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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

Previous thread:>>40831533

>> No.40884003
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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em.

>> No.40884061
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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
https://docs.google.com/forms/d/e/1FAIpQLScgcr8y7I9NUta22Ni0gFvS51veG5_7XjJrVD1BvJqDtX5_sQ/viewform

Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There were no stories posted in the last thread

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

MATSURI SEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEX:>>40838757

still requesting gigastacy haveing hot sweaty sex with holojp, i mean look at this:>>40846703

Exploring space with Mito.:>>40848351

Kurokami grudgingly letting you fuck her fox ears.:>>40849569

Anon being corrected with love and affection until he can no longer have lewd thoughts about chuubas!:>>40867935

>> No.40884768
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Imagine having Bae as your girlfriend:
>Constantly bursting with joy
>Loves taking care of (you)
>Very loving
>Kinda clingy
>Is the embodiment of chaos
>Has spent countless eons being hated and feared for what she is
>Has been lonely for just as long
>Has finally found love
>Will never let you go

>> No.40884918

>>40884061
(You) are a manager taking care of a VERY drunk chuuba who begins forcing herself on you. What do Mr. Anon Moose?

>> No.40885811

>sweaty stinky rat
UOOOOOOH FUJOCAST ANON I SUMMON THEE
PLEASE REPORT THE STATUS OF THE FIC if you are not working on it its okay tho

>> No.40888134

>>40885811
I'm not the Anon you mean, but I am writing my own fujocast fic and it's going OK I guess. It doesn't have any dumb hypnosis shit though if that's what you want.

>> No.40888261
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>>40885811
There were a couple Anon's discussing being a hypnotized fucktoy to a bunch of stinky fujo horndogs, but as one of them unfortunately I'm not working anything for that right now

>> No.40889034
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WRITING TIME
OH YEAH YEAH
OH YEAH YEAH
LOOK AT HER GO

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>>40889034
Thank you for the support, Smol Ame. Here, have a cookie.

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>>40889241
COOKIEEEE

>> No.40892205
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>>40884061
Nene refuses to let you leave school until you help with her math homework(she's very bad at it)

>> No.40892267

>>40892205
I'm very bad at math too, what now

>> No.40892375

>>40892205
This but by help with her math homework she means get fucked by a bunch of black guys so ripped they look like Terry Crews clones while you sit there watching and crying and hoping you'll get a pity handjob later. From one of the guys.

>> No.40892467

>>40892205
I get filtered by Quadratic Formulas. I'm afraid I wouldn't be of any help.

>> No.40892576
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>>40892267
>>40892467
Then she brings you along to find someone who IS good at math to help you both!

>> No.40892620

>>40892576
And he looks like Terry Crews.

>> No.40892722

>>40892205
You know those popular quizzes where people get their math tested?
This for example:

9-3÷1/3+1=?

While most people on social media answer stuff like 1, 7 and 9, my answer was fucking -8.11. The right answer is 1, btw.

In short, I'm likely way dumber than Nene

>> No.40892894

>>40892722
Most of those are just Order of Operations tests, which always frustrate me because not every country teaches the same fucking order

>> No.40892896

>>40892722
How do you get 1 out of that? Order of operations means you go 3 divided by 1 first which is 3, and that leaves 3 divided by 3 which is 1, making the remainder 9-1+1.

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>>40892722
Jesus, and I thought I was bad at math.

>> No.40892974

>>40892899
The worst is when getting 7, 8, 9 etc is the really dumb answer that gets made fun of, but not one person had my answer. This makes me beyond dumb.

>>40892896
I think it was 0 actually

>> No.40893189

>>40892722
This is always a trick question, because order of operations is not universal. This is an example of unclear math syntax, hence why you see more parentheses and slashes after elementary school instead of x and ÷

>> No.40893234

>>40893189
There's no right order of operation that gets you -8.11

>> No.40893311

>>40892722
This is how it went in my head.
0.33 ÷ 3 = 0.11
0.11 + 1 = 1.11
1.11 - 9 = -8.11

>> No.40893374

>>40893311
you got the order wrong straight off the bat, it's 3 ÷ 0.33. why'd you go backwards?

>> No.40893447

>>40893374
I assumed a fraction took priority over division, but that doesn't make sense at all in hindsight, because priority doesn't change the order of numbers...

>> No.40893529

>>40893374
>>40893311
So it's
3÷0.33 = 1
1 + 1 = 2
2 - 9 = -7

That's not right...

>> No.40893549

>>40893529
Oh, dividing a number less than 1 actually multiplies, right. Whatever, I'm done with this

>> No.40893567

I hate you people so goddamn much

>> No.40893601

>>40893567
People here will go the extra mile to not talk about writing or chuubas, anon. It’s been known for a while now.

>> No.40893633

>>40893567
Well...maybe you'll like me if you get to know me

>> No.40893646

>>40893601
We are discussing helping Nene with her homework. I threw the ball at the prompt requester, "what if I was dumber than Nene?", he answered with blacked stuff so I'm good

>> No.40893649

>>40893567
>>40893601
t. got 8.11 on the trick question

>> No.40893684

>>40893646
What, do you hate black guys or something?

>> No.40893713

>>40893684
I love black people. I don't have any black friends to prove it though...

>> No.40893743

>>40893713
Well, talk to Nene, she'll introduce you to some. You might hit it off.

>> No.40893750

Just kill this thread already.

>> No.40893864
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>>40893743
Nene doesn't see colour. To her, everyone is her husband, so technically you're not wrong

>> No.40893913

>>40893750
Alright

*Shoots thread in the back of the head, killing it instantly*

>> No.40894006

>>40893567
>>40893601
>>40893750
The writing thread always turns to shit after American hours. I'm just assuming at this point that the eurofags and seafags are working together to make it unusable for people who are genuinely interested in writing.

