/lit/ - Literature

It came, killed many, then vanished.

I've always wanted to read the Foundation series.

>>1335307
I'd like to point out that the part that says 'asked Leo [adjective]' was a mistake on my part, where I wanted the author to put in an adjective to describe how the character is speaking.

The original text just says 'said Leo' instead.

>>1335040
>>1335066
My god, this is amazing.

>>1335056
What I posted is all I have. The tale was never completed.

>>1334840
He does this numerous times.

>>1334733
Pretty sure he's given up on it, if he's not pissed that I posted it up here.

There was an anon above pretending to be him though.

>>1334702
I know the guy, I have him on MSN.

He didn't post this on any site, he IM'd it to me so that I could proofread it.

>>1334631
I'd also like to point out that since Adra wanted me to proof-read this, obviously he did want to make something of it.

>>1334649
I have written some terrible shit in my time, that is true.

But you couldn't have taken anything from this. You could have laughed at your bad mistakes and moved on. I'm not criticising YOU as an author - I acknowledge that you were just starting out when you wrote this - I wanted to post this topic because I wanted to make some people laugh.
Besides, most of the shitty stuff I've written is fanfiction, and there are rules against putting up fanfiction on /lit/.

If you're the only person rallying for me to put up all of my work on the internet, I will not do so. Everyone else seems to be satisfied with what was tracked down from my blog.

>>1334631
You're not Adramelech, fuck off.

>>1334587
I have the original .doc if you'd like.

>>1334545
I was thinking of it, but it is totally not worth it. Especially since we have no conclusion.
Unless /lit/ wants to finish the story. Which is way too much effort.

>>1334382
Nope, the guy who wrote this doesn't do NanoWriMo, if he's even heard of it. This was just a novel he was writing.

>>1334146
I didn't write it. Good luck with that.

>>1334112
Just wait until you get to the vampires.
Just wait until you get to the fucking vampires.

>>1334050
Well, thanks! I still don't feel too great about it though, but if you wanted to read the full thing, an anon above you tracked down where I posted it.
>>1334019

>>1334053
There should not have been a follow-up post. It was a fine story to begin with, let the reader work out the ending.

>>1334051
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Not to mention that TGWTG is a very popular internet personality.

As opposed to the small forum I mentioned, which has 1112 members but only 10-20 are active.

>>1334037
No. As I said, the guy who wrote The Prophecy of Lords is from a very small forum.

>>1334019
I knew you'd find that, I fuckin' knew it.

>>1333898

Sorry for the late reply, I was eating breakfast.

I'm just not feeling it. I don't feel absorbed into the world. On top of that, I tend to use a lot of eloquent words, not quite to a purple degree, but it makes me cringe. I tend to be short on description as well.
Take for example this opening paragraph:

>The loud clanking of metal on metal resonated throughout the room as the android was gestured in. It was bleak and empty, black walls comprised solely of cold steel panels bound together rather oddly. There was nothing at all in the room, no light except for the flighty robot, flittering around the room, the sole mercurial light in its spherical frame flickering in and out of existence as tiny metal wings beat to keep it aloft.

I see at least one nastily-placed comma, a lack of description in the first sentence and too much eloquence in the second.

Maybe I'm just really anal and that's why I prefer taking apart others' terrible work than writing my own.

>>1333832
>>1333833
>>1333873
>>1333879

Honestly, I'd really rather not. What stuff I do have on the internet I hate with the force of a thousand suns. I am working on and off on something fairly major which I don't dislike too much, but it suffers from similar flaws.

Also, this topic is about this terrible story, not my own writings.

>>1333824
Nope, this has never been published. I don't know how many other people the author sent this to, but as far as I know he and I have the only copies.
If he did send it to other people though, my bet is that they shot him down so hard that he gave up.

>>1333823
Short stories, mostly dystopian science fiction. But I don't plan on linking to any of it, I hate the stuff I write.

>>1333817
Out of all of the terrible names in this story, you picked that one?

Myself, I couldn't stop giggling at the vampires' names.