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Anthony logged into Gmail chat.

Susanna was online. Susanna was the only person online.

"hey :))))" she writes. It's 4:38am

"you're either up very late, which is porbably bad, or up very early, which is probably good" Anthony replies, feeling his eyelids trying to close and his head nodding forward.

"I saw an old couple today," Susanna writes, "they were walking in the park and holding hands. It made me feel an emotion I haven't felt before, so I don't know what to call it. It kinda felt like nostaglia but mostly something else"

"I think I have a name for every emotion I've ever felt," says Anthony, realizing soon after that he lacks a conviction for this statement but feeling too tired to explain or withdraw it.

"They threw some bread to the ducks, the ducks came over and seemed happy"

"Happy"

"They threw the bread into the air and the ducks scrambled to eat it. I think the bigger ducks got most of the bread, which is sad."

"I think the last time I felt an emotion I couldn't name was when I visited my parent's home from college without telling them in advance, and found that my mom hadn't dyed her hair, and noticed that her roots were gray"

"I left the park since I didn't have any bread and the old people left and I went from feeling something I don't know the name of to quickly feeling sad, which is why I think the yet-unnamed emotion is probably closer to the sad end of the spectrum"

"I'm going to go to bed now" says Anthony, and logs off.

He walks over and falls onto his stomach, and thinks of sleep. His eyes feel less heavy and he feels like signing back in, but doesn't.

>> No.4056677

plz gib fame

>> No.4056683

Do more of these so that I can live vicariously through them, and pretend the emotions that I sometimes feel are more meaningful on a grand scale than they actually are, or ever will be

>> No.4056714

>>4056666
>It's 4:38am in the morning

ftfy

>> No.4056724

man what's the point of a jerk off tent if it's see through
I mean it's suspicious if I've got this weird tent over my pants and I'm sticking my hand in it
but come on if I'm going to jerk off in public I'm going to try to be inconspicuous about it

>> No.4056725

They stop and stand in a small circle of orange light without speaking. Veronika sits down on the sidewalk and crosses her legs. Renowned author Tao Lin sits down next to her but doesn't cross his legs.

"I wrote the word myopic on the side of my chucks but I don't remember why" Veronika says, trying to smudge written on the side of her shoe.

"I used to write swearwords and insults about people on my school trousers" says renowned author Tao Lin, "the ink was the same colour as the material so you could only read them under a certain light"

Veronika curls into the foetal position with her head laying atop the triangle formed by renowned author Tao Lin's legs, one of which is outstretched and the other folded and tucked under the outstretched leg.

"Last week we were playing around in school and two of my friends grabbed my arms and pulled me two different ways at the same time"

"I've never played tug of war with a human being" says renowned author Tao Lin.

"The scars on my arms opened from where I used to cut myself with the blade from my mom'sp pencil sharpener. All this blood started running from my sleeves and onto my friends' hands and they screamed"

"I've never owned an electric pencil sharpener," says renowned author Tao Lin while tonguing the inside of his cheek, "I remember seeing advertisements about electric pencil sharpeners but I never saw anybody who had one, so I don't know if they were even a thing"

"One time my mom went into my room and found the bloody towel I used to put pressure on my cuts. I blamed it on the dog and the dog got put down. I wish I knew where they buried him so I could go there and tell him I'm sorry, I think it's a he anyway, I don't know"

"I had one of those large pencil sharpeners that was basically a pencil sharpener that faced upwards with a small plastic box underneath, and I'd open it and the shavings would go everywhere and no matter how hard you blew and swept them away there'd be these little shavings all around."

A car goes by. More insects gather beneath the light overhead. Renowned author Tao Lin zips up his hoody. Veronika raises herself to her former cross-legged position and checks her phone.

"I have to go inside now, my curfew has passed already".

"You have ink all over our fingertips," says renowned author Tao Lin.

>> No.4056746

The girl's body is pale and petite and is pressing against Nathaniel's side. He thinks of how his dog, Glenn, always used to lay against things (doors, walls, bodies), as if he liked having the pressure of something against his body.