>> No.40894055

>>40893864
>To her, everyone is her husband
Fuck, dude, not to me. You can't turn a whore into a housewife and it sounds like she's doing the rounds.

>> No.40894077
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>>40894006
Are you writing something? Tell us about it! Got any writing related questions? Ask them!

>> No.40894116

>>40894077
Writing my balls down your face.

>> No.40894139

>>40894077
Why would anyone ask anything writing related questions with how shitty the thread is?

>> No.40894157

>>40894077
yeah sure i don't really understand the concept of imaginary numbers, can someone explain it to me?

>> No.40894161

>>40894139
Yeah, the thread is shit, isn't it?

>> No.40894180

>>40894157
Try asking google, retard.

>> No.40894191

>>40894077
Sciency words, should they be explained or just summarised?

>> No.40894214

>>40894180
fucking do it for me instead of having a sook here

>> No.40894249

>>40894214
How retarded are you that you can’t do something so basic as use a search engine? Even children can do that.

>> No.40894254

>>40894077
Not that buzzkill but I am writing the Ina jerks off a capybara story.

>> No.40894307

>>40894077
Do you really care, or are you just trying to salvage this thread? Because if it's the latter, then it's sad since it gone already.

>> No.40894383

>>40894214
All you have to know is that imaginary numbers are primarily used in electrical engineering, ausfag.

>> No.40894457

>>40894191
Depends on how hard the sci-fi in your story is. If you're writing really hard sci-fi, get down to the nitty-gritty details. If you're writing rather soft sci-fi, summarize it because the science is only there to help the plot in some way (and your readers won't think too much about it).
Still helps to know a thing or two about the sciency stuff you're putting in there regardless. Knowing more about the subject you're writing always leads to more concise prose.

>> No.40894521

>>40892896
1/3 is not actually a operation but the fraction one third (representing 0.333...)
So the first operation is division (division always goes before subtraction and addition by international standard): 3 divided by 1/3 equals 9 - dividing by one third is equal to multiplying by three.
That leaves 9-9+1=1.

>> No.40894590

I am at awe that you fags somehow manage to throw this thread to the wayside over what is essentially a generic prompt. Thread started out strong with the Bae posting and Amelia posting, but that one math prompt just turned this thread into garbage.

>> No.40894618

>>40894590
>Bae posting
>Amelia posting
>strong
You are what is wrong with this general.

>> No.40894670
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I'm just posting this, so people can just fuck off and move on from that stupid math question. Never thought a /wg/ thread would ever get derailed from that.

>> No.40894681

>>40894670
Your calc is wrong.

>> No.40894693

>>40894618
Better than the retarded math posting nobody cares about.

>> No.40894706

>>40894693
No, it isn't. And clearly you're the only one who doesn't care about it.

>> No.40894736

Yo, don't you think it's about time we made a new thread?

>> No.40894748

>>40894157
Imaginary numbers are what happens when you try and find the square root of a negative number. The square root of 4 is 2 because 2*2=4, but if you try to do the same with -4 there's no result because -2*-2=4. Imaginary numbers fill that gap: 2i*2i=-4. Thus equations unsolvable with real numbers become solvable.

>> No.40894811

>>40894706
Look, if you want this thread to be nothing more than shitty as posts about a math question people can just look up if they cared, that’s your thing. The bae and Amelia posting were at least on-topic.

>> No.40894832

>>40894748
concise and easily explained, well done!

>> No.40894855

>>40894670
Anon there's a fraction option right there, you used division which isn't what the question uses

>> No.40894862

>>40894811
>The bae and Amelia posting were at least on-topic.
Yeah, on topic if your topic is "how to make the thread fucking shit."

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>> No.40894936

>>40894862
Not my fault those posts were the only ones that were talking about chuubas. I expected more people to talk about chuubas, but apparently everyone would rather talk about math bullshit.

>> No.40895016

>>40894936
Yeah, boohoo QQ ENshitter. We'd rather talk about math and preserve our dignity. Hey, what's the square root of 100? It's the number of times I banged your mom last night.

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say something nice about my bird wife

>> No.40895201

>>40895146
She's the least shit EN.

>> No.40895220

>>40894157
It's that magical space where the ancient ones hang out while waiting for Ina to call them.
If the real world is in X and Y axes then they hang out in the Z dimension.

>> No.40895228

>>40895201
Wait, that's IRyS. Second least shit. Which is saying a lot, because the next step down is like jumping off a fucking mountain.

>> No.40895320

>>40895146
She and Reine have good chemistry. And her streams are fun to watch.

>> No.40895379

>>40895146
She's living my dream, getting to prowl the streets of Tokyo and lay with whichever woman she pleases.

>> No.40895613

>>40884061
This normal Ina picture >>40894077 reminded me of this greentext fic/prompt
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTABmUKo34wCWWgLExZ9kFAGlOgS7ESVVcvpDeNkfsO8DAligNPFDzoyIGv22tOgQmEX5Ijx5hVNEFV/pub
I really want to see someone pick up the concept of dating Ina but she's only doing it because the Ancient Ones are forcing her.

>> No.40895636

>>40894748
>Thus equations unsolvable with real numbers become solvable.
What's the point of inventing numbers in order to make your problem solvable? Does this have any applications in the real world?

>> No.40895711

>>40895636
Imaginary numbers are useful to describe electric currents, among other applications in engineering and science.

