/lit/ - Literature

[Anonymous No.5871385]

Feedback? I'm sure all of you feel this way.

How is life when the will of the forceful mass
Begins to supersede the individual?
Where free thought is second to law and tradition,
And organization’s law runs amoral?

How is life when the first third is a rehab from nature?
Where freedom, imagination, and adventure
Are lost behind locks with no keys.
Where the second is willing servitude,
And the final is wrought with disease?

How is life where employees are many and tasks few,
When we need business more than they need you?
Where obedience and repetition are always perfect form,
How long can it be till automation is the norm?

How is life in the first world,
Where the rich become fat, the poor go hungry,
And landfills overflow?
When camping, hunting, and risk are for leisure,
Don’t you think that we would know?

How is life in the developed, when birth rates freeze?
Where suicide is common and sadness becomes disease?
When pills and a lighted box can substitute reality,
Delusion and ignorance are all that keep us free.

Only when I wonder ‘How is death?’
Does my mood begin to grow.
Maybe it can save me yet,
From a world I could never know.

[kitty !kitty/EnNg No.5871397]

>>5871385
don't litter the board, we have several critique threads

[Anonymous No.5871406]

>>5871385
>Not in metre

You dun goof'd. Trash it.

[Anonymous No.5871460]

>>5871406
free verse not working for you?

>>5871397
sorry about that

[Anonymous No.5871464]

>>5871385
>When camping, hunting, and risk are for leisure,
>Don’t you think that we would know?
know what?

[Anonymous No.5871510]

>>5871464
That living in complex, coddling, modern society is not fulfilling. Living outdoors, trapping your own food, and the excitement of surviving risk is so natural and necessary for our wellbeing that we do it despite not having to for survival.