Nathaniel's right arm feels slightly numb having been stretched horizontally under the girl's body for over an hour. He rolls his head to the side and notices that the girl's chest doesn't rise and fall when she sleeps, and that her breasts have dissappeared since she's laying on her back. He feels the momentary urge to roll her over and see them fall out again.

Nathaniel keeps his right arm still and slowly adjusts his body so that he is laying on his side, hooking his left leg over the girl and rubbing his nose into her scalp and exhales, then adjustss a little more.

He feels his body being taken over by sleep, as if it's hacked his brain and has press shut down, allowing him only a few seconds to whisper 'I love you' into the girl's ear before he is switched off for the night. He begins to say 'I love you' but falls asleep, and the breath he'd inhaled to deliver the message comes out in a loud, high-pressure sigh into her ear, but this does not wake the pillow.

>> No.4056751

Stop allowing your attention to be drawn elsewhere and read my stories, then reblog them and give me bitcoins

>> No.4056758

>>4056724
Right, because an opaque tent would be even a bit inconspicuous.

>> No.4056759

Wat

>> No.4056764

"These stories are good"

"With the publication of these stories, Anonymous has become the voice of the 24th of August"

"Sometimes I read a story and know it's a story, and I felt that feeling when I read these stories"

"Wow, nice stories, actually pretty interesting and good"

>> No.4056767

>>4056746
>>4056725
These are awful. And not in a good way. Keep trying though.

>> No.4056775

>>4056767
That's one subjective opinion among a billion or so possible opinions. These stories are very "good" and "interesting", many people would say this, we both know this.

>> No.4056783

>>4056775
many has to be greater than seven. I doubt if even 3 people will even read them. Sorry chum

>> No.4056786

>>4056783
>>4056775
and your face is a subjective opinion

>> No.4056787

>>4056783
When we transcend our flesh-based bodies and become one with the machine/universe everyone will 'read' these stories, so I don't see your point.

>> No.4056789

gtbt

>> No.4056791

>>4056787
my mistake

>> No.4056794

Please write your name in the 'name' space indicated in the comment box. I will be using any positive comments to promote these stories on a wider forum.

>> No.4056799

>>4056787
I read your whole post in the Tart-Toter's voice and I wasn't even prompted to do so.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=CGhatMJQ4OY

>> No.4056797

>>4056794
what forum?

>> No.4056796

>>4056724
I think it's really more for etiquette than anything.

>> No.4056800

It looks like it's time for Tao Lin to throw the towel in! There's a new Tao Lin in town, and he's better at Tao Lin than Tao Lin is himself.

>> No.4056805

>>4056797
I have a list of forums I will be posting these on in order to nurture my fanbase and gain a wider audience.

The forum I'm scheduled to post these on after this is hikiculture.net, where I expect an "average" to "good" response.

>> No.4056807

>>4056800
Thank you for your positive feedback Robert

>> No.4056811

>>4056807
that's not positive

>> No.4056813

>>4056811
The quote I will use is "There's a new Tao Lin in town". Thank you.

>> No.4056817

Provoking stuff.

>> No.4056818

>>4056817
Thank you for your positive feedback Mark.

>> No.4056826

>>4056813
Your decision to misquote will be forever preserved on the fuuka archive and used against you.

>> No.4056835

>>4056826
I didn't misquote, I selectively quoted. It's very common in publishing.

>> No.4056840

>>4056813
Don't listen to him. It was meant to be a compliment.

>> No.4056842
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4056842

>>4056818
A new spark in alt-lit writing.

>> No.4056848

>>4056835
Do you have a blog or a larger sample of your writing for us to enjoy?

>> No.4056849

>>4056842
Thank you for the positive feedback Guy

>> No.4056850

>>4056848
I am in the process of creating a tumblr., because my research suggest this is an efficacious way to disseminate my writing as widely as possible, however I would appreciate any suggestions you may have in regards to this.

>> No.4056851

>>4056850
Making a very simple site with links to your work - as well as a blog, is good I think.

>> No.4056852

>>4056851
Thank you Guy, I will have to conduct further research into these things.