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>>40895711
I see

>> No.40895978

>>40887413
Motherfucker I barely have a resume!
>>40895146
Dragged me kicking and screaming back into writing smut because of how badly I want to fuck her. I would legitimately spend an entire stream between her legs just going to town and devouring her pussy without being allowed to breath sans short bursts where her laughter allows her to let my head to gasp for air without being heard. I want to fuck that bitch so much.

>> No.40896200

>>40895978
>Wants to fuck Kiara
>She's still not in HF
AA...

>> No.40896503

>>40896200
>Hasn't seen the amulet of embers breaking or seen the description for the accolade if it activated during the Calliope fight

>> No.40897306

>>40895146
She has a nice ass.

>> No.40897580

>>40897306
She is German, and German women do have nice asses.

>> No.40897598

>>40844764
Finally read through the PDF you gave.
Honestly not as cringe as I thought it would be the pseudo-4chan segment is honestly a really fucking clever way to do worldbuilding since it sets up the central conceits of the fic pretty quickly.
It's probably a pain to format but I have to imagine it's fun to write

>> No.40898056

>>40897598
Thank you, anon. It was a real in the ass to format but I just went ham with it
I might keep it in somehow. Because that was exactly the point of the section -- to establish that nobody else in the world knows Ina exists except Ame. A few adjustments and it's useable again
Plus the idea of Ame being regarded as the resident schizo of her own threads was just so fucking funny to me
Also to the other anon who suggested that I read That's the Way the Fubuki Crumbles... I can't believe I learned a lot about writing action from that piece. I absolutely (love) how fucking well-made it is
I'm going for Shrunken Troubles next.

>> No.40898685

>>40898056
If you think that fic is really good then what do you think is a bad fic?

>> No.40898738

>>40898685
Holofantasy. It insists upon itself.

>> No.40898820
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>>40898056
>I absolutely (love) how fucking well-made it is
I thought it was good too. It got released to a heap of controversy because there was a black guy involved and IIRC that's actually what prompted the random low-effort blacked prompts that pop up every now and again like >>40892375.

>I'm going for Shrunken Troubles next.
Enjoy!

>> No.40899074

>>40898738
Are you comparing it to the Godfather of fanfics

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>>40898738

>> No.40899239

>>40898685
I was speaking about **how** it was made. I have to admit that the writing style was a lot more animated than mine. Reading it got me editing some of the stuff I've already written so far.
As for the subject matter though I'm not a fan of rape. I'm more of a vanilla person. I wouldn't go out of my way to look at it, but if I happen upon it and learn something then, well, yeah.
>>40898820
I'm actually rather hesitant. But the writing is decent so far so I'm gonna take notes

>> No.40899377

>>40899239
read Paradise Lost

>> No.40899384

>>40899377
that's tagged properly

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Wait a fucking minute.
So you guys telling me... That's the Way the Fubuki Crumbles and Shrunken Troubles are actually considered the *bad* fanfics on this thread?
>looks at his own work
>
Don't get me wrong; I mean, I was expecting "My Immortal"-tier shit as the bottom of the pit honestly/spoiler]

>> No.40899571

>>40899535
Just the fanfics people shitpost about for fun

>> No.40899603

>>40899535
Their reputation is more due to the subject matter than the actual quality of the writing.

>> No.40899695

>>40899074
More like the Atlas Shrugged of fanfics.

>> No.40899718

>>40899535
The only poorly thought out and generally badly written fanfic in the archive is Miss Sakura.

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>>40899571
>>40899603
Yeah, I figured that was the case. Decently made and yet... well, yeah. From a technical standpoint I'll just say kudos to the mfs who wrote them and, uh, reserve further comment

>> No.40899751

>>40899740
Did you read all the way to the end?

>> No.40899829

>>40899695
That's a pretty serious insult.

>> No.40899839

>>40899535
A better word would probably be 'controversial' rather than bad in that they get shit on/memed about.
That the way the Fubuki crumbles is a twofold thing for controversy since it's considered rather mediocre compared to the author's previous work alongside the race thing. Meanwhile Shrunken Troubles is memerically thrown as a shock fic because of mistagging and having unironic fly sex.
We don't really get shitty absolute amateur stuff for some reason.

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>>40899751
Anon, I finished TTWTFC and I'm just about halfway through the beginning of ST. The rest of my reading list for the day consists of something tagged with scat, and another thing that looks like a size fic. So we'll see what else happens I suppose

>> No.40899901

>>40899860
You're actually reading the scat fic? Well, more power to you. Anyway, you originally wanted the authors' emails, and they're at the bottom of the fics you just read.

>> No.40899999

>>40899839
>unironic fly sex
I never thought I'd see those words in a sentence. This will be a doozy
>We don't really get shitty absolute amateur stuff for some reason.
And THAT's what gets me nervous. Well, I'll do my reps and improve my writing If it pales in comparison to raceplay and scat then fuck I'm screwed
>>40899901
That's another reason I'm reading them for, yes. It's gonna be a real fucking doozy

>> No.40900027

>>40899999
Holy quints.

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>>40899999
>>40900027

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>> No.40900937

>>40895636
There is actually, and its mind boggling. Imaginary numbers wete invented as math for the sake of math. Hundreds of years later, someone realized you could use them for planning electric circuits

>> No.40901218

>>40899999
Just remember that you have to be bad in order to be good. And if you want to be good, you can't afford to stop when you're bad.
In other words, don't feel too pressured to measure up to the other writeanons right out of the gate.

>> No.40901367

>>40901218
This. Do feel pressured when we deliberately call you out on your work, though.

