/lit/ - Literature

I like it, except the man has no motivation for being out in the cold - he has a wagon.

As to this talk about him having no personality, I would have him show more bravery at first, Perhaps have him shout something like: "Show yourself and fight" as opposed to "keep away". It is much more foreboding if even the brave are helpless against whatever you're monster is.

Stylistically and descriptively it is quite good. My 1st criticism is that it is a tiny bit cliched, but I don't really have any suggestions on how to fix that, and its only a small issue. maybe its because I've been reading Game of thrones and that whole book is a masterclass on how to describe the cold.

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If you are at uni, Join a book club.

They will give you interesting things to read and set you a time frame to do it in, paradoxically a deadline can make it easier to read.

Pick a time to read, maybe for an hour or so in bed, or at lunch time.

Read books that interest you.

>>1723547
what is this?

>>1723543
guess ;)

>>1723539
English is my first language, But im a /sci/ student who sucks at spelling

>>1723530
but is it funny? or Should I change martha to K.

and K. Into a bug

and the bug into dead

like kafka might

J: ahhh im starting to see, how DO they think they can get away with
this?

*break*

martha stalls but starts to look more interested

J: (to himself) Its just going to go downhill from here... can I guess what you sk-
it is about?

M: mmhmm?

J: Is it: two people meet in a library and one of them is constatly br-
eaking the 4th wall (Aside) thats me (/aside) and another who is
ironicaly writing the same skit that they are in?

M: how did you know that?

J: (ignoring the question) Its not very funny.

M: hey!

J: Its not your fault, I mean your only a charachter... its not
like you wrote the thing...

M: Didn't I?

She shows john the paper she's writing.

J: *reading the script*
"john: Welcome!
martha: welcome to what, yadda yadda"
AHA!, how did you not realise that we were having the same conversation that you just
wrote?

Martha Gawks a john,

M: oh, I guess i didnt think of that...

J: I told you they couldnt get away with it...


M looks at audience
lights fade

Meta

Scene - a library at 4:30 John - Aware that his is in a skit - aproach
es Martha - an arts Student staring intently at a book, chewing
on a very short pencil and looking decheveled. Martha is not
Aware they are in a skit.

John: Welcome!

Martha: Welcome to what?

J: Well its the start of the skit, so I thought I welcome you! Do you
realise you got the second line?

M: Umm, what the hell are you talking about? what do you mean skit? I
don't know about you but I'm here to work... so if you dont mind?

Martha raises her eyebrows a motions for John to leave, but he seems obliv-
ious to her intention to get any work done and pulls up a chair next to Ma-
rtha

J: What are you Working on?

M: Why do you want to know?

J: Well its probarbly important!

M: Important to what?

J: The punch line I assume...

Martha looks quizical

M: Punchline? whatever, If you must know Im working on a skit.

Hey /lit/

I wrote a skit, I think its funny, but Im too close to the creation to know that.

there is a link http://pastebin.com/BzmXFdPt

and I will Copypaste in thread. tell me what you think and/or give /adv/ on how to make it better.

Once upon a midnight dreary!

>>1447789
>>1447787
god damn it

jasper ffords the Eyre Affair

i said 88

it is pretty slow to day 88

hamlet was lazy. it was his fatal flaw in the end

>>1447778
tl;dr

steal ideas

if you cant think of any to steal then read more

because all points have really been made before.

I did not realize this until I started uni - unfortunatly Im a science student so I will never use the nugget of gold I am about to give you.

If you are a good technical writer, then steal. Not a whole story line, but an idea. for example looking around my desk I can see a book of tom stoppard plays - one is entitled dirty linen: about the overexposure of politicians private lives.

Bam, done. the moral is - polies can do whatever they want in their own time, so long as the country gets run.

no one?
no one has any opinions on the greatest play-write of our generation?

After seeing "Rock and Roll" and "Travesties" at the theater and watching "Rosencrantz and Guildenstern are dead", I have decided that this man is a genius.

is anyone here a Tom Stoppard aficionado? what else is good by him? - I picked up Doggs Hamlet and Cahoots Macbeth as well as a bunch of his other stuff. Is it as good reading as it is seeing?

tl;dr Tom stoppard is cool

Cause he wants to put his penis in fortinbras while horatio watches

recently I enjoyed Perfume: the story of a murderer by Patric Suskind

>>1086760
Im reading that now

>>1086590
Although its probably nothing, I always though Kafka was lazy with his characters' names. I mean, he called one of them K. for Gods sake (later revealing that K. was actually... KAFKA. no shit).