feel a bit sickly
I throw up bits of prickly
Pear all about the ground

>> No.2267393

Really you plebs, just stop it.

>> No.2267398

I give you another of my thought-children!

Uh, camo shorts and bubble kush
We can talk she rather fuss
This and dat bout such and such
Damn, man where is the fuckin trust
Im tired of tha hootin hollerin
Im bout to take the coupe to collins
Then take a female to the islands
Uh then take her clothes off and do the honors
Yea she hear I'm wit dem otha bitches
I tol her mind her fuckin business
Shit she prolly out chea fuckin niggas
Im fuckin her friends now her friends aint even fuckin wit her
Damn she text me all day and night
So pissed off she aint even spellin shit right
I text her back and tell her it's life
Now somebody tell dem hoes I'm single for da night

>> No.2267401

>>2267398
Bravo! Byron would be jealous.

>> No.2267408

>>2267401
I thank you. Notice that I have made it rhyme, unlike so many contemporary... well, I feel sickened to use the word "poets" on those uncultured swine.

>> No.2267425

>>2267398
Yes, yes! Job well done chap! But to call it something as dirty as a "job" or anything else as worldly as what we could speak would tarnish its resplendence. Suffice it to say Good ..., chap!

>> No.2267438

I'll just leave this here:
http://chanarchive.org/request_votes

>> No.2267446

What do you think of this, OP? I value your opinions.

You drink up the amber syrup of our autumn,
keeping the blood in your veins - despite the captain’s orders,
and I sit in the gloam of stained-wood palaces,
dreaming not of winter
but of the hot matter that wheels through town at night
saturating the pillows of sleepers
lurching them from their beds with the night terrors of our final revolution.

Long live the captain!
Long live the president!
Long live the infernal signifiers of our eternal love, our intrinsic faith,
our immaculate avalanche praise that even the pigs and the mountains acknowledge.

At least-

that's what we'd dream about.
The downhill realities of our middle class leisure
leave much more to desire, much more to overcome
than the minor injustices of a degenerate democracy.

So in the daydream unreality of our fast-food apathy jobs,
you seduce public officials before slitting their throats,
and I mix the chemicals, yes sir,
it’s all ready sir,
this bastard won’t live to see another day.

>> No.2267452

>>2267438
>archived
>we're sorry, but something went wrong.
That's not fair.

>> No.2267456

>>2267452
chanarchive is sometimes glitchy when it first archives a thread. It usually seems to come right within a day.

It's automatically archived on warosu.org anyway:
fuuka.warosu.org/lit/thread/2267017

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Funniest thread in /lit/.
Great troll OP.
15/10
Shit, you could even make a career out of that trolling gift you got there nigga.

>> No.2267504

>>2267216
Published? No fuckin way? Let's see it, man. I didn't know such people existed on /lit/.

>> No.2267514

I've been working on this one for about a month, and I think it's nearly perfected. Tell me what you think, /lit/:

------------------

I like my seat down low and my window slightly
Cracked riding with a bad hoe and her girlfriend in the back
I like to get real high and never look back and you don't wanna try me don't
I look strapped

I come from the hardest city ain't nobody fucking with it
Got a black and gold sole and a fresh new Orleans fitted,
A collared polo and a pair of bally bucks

Young money, motherfucker, know you worried about us
Cash money, motherfucker, C.M.R. I trust
Never had my jaw broken but his jaw I bust
And I probably got your girlfriend on my bus
What happened on my bus stays on my bus
And that white widow weed out the jar is a must
if you gimme a cigar then a cigar I bust
Put that white widow weed in the cigar and puff
Look ma I'm trying to make a porno starring us
Well not just us, a couple foreign sluts
We could make the summer manal n tralling you all
And I be with Jim Jones and we be balling balling, yeah
Baby we balling like rawlin and spaldin pint of DJ
Screw and that Hawaiian I am leaning like a three
Legged lion climbing right to the top of the motherfucking mountain
counting I'm gonna need an accountant
To count it, many got this fucking beat pounding it's
Pounding but it was just lost until I found it, found it
Stole it like a scoundrel holly grove hounded put
This bitch to sleep fucking right I night gowned it
Niggas talking shit tell them niggas pipe down
Bitch bloods in the building and every body soundless
beating up the track like a motherfucking round fist
Blind, deaf or crazy I will spit like a long kiss
I am just a martian ain't nobody else on this
Planet I know see I live by my only
Where my cheese, nigga, where my macaroni?