>> No.40901392

>>40895636
Imaginary numbers are just the Cartesian plane with a specific multiplication on it. You can take problems that are hard in the standard 2D plane and turn them into easy problems in the imaginaries, for example

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>>40901218
>>40901367
Thanks, anons. That's why I've been hitting the books lately, and now fics in the archives. To hopefully improve. I'll keep all of this in mind.
As an aside, I just finished ST. A bit rough in some places, but the writing was vivid. Someone PAID to have this written, jfc. What a beautiful world we live in

>> No.40902505

>>40900638
I can't tell whether Fubuki is pregnant in this image or not.

>> No.40902674

>>40902505
She's just a bit chubby.

>> No.40902731

>>40892205
This, but Nenechi is actually a genius with a crush on you

>> No.40902769

>>40902674
Thank you for the quick answer, anon.

>> No.40902830

>>40892205
how come none gave the true answer?
>Nene asks you to help with math but you both get sidetracked and by the end of the day you end up hunting bugs and cool rocks

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>>40902830
Best end, 100% worth it.

>> No.40904424
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Are there any rrats like ayame's that would make a good basis for fics or is her situation just unique?

>> No.40904540
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>>40904424
Suisei being a romanov

>> No.40904575

>>40904424
There's the rrat that Korone used to go to a school with a bad reputation for having a huge bullying problem, and was possibly a bully herself. The boxing story I've got on my drawing board is based on that rrat.

>> No.40904647

>>40902830
That's so fucking cute holy shit
The urge to write kicks in with nene fluff

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>>40902830
>cool rocks
I did not know Nene was also into rocks. I knew she liked bugs, but the rock thing is new. That is wonderful info that I can use in my story. Thanks Anon.

>> No.40906768

>>40904424
Miko being a lesbian rapist

>> No.40906832

>>40904424
yakuza rami

>> No.40906891

DEAL WITH THE DEVIL PART 2 DOKO

>> No.40906902

>>40904424
Miko having a baby and Ollie being a muslim are two of the funniest to me

>> No.40907289

>>40906902
Are there any girls in ID that are Moslem?

>> No.40907454

>>40907289
it's a common religion there, so it wouldn't be too farfetched if at least one was.

>> No.40907606

>>40904540
Man that's one of those things where as fun as it would be to have a fic centered around it, I have no idea what kind of plot would have that as a base.

>> No.40907763

>>40907454
Time to watch and see if they answer the daily call for prayer.
>>40907606
You could have Suisei lay a claim on a throne during the collapse of the Soviet Union. Just a suggestion.

>> No.40907881

>>40906902
>>40907289
>>40907454
>anya opens the door
>Ollie is drinking tea with old dessert gurues, veiled woman and ISIS members
>''Mashallah Ollie, you didnt tell me we had visitors''

>> No.40908042

>>40907763
I'm not sure if it's as strict over there as it is in the middle east.

Mind you I'm not ID so maybe an ID anon can clear this up.

>> No.40908242

>>40907606
Russia sending assassins to kill the last romanov and tie up loose ends. Could include (You) or not.

>> No.40908358

>>40908242
Comforting Suisei as she dies of polonium poisoning...

>> No.40908380

>>40907763
Anon she wouldn't even be born yet.

>> No.40908456

>>40908380
It's fanfiction anything is possible.

>> No.40909459

random question. of the hags who would make a good aunt? Someone who'd be looking after you while in high school

>> No.40909522

>>40909459
Lui

>> No.40909707

>>40909459
Mio.

>> No.40909714

>>40909459
Lui, Korone or Mio or maybe Watame

>> No.40909719

>>40908242
For some reason I misread that first word as Reine but before rechecking the sentence.
Somehow still fits.
Like obviously not in a pseudo-rl setting but I could see Reine being the spymaster/princess put in charge to tie up loose ends to secure her future reign. Have be set in a fantasy setting, with you and Suisei having that whirlwind adventure romance.

>> No.40910309

>>40884768
you make out a story out of this

>> No.40911384
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Would it be unbelievable for someone to say they've earnestly been in love with somebody since the fourth grade? Is that too young?

>> No.40911474

>>40911384
It's rare but possible. I could've seen myself loving the girl I loved in fourth grade still if she didn't move away.

>> No.40911486

>>40911384
Depends how you define "love". Obviously no one in fourth grade knows what love can truly be, just what their idea of it is, and even then, they might just be in love with the idea of being in love with a person.
You can use the spanning timeframe to demonstrate how that person's perception of love changed overtime and grew into something actual and meaningful.
You can easily say that someone would feel attached or drawn to a person since that age though.

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>>40911474
>>40911486
I see I see. It's ultimately not a big deal for what I'm writing, but I thought of the dialogue so I wanted to double check if that'd throw anybody off.

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> 35°C
> Very strong sun
> Extremely humid because it's raining all the time even with sun out
> No wind at all
I feel like I'm dying, how am I supposed to write like this?

>> No.40914679

>>40914407
Do you own a dehumidifier?
Have you considered owning a dehumidifier?

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>> No.40916923

>>40884061
Intern Anon (You) have a lot of hot sneaky manager sex with A-chan, no matter the time, the place, the venue or the event.

I can't stop thinking about pinning A-chan down in the breakroom tables and absolutely FILLING her UP.

