/lit/ - Literature

because he's shit

An older failed version of the author escapes from suburbia through a series of road-trips and miscellaneous adventures, culminating in him leaving for South America after meeting two people that represent everything he both loves and hates about modern culture.

>>3121855
And OP can't write 4 shit.

Also, this is what 'wit' and 'sarcasm' do to a story.
It begins:

"I woke up at about ten in the morning. No work today, no
school ever again, and I’m a relatively rich, relatively successful and relatively
(when compared to a farm animal) good looking man. So life is pretty sweet. It’s
the usual kind of morning in my happy-go-lucky life. I rolled out of bed and
straight on to my computer chair. No joke, it’s the minimal amount of effort.
As the computer boots up I’m pushing chip packets and beer bottles out of my way.
The light of the monitor burns pretty bad when your eyes have barely adjusted
to being open after twelve hours of sleep, but hey, it’s preferable to opening
the curtains. That sunlight stuff will give you cancer."

Later:

"Bubble bath. With the music cranked up in my room so I can
sing along all the way in the bathroom. Hope the neighbours enjoy my five hundredth
replay of Mr Brightside. Anyways, the rest of the day pretty much goes down the
same way. Junk food, violent video games, and a half-hearted jab at lifting
those weights I got at Christmas. I swear, they may say they’re 20kgs but that
dust must add like, double that. And then it’s time to sit down with one big
ass pepperoni pizza and trawl through some mindless TV. Ergh, it’s time for the
news on like every channel. Except channel nine, A Current Affair’s on. And it’d
be an insult to the foundation of human intelligence to be calling that news."

(I found this gem on the Facebook page of a local university's 'writer's club')

>>3121739
this this this this this this this

>>3120959
That's the point kid.

Opening sentence is weak. Really, really weak.

The rest is so so.

What you need to do is take all over it and delete it, and then write it again. Get rid of all the 'sarcasm' and 'wit', it just makes the story tacky.

You should also consider having a stronger conflict in the story, because at the moment it just reads as if the narrator is whining at me because he is 'alt' and 'different' and no-one 'understands him and his movies'.

Tao Lin is gr8.

/lit/ needs to stop hating on him.

>no spike lee

/lit/ confirmed for plebs

God is with a capital G.

THIS IS NOT A HOMEWORK BOARD

Blake, Keats, Wordsworth and Coleridge.

/thread

Joyce would be way too much for highschool kids. It's hard enough to get them to read as it is.

"Oh, Jake," Brett said, "we could have had such a damned good time together."

Ahead was a mounted policeman in khaki directing traffic. He raised his baton. The car slowly turned pressing Brett against me.
"Yes," I said, "Isn't it pretty to think so?

- "The Sun Also Rises" Hemingway

DOWN AND OUT IN PARIS AND LONDON

Ulysses

>the local dialects

lolwut?

Go to bed Tao.

For Frankydank look at how the Monster is treated when he rescues the child (guilty before proven innocent) and look at how the maid or whatever is killed when the boy goes missing.

Haven't read Jane Eyre lulz.

Have a nice evening.

>>2606946
Tao Lin's writing is even simpler than Hemingway's. Extremely short sentences, strange topics.

I like his stuff though, I find it quite humorous. There is something wonderful about the subtlety. That being said, it can be quite painful at times.

Try www.bearparade.com if you're interested.

>>2606934
So Tao Lin?

And anyway, writing a story about our current dependence on technology would suck. I wouldn't read it. It doesn't have that same ugh "romantic" quality that a 1920s Parisian cafe does.

>>2606926
The first part of The Sun Also Rises is basically my life.

>>2606690
>Hemingway
>2deep4u

wait, what?

>And, as a side note, which of these authors are
>considered bad, and why?
>Hemingway, Rand, Nietsche, Orwell, Lovecraft

None. They all have their strengths and weaknesses. Only Rand is particularly hated.