>> No.4056862
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4056862

>>4056666
I read this and felt nothing and then felt sad and then thought I felt happy but felt nothing. I opened this and begun to type and explain the way it made me feel. I think it is "very" "good", but I am not sure, because then again that could just be the xanax I ingested. Either way, (I think) that you should publish this (for a wider audience) so more people can experience the spectrum of (nothing, sad, happy).

>> No.4056869

>>4056862
Thank you for the positive feedback Jenne

>> No.4056877

>>4056835
Your "selective quotation" changed the meaning of the quote. It is misquotation.

It will be used against you.

>> No.4056881

>>4056877
Robert said it was used as a compliment. If he asks me not to selectively quote from his feedback then I will honour this wishes.

>> No.4056892

I'd rather eat my balls with a spoon than read more of that.

>> No.4056894

>>4056892
Thanks Tom.

>> No.4056897

>>4056894
You're welcome, Tao.

>> No.4056916

>>4056897
I am not Tao

>> No.4056920

>>4056881
I am me and I am a cunt. Thanks me for my compliment.

Tao Lin was Anonymous. It was 08:43 UTC+10. He pressed 4056881 and then typed into the Quick Reply box on /lit/, "I am me and I am a cunt. Thanks me for my compliment…" He pressed tab twice and then shift tab once, then typed "and StuditdC". He pressed return.

>> No.4056923

>>4056920
I like your story.

I should have added my name when posting my stories to make sure people know which ones are my own.

>> No.4056926

>>4056923
we can tell by how they are obnoxious

>> No.4056953

>>4056923
But I did added my name when I posted my story to make sure people knew which ones were my own because I am Tao Lin. Why did I even type, "I should have added my name when posting my stories to make sure people know which ones are my own."?

"I really am a cunt," typed Tao Lin as he typed, "I really am a cunt."

>> No.4056983

>>4056850
>efficacious way to disseminate

Get a load of this guy

>> No.4057362

>>4056725
This one is actually really good.

>> No.4057394

>>4056683
>living vicariously through online conversations

just go to omegle or something damn

>> No.4057405

>>4056881
I am me and I am a cunt. Thanks me for my compliment…

>> No.4057453

>>4056714
Stupid americunts can't into 24-hour clock.

>> No.4057472

>>4056666
my name is anthony and I like that story because it lets me pretend I can speak to women.
It sort of reminds me of raymond carver, especially then ending. I like it.

>> No.4057946 [DELETED] 

>>4057394
ew strangers

>> No.4058021

>>4056746
I thought all three of these were great. Feel free to paraphrase me liberally on that as I'm much too deleriously tired to give you any meaningful feedback worth quoting. But in all seriousness, you've got some good stuff here. (Or hell.. just quite me directly. The sincerity is here if a little awkward).

>> No.4058079

>>4057362
Thank you for your positive feedback

>> No.4058085

>>4057472
Thank your for your positive feedback Anthony

>> No.4058086

>>4058021
Thank you for your positive feedback Ethan

>> No.4058157

Cool stories

>> No.4058190

Thanks for the great feedback.

"There's a new Tao Lin in town" - Robert Baldwin.

"Provoking stuff" - Mark Twain.

"A new spark in alt-lit writing" - Guy Montag

"I think it is "very" "good" - Jenne Marbles

"I thought all three of these were great [...] some good stuff here" - Ethan Hardis

>> No.4058293

Challenges the mind, but ultimately touches the heart. A remarkable tour de force.

>> No.4058327

>>4058293
Thanks for the positive feedback Harold

>> No.4058359

>>4056746

this on made me 'heh'

gg

>> No.4058370

>>4058359
Thank you for your positive feedback

>> No.4058388

what the fuck is occuring in this thread

>> No.4058392

>>4058388
I've written a 'collection' of short stories and a novella. I'm posting some of my shortest stories here so that I may receive feedback and hopefully earn myself a readership.

>> No.4058419

>>4056666
>>4058392
It's garbage, please fuck off.

>> No.4058540

>>4058419
Thanks for reading at least

>> No.4058603

>>4056724
I just thought it was so you did not get cum all over your books. I did not think it was for public masturbation.