>> No.40917062

>>40916923
>blowing a load up her ass and shoving a buttplug up there so it doesn't leak

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>>40917062
>In an almost complete change of her wardrobe preferences, she'd frequently wear short skirts and thigh highs to work ever since you two started to "make a mess" around the office, so to speak
>its all just so she can tease you by sticking her ass out whenever your attention is focused on her during conversations with others
>she'd hike her skirt a little, exposing her burning hot drooling mess of a crotch winking at you begging to be stuffed

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>>40916923
>sitting with A-chan on the breakroom couch
>It's like 2am and you've both been doing nothing but paperwork
>You're both exhausted and bored out of your fucking mind
>A-Chan recommends taking a brief nap, already slowly laying down on the couch
>Get up to find some chair to nap in, only for her to grab and pull you on top of her
>sleepy slow sex with A-chan in the empty office

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Motivation role call. How's your shit going? What are you gonna do to get it going even harder? Let's hear those goals for the weekend.

I'm slogging pretty hard with this current chapter, but I can feel that I'm on the very tip of a breaking point to break the floodgates where words will just start to flow. God damn I can teeter on this point for a while though.

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>>40920303
Motivation is six feet under. Can't bring myself to write anything. Hoping that a burst of autism will hit me soon.

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>>40920303
Feels bad to be flagging on the one thing I really WANT to write, especially because im still kind of excited for what comes after. looking at my output for the last month or so I'm not disappointed though.

>> No.40922679
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>>40920303
I haven't done much this week. I either keep getting distracted or something comes up when I'm trying to write.

>> No.40922759

>>40914407
Air conditioning.

>> No.40923131

>>40921293
If I could give you my autism, I would. I can barely make use of it today since I'm constantly being interrupted, similar to >>40922679
Nothing pisses me off more lately than when I'm pulled away in the middle of writing something.

>> No.40923391

>>40895613
>the Ancient Ones are forcing her.
Man, I gotta finish my "Ina gets raped by her own tentacles" thing

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>>40920303
I'm planning on finishing a small fic this weekend and hopefully starting a bigger one at some point. I have a lot of ideas but I'm trying not to enter WIP hell.

>> No.40924294

>>40924245
Look around. You're already there.

>> No.40925137

>>40923391
How far along are you, or how long have you've been writing it?

>> No.40925420

>>40923391
Speaking of Ina, that reminds me of the Ready or Not horror prompt. I wish someone would write that.

>> No.40925908 [SPOILER] 
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>>40884003
Reports of my death were... greatly exaggerated.

I've come with a new series that's meant to be a more serious take on MW, as well as another which was a trial of sorts to this. I've a fair few plans for how the series will go, but for now I will provide the first chapter for your perusal.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vSsLf0ghrmcEz3tR2PEqPM6v6CYDawh2vAHP4voawqIv2B8qG1rlWchdJg5Cb0s_Gpbjh1eLpE4uv6S/pub

Tags: Hoshimachi Suisei, Omaru Polka, SFW, suicide attempts, depression

Also yes, the MC is based off of this dude

And special thanks to the anon who gave it a first readthrough as well as critique, you're a real one.

As always, let me know what you think.

>> No.40926516

I’ve been meaning to ask this, but do we have a new threadshitter or something?

>> No.40926618

>>40926516
You?

>> No.40926768

>>40925908
Stopped reading after the first sentence. Fix that, it’s cringy as hell.

>> No.40927076

>>40926618
I’m being serious.

>> No.40927252

>>40926768
Your face is cringy as hell.

>> No.40927424

>>40927252
I just don’t see why he would reference a book written by Tara Sivec in the first sentence.

>> No.40927824

>>40920303
I'm doing fucking nothing.
because I finished my WIP and am waiting for my beta reader, could have mailed AA for a chance too but didn't want to bother him

>> No.40927958

>>40920303
I got a chapter out of my system and now I need to recharge.
As long as I keep thinking about the story and the scenes, I'm still working on it.

>> No.40928008

>>40927958
But are you writing it?

>> No.40928188

>>40928008
No. I often tell myself that if I can't remember how I want a plot or scene to go, it's because I still haven't figured it out.

>> No.40928321

>>40928188
But then why do you tell yourself that you’re working on it if you’re not writing it?

>> No.40928390

>>40928321
The story is being written in my head.

>> No.40928458

>>40928390
But not actually being written down?

>> No.40928542

>>40927424
>Tara Sivec
Literally who?

>> No.40928609

>>40928542
Nobody.

>> No.40928656

>>40928542
A best selling author.

>> No.40928757

>>40928458
Nope

>> No.40928787

>>40928757
So you’re not working on it.

>> No.40928957

>>40928787
I guess

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>>40927824
You're in the home stretch my man. Looking forward to whatever it is you got cooking.

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>>40920303
Banging my head against a metaphorical wall trying to get the first chapter of my take on Kuro's servant boy. Which I can't even call that anymore, considering how far I went from the original promtp

>> No.40930146

>>40929630
You can do it Kurobro. The title can come to you later. Now smash that wall and keep those Kurofriends eating good.

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In the most unspeakable of crimes, I made a couple of alterations to the Towa/Archdemon story (I am not the original author).
List of changes:
>they are now playing blackjack
>Towa gets put in a dealer bunny outfit, the patrician's choice of clothing
>mentally changing the cards is gay and lame
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vQ9SPTE0G-V3cqjJdc7LnlURNSGtvNeTAivUlIM6Nc7lZhW7rKpfILnSBBZeO3KGLk8nGJ7gDDlEru4/pub
I thought it was kind of dissatisfying that the part with the shadow was hotter than what happened after it, but I didn't have any solutions.

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>>40930525
Original author here.
Kind of a prick thing to do, honestly.

>> No.40930802

>>40930659
Cry about it some more.

>> No.40931076

>>40930525
>Towa/Archdemon story (I am not the original author).
Ah, so you plagiarized.

