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>I’ve begun my voyage in a paper boat without a bottom; I will fly to the moon in it. I have been folded along a crease in time, a weakness in the sheet of life. Now, you’ve settled on the opposite side of the paper to me; I can see your traces in the ink that soaks through the fibre, the pulped vegetation. When we become waterlogged, and the cage disintegrates, we will intermingle. When this paper aeroplane leaves the cliff edge, and carves parallel vapour trails in the dark, we will come together.

>When you were born, your mother told me, a hush fell over the delivery room. A great red birthmark covered the left side of your face. No one knew what to say, so you cried to fill the vacuum. I always admired you for that; that you cried to fill whatever vacuum you found. I began to manufacture vacuums, just to enable you to deploy your talent. The birthmark faded by the time you were six, and had gone completely by the time we met, but your fascination with the empty, and its cure, remained.

Is there a name for this style?

>> No.5720944

Literally the worst, most pretentious game ever

>> No.5721191

test

>> No.5724358

bump

>> No.5725018

No one?

>> No.5725031
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5725031

franchise killer

>>5725018
and holy shit if you had waited one more second I would have posted but your post popping up crashed my shitty laptop while I was typing it.

>> No.5725040

>>5720937
>Is there a name for this style?

Purple prose.

>> No.5725749

>>5720944
Might be, but even so, the soundtrack and the narration are like, really enjoyable.

>> No.5725775

>>5725040
Not everything that isn't a shameless copy of Hemingway is 'purple.'

>> No.5726944

>>5720937
sauce nigger

>> No.5726987

>>5726944
Could you not use that word?

>> No.5726998

i would use the word turgid

>> No.5727024

>>5720937
No idea about the style, but it made me think of poetry.

I played this after my Mom passed away and I found it to be a very profound experience. The game is really about grief and it felt like the narration and scenery gave voice to what I was feeling at that time.

Dear Ester is still one of my favorite games.

>> No.5727033

>>5726998
its official then
turgid is the n word for the modern day meaning

>> No.5727082

>>5726987
What, "sauce?"

*seinfeld tune*

>> No.5727083

>>5727024
LOL

>> No.5727093

>>5720944
I thought it was neat. Very spooky. Not really a game though. And yeah, I guess it was pretty pretentious.

The very beginning and the part in OP's pic were real cool though.

And I recall the menu had nice sound effects.

>> No.5727119

>>5727024
>game

>> No.5727126

>>5720944
Yep lol

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5727187

>>5727082
10/10

>> No.5727190

>>5727082
>tfw i seriously thought he was referring to "sauce"
this board has fucked me so much that i think it's more likely someone is offended by "sauce" than "nigger"

>> No.5727201

>>5727190
Well, to be fair, on this board it is. People are far more bothered by subhuman meme-speak than age old profanities.

>> No.5727437

>>5726987
>>5727033
>>5727082
>>5727190
>>5727201

You are all spectacular faggots. Sorry it's not acceptable to shout "nigger" at Starbucks while you're typing your screenplay on an iMac and texting your friendzoned BFF with an iPhone while sipping chai latte, but this is 4chan.

Nigger.

>> No.5727466

>>5727437
I was just making a joke, you fucking gun-jumping mongoloid.

>> No.5727508

>>5727466

Sorry I can't hear you over the avalanche of cash that's dropping out of your screenplay.

>> No.5727555

>>5727508
>>5727437
Yeah, you're damn clever, bud. No one has ever made fun of the stereotypical Starbucks hipster with that exact motherfucking imagery before, that's all you, faggot. I'm glad we live in a world where people who are trying to be funny are expected to have the wit to come up with their own jokes and ideas instead of photocopying one that has been made five million times by every shitty comedian that has ever volunteered for Open Mic Night.

You're a fucking stupid, unfunny nigger

>> No.5727566

>>5720937
I remember reading the Dear Esther transcript before I got into literature and being completely blown away. I want to revisit it but I'm afraid to ruin the nostalgia.

>> No.5727568

>>5727190
I just realized that's unusual.

>> No.5727616

>>5727555

Uh oh, sounds like someone's getting a little buttmad. Better go call up your BFF and cry it out.

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>>5727616

>> No.5728393

>>5727566
Here you have, if you're curious.
http://dearesther.wikia.com/wiki/Dear_Esther_Script

>> No.5728397

Purple prose.

>> No.5729443

>>5725040
>>5728397
Maybe "purple prose" is a too wide term.

>> No.5729500

>>5725040
that's not purple prose. It'd be purple if the paragraph covered at least half a page without actually talking about anything

>> No.5730026

>>5729500
Oh, you.

>> No.5730222

>>5729500
not him, but it's definitely purple prose.
It's typical self-indulgent stuff, where certain sentences exist only to sound good and nothing more.
Like look at the first excerpt:
>"I've begun my voyage in a paper boat without a bottom; I will fly to the moon in it."
This sentence makes no sense, mainly because there's a total confusion of metaphor. Boats don't fly, and the semicolon seems really out of place because of this. Also key characteristics in description go totally unexposed, like the fact the boat is bottomless holds no gravity because there's not enough context to discern why it's important that it's bottomless. It just comes across as cheesy and forced.

>"I have been folded along a crease in time, a weakness in the sheet of life. Now, you've settled on the opposite side of the paper to me; I can see your traces in the ink that soaks through the fibre, the pulped vegetation."
I like this part the most, but it's still really messy. I like the imagery of paper being folded and ink on opposite sides of the page meeting together through this fold. Getting to the meaning of this sentence is painful though, stuff like "a weakness in the sheet of life" is fitting but superfluous. And then theres the "pulped vegitation" aside that doesn't really fit at all; there's just no purpose for it other than it fits the paper theme loosely.

>"When we become waterlogged, and the cage disintegrates, we will intermingle. When this paper aeroplane leaves the cliff edge, and carves parallel vapour trails in the dark, we will come together."
Waterlogged is to be an assumed continuation of the "boat" theme, but then the next sentence he's talking about an aeroplane. Again there's this confusion of boat and flight and it just doesn't make any sense. In essence the second sentence is completely redundant. The first sentence explains that when the paper boat becomes waterlogged, the ink will blend and that's how the two will meet or become one. Then the second sentence comes along and says, "wait no actually we're gonna be an airplane, but there's two vapour trails so there's two people, and then we'll come together through this somehow...again." Also there's the random cage metaphor that's introduced out of nowhere and makes no sense.

There's absolutely no semblance of control in this excerpt. There's a lot of neat individual ideas, but how they're composed is senseless. There's no discernible relation between the boat and aeroplane, other than the fact that it's a recurring theme. Things that need exposition or context just don't receive it. I can see where the writer is trying to explain one metaphor with the introduction of another, but then the complimentary metaphors aren't relevant and the entire thing comes off as convoluted.

>> No.5730286

>>5730222
This guy get this

Its highschool poetry, aka, Ive never read poetry but im going to write poetry, and then put into the form of prose.

>> No.5730299

Cool meter and images. But just like any other, it talks of triviality, inner anguish and thoughts and nothing short of uninspired and relies too highly of short images and sentimentality.

If you're gonna go full purple, I find you will need humour to balance it out.

>> No.5730608

>>5730222
OP texts are just scattered fragments. It all makes sense in the correct context. See >>5728393

>>5730286
>Its highschool poetry
According to you, what is superior to this?

>> No.5730797
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5730797

>>5730608

>>5730286
here

Any prose that actually creates a metaphor that reveals something about some topic that could otherwise not be revealed or would have been incredibly clunky.

A well known but rarely discussed phenomenon through a concrete anecdote is usually pretty good. Also, it should fit in the piece in general.