/lit/ - Literature

I liked it, good job. The one part that throws me off a bit is the fact that you use so many commas and periods, but that's just me.

>>918836

No.

Female.
Yes.
Yes.
Half-way; I wish I grew up with video games.
No, I work my ass off.
Yes.
Yes.

>>916423

And yet you are still getting suggestions, as well as some people defending you. Don't focus on the few people who are bashing you for your age and rule breaking, cause that's just tiring and they will never understand. Just go read a book.

>>916399

To be honest, Slaughterhouse Five was the first and only book I've read by him, but I'll consider reading Breakfast of Champions.

K, so I definitely think you need to get back in school, but it's not my place to judge. Good luck with the future, and I don't mean that in a sarcastic way. Your age means little to me; I've seen people here post the dumbest shit and they are possibly older than you are, so age says nothing about a person.

That being said, I recommend books by Isaac Asimov and also Slaughterhouse 5 by Kurt Vonnegut. Anton Chekhov is a good writer as well.

>>916116

I think you just need a vacation and some time to relax; go read a book or something. Seriously, don't get too worked up about it because it might come back to bite you in the ass. Negative thinking puts you down and makes you feel like shit.

>>916082

Take up tutoring or something; get help or do research yourself. Shudda paid attention in high school, man! Or maybe that's just your way of thinking getting in the way; you probably know more than you realize.

I've went through that. Believe in yourself, OP. If you think you are smart, you will be, and don't let anyone else let you think differently. And you know, it's not about whether or not you are smart in a certain subject; I think if you genuinely enjoy said physics or philosophy, etc., you should do it. But don't let that existential way of thinking affect you, because it will only wear you down and make you think less of yourself.

>>915570

Don't bring Mass Effect into this or so help me God I will find you and murder you.

>Aliens/Predator

I hope the whole Twilight cast is gang-raped by either Xenomorphs or Yautjas.

>>910878

Beautifully written, and very powerful.

>>910868

Your welcome, good luck!

>>910830

It's always good to write, I think. It lets your mind wander and think a bit.

>>910844

How about:

The sky kas split and the clouds they retain
They still have that same quality
White they had when I left

I dunno, something about that 'quality white' part seems a little off as well.

>>910730
>>910713

Be sure to look over the spelling mistakes before you post. I think the 'hath' is kind of misplaced and disrupts the flow of the poem, as does 'fluffiness'. Edit those parts and I think the poem will sound very nice.

>>910704

>and it's poetry is a art
I don't comprehend.

>>910662

Fair enough. It is your opinion, so I won't argue with that.

>>910549

Poetry is an art form. It is undefined. What seems like crap to you might seem like a masterpiece to someone else. Just because a poem rhymes or is written a certain way does not make it better than others.

>>909757

...the fuck.

Also, I remember The Time Traveler's Wife being a great book. No, I didn't watch the movie nor do I want to.

Don't know, but I bet you someone is going to say Twilight.

>>909135

That's a good way of starting things out. Maybe you should write that down on a separate sheet of paper and look over the characteristics, and then pick what you would like to include in your story. Too many details makes things overcomplicated and hard to read. You want your readers to understand the story and get the picture at the same time. It can be hard, but sooner or later you will get the hang of it. So go over what you write and question yourself, "Do I really need this description and these words over there?" Smooth and polished.

>>909062

No problem. As I'm reading this, I notice that you might use certain descriptions and other information in the wrong places, and sometimes they aren't really needed at all. One example would be the description of what the man and his wife look like. I think that instead of bothering with that, you should just leave it up to the imagination of the readers. Keep this one in mind, too: show, don't tell. Don't tell how that person is feeling, but show it.

I'll try to read this sometime today (already started), and I did notice the many commas as the previous Anon stated. One way to think about it is this:

For every comma, that is a pause in the sentence in real life. That is how I see it. So read the sentence back out loud and pause where the comma is, and decide for yourself if the pause was necessary. Also, my teacher once told me that in a sentence, if you used a comma, look back and see if the first part (before you put in the comma) can become a sentence on its own. That doesn't apply when you use words like 'however' though, I think.

Not so good with describing these things online. I apologize if it sounds a bit confusing, and hell, maybe I am wrong about this.

Oh, remembered one.

"It is a far, far better thing that I do than I have ever done. It is a far, far better place that I go to than I have ever known."

‎"Send me into the dark and I will live again, and return."

"When I get older I will be stronger, they'll call me freedom, just like a wavin' flag."

I have a few more but I don't remember them off the top of my head.