>> No.40931195

>>40930525
if you want people to read something you probably shouldn't take someone else's work for one, then get hostile when the original author called you out.

>> No.40931215

>>40930659
Finish fucking that dog and then we'll talk.
I'm sorry that you wrote a gambling story that featured zero bunny suits. I suppose not everyone can be enlightened.

>> No.40931264

>>40931076
It's not plagiarism if you don't claim it as your own work.

>>40931195
>>40930802

>> No.40931365

>>40931264
>can't even be original about his shitty justification.

>> No.40931368

>>40930525
So instead of just making your own story, you decided to plagiarize another story, and barely changed anything at all. Why even post this?

>> No.40931430

>>40931365
Facts don't change with interpretation, fag.

>>40931368
>>40930802

>> No.40931528

>>40930525
AA, as the original author, if you don't put this shit in the archive I'll swear to get back to writing ASAP

>> No.40931531

>>40930525
You know this won’t be saved right?

>> No.40931646

>>40931528
Post proof you're the original author first.

>> No.40931810

>>40931531
Wasn't hoping for it in the first place. Too bad some soulless SEA decided to stir shit over it. >>40930802
>>40931430

>> No.40931877

>>40931810
It's funny you're calling someone else soulless after stealing someone's work.

>> No.40931911

>>40931810
>>40930802

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>>40931646

>> No.40932004

>>40931810
People calling you out for what you did, are not SEA. How brain dead do you have to be to act like this.

>> No.40932089

It's okay to write fanfics based on other fanfics, but just changing a few things and then posting it yourself seems a bit cheap. Just make the changes you like for yourself and keep it private.

>> No.40932113

>>40931924
Yes, I can make backups too. Write you don't want >>40930525 archived at the top of the work it's based on.

You know you can take screenshots on your computer, right?

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>>40920303
reworking my Kurokami fic from the ground up after looking at the first chapter and deciding I could do better.

>> No.40932181

>>40925908
This is trash. Kill yourself.

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>>40932113
Did it. I'm kind of an idiot and I'm tired. Sorry.

>> No.40932515

>>40931528
Plagiarized stories are never archived. I think that's one of the few rules that exist.

>> No.40932566

>>40932004
>Facts don't change with interpretation, fag.
>People calling you out for what you did, are not SEA
That's all well and good but I still managed to spur an author I like to resume writing, but at the end of the day you still live in a fish tank and reproduce by laying eggs.

>> No.40932642

>>40932566
>but I still managed to spur an author I like to resume writing,

If anything, you've only got him to neglect the story more (not that he was ever going to continue it) and focus more on the dog fucking one.

>> No.40932682

>>40932566
>I still managed to spur an author I like to resume writing
Don't fucking take credit for me getting off my ass. Eat shit and never do this again.

>> No.40932967

>>40884061
After an accidental minor doxx while trying to post a Google Doc /here/, Risu (herself a regularly posting author) realizes that Reine is one of her favorite /wg/ creators, spiraling into a massive collective realization between dozens of people that every author that has ever posted here is themselves a popular VTuber

>> No.40933000
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>>40932233
Ok, thanks.

>> No.40933135

>>40932682
Like it or not, I was the direct result of you deciding to get back to writing instead of being a lazy piece of shit.

>> No.40933182

>>40925908
Gotta say I'm really liking this take on a more grounded MW. Anon is a right prick and I kinda feel like punching him in the throat but it's fitting and somewhat understandable.

I have the tiniest of pet peeves so feel free to ignore it but I feel like Anon took Takeshi's words and just ran with it. You did show later those words to be true but that was after Anon told Polka the same thing, acting as if he had already experienced it, which he hasn't (or at least we didn't see). He seems like a cynical guy so I'd think he would take such words to heart, especially from someone he just met. Again, maybe I'm talking out of my ass but yeah.

That aside, I eagerly await the next chapter. I could see this becoming increasingly heartwarming as this goes on or depressing, either way is fine.

>> No.40933283

>>40925908
>more serious take on MW
You're just rewriting MW? You really are a washed-up writer, huh.

>> No.40933328

>>40933135
Amen, brother. Writers are accountable for the state of the thread and should be called out wherever possible.

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>>40933135
Alright then, fucker, you want to play that game?
Delete the doc and apologize for plagiarizing or I'll quit writing for here.

>> No.40933441

>>40933373
I'll do no such thing and you weren't writing anyway so good riddance.

>> No.40933485

>>40933373
"I'm taking my ball and going home" never works

>> No.40933533

>>40933373
The fact that you're "threatening" not to write for here anymore because one faggot copied a fic you don't even like just shows how thin skinned you are.

>> No.40933602

>>40933373
Gotta say, that's just as pathetic as stealing work. Door's over there, come back when you're no longer a bitch

>> No.40933662

>>40933373
I was the one who initially was looking forward to the Towa sequel of Chocodog. You sound like a massive cunt and I don't really care about reading it anymore.

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>deleted his post
Hope he never comes back.

>> No.40933807

Yeah, fuck. That was cringe and stupid.
I don't fucking know. Emotion. Whatever. I'm done thinking about it.

>> No.40933810

>>40933741
Agreed. I'd go a step further and suggest all the works shown here >>40931924 should be removed from the archive.

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>>40884003
Lost and found; Chapter 1
TAGS: Hakos Baelz, SFW, Fluff, Slowburn(?)
https://rentry.org/yy5t5

Somehow i feel really motivated to make a multichapter story, despite it being my first time (And failing with that princess Mori concept).

With that in mind, i would really appreciate all the feedback you could give me.

>> No.40934079

>>40934023
Your grammar and punctuation are terrible. Learn English before trying to write in it.