-------

My major concern about the piece is that you gotta be from New Orleans to know what fuck I'm talking about.

>> No.2267523

This is the last one I'm gonna post tonight. I like this one the best because my ex-gf inspired me to write this about two years ago.

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In the night, I hear them talk the coldest story ever told
Somewhere far along this road, he lost his soul
To a woman so heartless
How could you be so heartless
Oh, how could you be so heartless?

How could you be so cold as the winter wind when it breeze yo
Just remember that you talking to me yo
You need to watch the way you talking to me yo
I mean after all the things that we been through
I mean after all the things we got into
Ayo, I know there are some things that you ain't told me
Ayo, I did some things but that's the old me
And now you wanna get me back and you gonna show me
So you walk around like you don't know me
You got a new friend, well I got homies
But in the end it's still so lonely

How could you be so Dr. Evil?
You bringing out a side of me that I don't know
I decided we weren't gonna speak so
Why we up 3 A.M. on the phone?
Why though she be so mad at me for?
Homie I don't know she's hot and cold
I won't stop wont mess my groove up
Cause I already know how this thing go
You run and tell your friends that you're leaving me
They say that they don't see what you see in me
You wait a couple months then you gonna see
You'll never find nobody better than me

Talking talking talking talk
Baby lets just knock it off
They don't know what we been through
They don't know about me and you
So why I got something new to see?
And you just gonna be keep hating me
And we just gonna be enemies
I know you can't believe
I could just leave it wrong
And you can't make it right
I'm gonna take off tonight

------------------
i miss her so msuch

>> No.2267529

Thread summary:

OP's retarded, yet somehow shits out a halfway not terrible poem.

OP gets all buttdevastated over nothing.

We OP now.

>> No.2267535 [DELETED] 

>>2267514
i miss her so msuch
Mumblin misery, wit my mummy
Mummy dearest, the wolfman cometh
The iceman, yes, liquid swords
Words and gourds, I am
I yam, hhhchmmm, I'm takin a bite
Outta it, outta the big apple, apple jax, rotten to the core
The third rail, I'mma rail it, I'mma piss on it
Pissed on peons, R Kelly messed wit
Mix'd it, but it don't sound any cleaner
Dem beats like breakers, surfeit in the deep
I believe that the remix of Swim added nothin to it
And now I've said my piece, I think I'll go polish
My piece beneath the sheets, g'night, /lit/
G'night, Corazon, you brazen faggot

>> No.2267536

>>2267523
i miss her so msuch
Mumblin misery, wit my mummy
Mummy dearest, the wolfman cometh
The iceman, yes, liquid swords
Words and gourds, I am
I yam, hhhchmmm, I'm takin a bite
Outta it, outta the big apple, apple jax, rotten to the core
The third rail, I'mma rail it, I'mma piss on it
Pissed on peons, R Kelly messed wit
Mix'd it, but it don't sound any cleaner
Dem beats like breakers, surfeit in the deep
I believe that the remix of Swim added nothin to it
And now I've said my piece, I think I'll go polish
My piece beneath the sheets, g'night, /lit/
G'night, Corazon, you brazen faggot

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>>2267536
>The iceman, yes, liquid swords

What if the swords ... represented innocence?

>> No.2267545

>>2267541
I think if you go to this
http://www.goatse.info/
address, everything will become clear...

>> No.2267565

>>2267529
More like "OP's retarded, and shits out Creed".