>> No.40934209

>>40934023
Will look into it in a bit, i was excited to read this
>>40934079
>not even a minute and now he's triying to shit up the thread
still salty that no one took your side?

>> No.40934259

>>40934209
I'm a quick reader, and I'm also right.

>> No.40934393

>>40933741
I will come back. It was stupid as fuck and done on shitty emotional impulse, and I apologize for that, but I know I'll get people saying it's too late and I've ruined my reputation, but fuck it. I'll write cause I want to write.
I'll just keep on doing what I've been doing and try not to get so worked up about it.

>> No.40934461

>>40934079
im currently reading the first paragrah and there's barely any mistakes, fuck off already shitskin you always stink up the thread when EN fics get posted

>> No.40934512 [DELETED] 

>>40934461
Way to out yourself as a SEAnigger.

>> No.40934787

Isn't it funny how you can completely ruin any goodwill people have for you here with one post made in mistake?

If that's not a clique, I don't know what is.

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>>40934023
cute rat story so far anon. I enjoyed the lunch scene quite a bit, I was not expecting that type of exchange just yet. Looking forward to how this relationship progresses.

>> No.40934946

>>40934023
Great name for the fic, by the way. You 'lost' your dignity and we 'found' out you're a shitty writer.

>> No.40935157

>>40934787
Dude just leave.

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>>40934023
Nice story, work a bit on adding some detail and you are set. Also as a heads up, try and delay your story until at least an hour after some thread drama, Seaniggs stay active for a while triying to shit up the thread
>>40935157
Its one guy hip firing to try and get everyone mad, just do your duty and then ignore him

>> No.40935294

>>40935157
Not me.
After this post I'm shutting the fuck up until next fic is done. I've said my piece. That's all.

>> No.40935366

>>40934393
For what little it's worth, I don't hold it against you.

>>40934787
There are a few things that this place won't tolerate and bitchy menhera writers are one of them. It keeps them from thinking they are more than their art.

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>>40934908
>>40935287
Thanks a bunch, next time i will try and delay my post, its quite easy to tell when he's triying to get a rise tho.
The lunch scene is what convinced me to try and make this a multi-chapter series, since i had that idea on my mind (specially the Kanata bit) and i realized anon not being a lonely old man might work for the story

>> No.40935979

>>40934023
I really like how you called 7 A.M. the witching hour and the fic was pretty cute over all but I have one main criticism and one nitpick. The nitpick is that there's a general lack of capitalization and apostrophes and the main criticism is the fact that you bring up other members of hololive. Personally, I think the fic would be better if it focused on Bae and Anon and didn't mention anyone else.

>> No.40936001

>>40935764
Glad to hear you're planning on making more. I might just add on to what >>40935287
said. Because it's pretty cute and the scenes are nice, I would also like to see some more detail since I think you could really paint a nice picture and make the story even better.

>> No.40936028

>>40925908
I’ll say that the prose is well written and the pacing seems good so far, but lord above is this edgy. No idea who the guy in the picture is, but I’ll have to assume he’s an insufferable cunt if Anon is based on him. Also…
>wants to “kill himself”
>sends “uwu I’m going to kill myself don’t come looking for me” texts to his ex who owes him nothing
>ex comes, “saves his life” like he hoped
>gets mad
>smokes menthols
Anon seems to be an attention-starved teenage girl as well. Very cool.
Besides that, the plot was fine imo. Polkas introduction maybe seemed a bit too comedic for the serious tone you set before and her appearance on the roof could’ve been set up a bit better. Like having anon come back to the roof the next day, secretly hoping suisei’s there again only to find Polka or something.
It’s a good story for people who like this kind of genre, I’d say. Don’t know if I’ll keep up with it, maybe if it turns out Anon triple backflips off the HQ after all - god knows he doesn’t deserve to hook back up with his ex.

>> No.40936310

>>40935294
>After this post I'm shutting the fuck up until next fic is done.
Uh-huh. I'd like to think you'd keep to your word and just never come back, then, but I know better.

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>>40935979
NTA but im curious. Why do you think the other characters are a criticism? i found them charming as dressing in the back, but then again i have an opposite stance from yours, i dont really like when the world is two characters and one OC friend and in fact its my one criticism of Our Cures but i want to hear your thoughts

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>>40935979
>he nitpick is that there's a general lack of capitalization and apostrophes
Noted, i will try and work on those issues, thanks a bunch
>the fact that you bring up other members of hololive
While i dont agree, at least i can tell you they wont ''come out'' out of the office, work friends and all of that stuff
>>40936001
Thanks. Yeah im gonna try and dress it up more, its one of those things i struggle with but im gonna try and work on it

>> No.40937548

>>40934023
I like the idea and the scenes are cute but I'm going to echo what's already been said and that this needs more detail and breathing room in general. It reads really fast pace and as such "doesn't earn" the "right" to be called a chapter. it can be, cause I feel there is easily enough here if properly explored. Oh and punctuation and grammar.

>>40936425
NTA but the story adds a lot of characters all of a sudden and doesn't really explore their relationship being them being your kohai. I don't disagree with your statement but named characters need to serve some purpose in the story that's apparent right off the bat, even if it's superfluous and this is doubly true with holomem. Dressing can be as easily done with mob characters.

>> No.40937662

>>40930525
>I made a couple of alterations to the Towa/Archdemon story (I am not the original author).
It's shit.

>> No.40937722

the amount of pity yous this shitty bae story got is disgraceful

>> No.40938027

>>40934393
>>40934787
You'll get the bait insta-replies the next two or three times you identify yourself but it'll fade if you just don't bite and keep at your work. It's like that Georgia judge to me, it was an unprofessional moment, but it was also clearly provoked, I hold it against you much less than I do against him

>> No.40938342

>>40937548
>named characters need to serve some purpose in the story that's apparent right off the bat
I think its a matter of preference. I personally really dislike Oc's that show up just to further the plot and since we are already on fanfic fantasy land i dont mind injecting stablished characters in the story, specially if they are for a quick scene like in this story
I get why you think its an issue tho, but it didnt take me out of the story.

>> No.40939408

>>40938342
its 100% a preference thing. I remember one writer in the Rwby fandom that was really anal about using any character unless they were meant to be a major player in the story. Sure he wrote decent stuff but his fics also had like multiple Oc's and only a handfull of characters from the series, which ended up turning off a bunch of people since no one knew these characters and he spent multiple chapters setting them up
At the same time, putting a bunch of named characters might get you called out for doing OOC shit/ pulling the focus away from the protagonists

>> No.40939636

>>40933807
>>40934393
Look man, I’m sorry that you got targeted by the maritime african americans who usually shit up the thread. It's not anchored, I never presented it as my own work, and the original post even jokingly stated that doing so was an unspeakable crime. A dedicated troll would probably have done either of the first two (and probably would have said something inflammatory about 'fixing the story' regarding the third), but the ones lurking here won't even do that much which is why you only see their garbage-tainted hands making low-effort replies.
Hope you don't get baited by the sniggies again.

>> No.40940276

>>40936425
I was just expecting the fic to center around (You) and Bae so it kind of shocked me when I saw Axel pop up. But as >>40937350 says they'll stay in the office and I'm okay with that.

>> No.40940891

>>40938342
I've done it both ways, but the key to me is in the execution. To me, there's an expectation that you will do "something" with Holomems, whether it's that they show up for one scene or if they are just there as a wink and a nod or are a major character, but that needs to be communicated and established. The scene in question IMO, doesn't. Are they just coworkers? wingmen? love rivals? It's not clear. That could be due to the fact that it's just chapter one, but it's worth pointing out. But I agree overall, I would rather use Holomem where it makes sense than restore to an OC.

And for what it's worth, as much as a bro Mark is in Our Cures, I see what you mean by how it's a bit missed opportunity to not have him be a Holomem.

>> No.40941247

>>40920303
Not writing related but I had a really pleasant conversation with the girl I like
Other than that I’m hoping I can get the focus to do some writing both for my fanfic and school work

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>>40920303
I cut three pages and rewrote it into something that needs more tuning but may finally get me out of my several week long slump. I think I'd be better off just taking a longer real break though.

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>>40920303
I'm gonna write two or three chapters LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

>> No.40942096

>>40932967
Need this asap
And we need the twist that pekofag was actually miko fantasizing about railing the fuck out of a powerless pekora

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>>40941247
>>40941568
>>40941738
You three are on fire, and each in your own way. Keep going! I'm feeling myself come out of my own slump with this chapter and now the dams broken. My current chapter likely won't get done and proofread until sunday since I got shit to do tomorrow. Everyone keep kicking ass.

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>>40940891
nta but despite not wanting to use OCs, the alternative being Holostars is worse since I know jack shit about them and they probably wouldn't fit whatever role I need in the plot

>> No.40944286

>>40939636
I do wonder why the oceanic vermin camp the thread anyway. It's not like they can understand English in any capacity, nevermind write prose in it.

>> No.40944695

>>40944286
They understand just enough English to read stories and make demands.

>> No.40944789

>>40944286
All creative threads have a large number of self-entitled shitbags who produce nothing

>> No.40944871

>>40943081
Yeah like I said, it's all on execution. Like if they're just a bit part then you can probably get away with minimal character accuracy. But yeah if they don't fit then the OC route is fine.
Like I said I can see where that other Anon is coming from in regards to Mark but I think the implementation of Mark is perfectly fine. Like I don't think making him Roberu or Oga would improve the fic that much if at all, considering his role.

>> No.40946509

>>40941247
i hope she breaks your heart anon

>> No.40949577

>>40925908
Ugh, I'm not sure why but the prose feels really janky to me. Maybe it's the overuse of You as a sentence starter? The dialogue is pretty good and holds up the parts where he's with other people but the segments where he's alone and just monologuing feel clunky.
Other than that I like the concept and hope we'll see more. Though I do think you should see about cleaning up the first part a bit more, I think the 'roughness' of that makes a really bad first impression for the fic.

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>>40914407
Pekofag you're the weakest BR. When it was winter you said it was too cold to write, now it's too hot to write.
C'mon you need to be at least resilient to ONE extreme weather pattern.

>> No.40951100

>>40950683
35 degrees isn't even that hot.

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>>40950683
I'm fine with even 40°C + weather, so long as there is WIND. The air is so fucking still, it's so suffocating. Cold though, no matter the conditions I'll never get used to it.

>> No.40952612

>>40951465
pussy

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>>40952612
That was extremely unecessary

>> No.40953705

>>40925908
Well this was a ride.
>special thanks to the anon who gave it a first readthrough as well as critique
Find someone else because their critique clearly isn't worth anything otherwise they'd have pointed out how badly this MC is written.
I don't know why you felt the need to make the MC as unlikeable as possible, unless you were modelling him off the SEAmonkeys infesting this thread, but he is so obscenely rude to everyone around him that it almost becomes comical.
Otherwise, this is a pretty good start to a hopefully long series, but the MC is so bad I came away actually angry.

>> No.40954897

>>40953263
okay when you post sad fauna i need to rescind that

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