/wg/ - Writing General - Underwear Edition

[Anonymous No.]

This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
https://script.google.com/macros/s/AKfycbxZVzygb0QjJ6hksAEYzCbLCegxsjhui97BB73qzPvU7GgJv6fXdAPmmIv6Qt9H5d5Fzg/exec

>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

Previous thread:>>42680691

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

Consider forwarding your prompt to the prompt archive to keep your idea safe and alive forever! No information is gathered - it's all completely anonymous. Use the form below:
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Curious to see the prompt archive? Check it out here if you need a little more inspiration!
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/u/3/d/e/2PACX-1vR5ZggiHWXX_WSqCC5bvPR2QeLFGNMTjlgk6MuxmoVdRUIepkJa7PUlJAQ5RzHkZM_hhthLLXjab9Dt/pubhtml?gid=1162270883&single=true

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Story recap! There... were two stories posted in the last thread.

1984: Tags: SFW, Comedy, Miko:>>42721288

Cringy Rap: Tags: Mori, songs, Lyrics:>>42800515

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Path of Exile with chuubas, starring Anon and Zaion and featuring an ensemble cast of graduates and terminations from Holo and Niji.:>>42699138

A holo of the author's choice has always been in love with the brave adventurer, Anon. So much so that she was willing to go with him on his adventure in hopes that she will one day win his heart... Unfortunately, Anon has a thing for goblins.:>>42743108

After a long day at work you ride the train back home. It's cramped as always with depressed workers just like yourself. You take a deep breath and decide to open Twitter to try and numble your thoughts with art of cute anime girls. At this point and age, you don't care anymore if other people see what you're watching on your screen, so you don't bother trying to cover it up. As you scroll down you find some lewd art work of that one pirate streamer that you sometimes watch. She strikes an erotic pose, while wearing a tight outfit. Seeing that bottom heavy body was enough to activate your neurons. So you click on her art tag and decide to enjoy more of what the fans drew. Only a couple minutes pass before you notice some quick breathing against your ear, not only that but you can feel something quite squishy pressing against your arm. You turn around expecting to see a fat old man eyeing the screen, but end up seeing a pair of heterochromic eyes right infront of you. A girl with bright red messy hair, glasses and a loose hoodie that barely is able to hide her voluptuous body keeps watching your screen and turning your eyes back to you, while her cheeks blush and her breathing becomes heavier. You can see her swallow before she opens those soft looking pink lips and stammers out one word: Ahoy.:>>42777105

Your favorite chuuba telling you that developing a parasocial relationship with a stranger is really sad and depressing and that you need to improve yourself.:>>42786352

Pekora succumbing to her inherent kemo bloodlust:>>42795468

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>>42817309
What I would give to smell Mio’s bra. To smell her sweat, her scent. It would be intoxicating. No man would deny me this right, my privilege.

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>>42818883
No man would, but a feline might.

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>>42817309
Shit, it's too early to masturbate.

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>>42819148

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>>42820286
Shouldn't let that stop you

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I love this wolf hag a lot. Nothing would keep us apart. Not a mountain, an ocean, or even a pissed off cat.

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>>42817309
UWAAAAAAAAAAAAAA I NEED TO TAKE A WHIFF OF THAT BRA
THE INVIGORATING HORMONES OF A HAG'S SWEATY BOOBS

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

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>>42824599
Sorry dude, she's already been used by the whole neighbourhood

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>>42824766
The whole neighborhood? Me.

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I want to write but it’s 2:30AM…

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Knowing that /b*come/ has become a dirty word in this general, I propose... a reverse!
You and the chuuba get isekai'd but it's her RM that's /become/ the chuuba
One of the more schizo concepts there, definitely

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>>42829339
What's the point of the dual Isekai?
Your not exactly adding more to it since she'd already be a 'knowledgeable outworlder' by way of all of them watching anime and playing games (as is the standard for the genre).
Though if you do want to keep it a second person pov I think (You) being an Isekai world native might be an interesting twist to the formula. Idunno maybe you're some gritty adventurer beaten down by the world that finds a new purpose trying to guide a girl that came from nowhere.

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>>42830251
I was thinking that it would be like a Grimgar-esque isekai where the world is a lot tougher and grittier. Sure, they know anime and video games, but has any of that taught them the right way to stab a Kobold before it smashes your skull in? Plus they wouldn't know how to actually act out their vtuber selves: Shion would struggle to actually use magic, Gura would trip over herself using a trident, Pekora would... I dunno, chuck her hair carrots at a slime enemy?
Your idea is interesting too, though! It can focus on both you guiding the chuuba and also the chuuba herself coming to grips with her new form. From entertaining an audience over the stream to having to fight for her life in an unfamiliar world.
You can also have ALL of them get /become'd/ and isekai'd as their chuuba selves, and they'll either have get their shit together or get torn apart

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>>42829339
>isekai
stopped reading

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>>42830251
>Though if you do want to keep it a second person pov I think (You) being an Isekai world native might be an interesting twist to the formula. Idunno maybe you're some gritty adventurer beaten down by the world that finds a new purpose trying to guide a girl that came from nowhere.
This sounds interesting, though it needs some smooth bridging of the unusually big knowledge gap that exists between the self-insert and the reader. Usually the POV character is the one being educated by more knowledgeable people, not the other way around.

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>>42832790
I mean it is 'solved' by the chuuba being in the position of 'idiot that needs to get shown the ropes'.
To get the obvious fantasy example out of the way it could be them trying to video game their way through a dungeon and needing you to rescue them so you can show them how the world is much more dangerous than what they thought, or trying to get them to be low-key so they don't bring attention to themselves in town, etc.
You'd play the jaded mentor but the lesson/worldbuilding is still getting doled out to the audience... Also nothing is stopping you from making interludes from their perspective if you need that mentor teaching scrub perspective.

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I still want to make a story about chuubas suddenly being thrown into the real world with massive repercussions to society as we know it...

I've gone through several iterations of this idea, all of them could work, I'm just too lazy to write them.

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>>42833117
That's fair. I'm guess I'm still kinda new to the Second Person style common here, so it feels weird to have the self-insert posess a lot of knowledge that the reader doesn't and which gets revealed bit by bit.

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>>42833117
Why does the woman always need the help of the man?

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>>42833151
I have something along those lines worked into the backstory of one of my stories, but there hasn't been an opportunity to bring it up in a way that feels natural. Yet.

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Anyone got a raw version of Post-Lamy Morning Procedure? The Textbin versions are censored because that site eventually decided to censor all swearing and words like 'sex' because we can't have nice things

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>>42833223
It's more believable that way.

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>>42833542
Google docs chads win again.

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>>42833223
I wouldn't trust Suisei to survive if she's dropped five blocks away from her house let alone an entire new planet

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>>42834407
And you're so knowledgeable that you'd nail it, am I right?

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>>42833223
Because that's how life works, sweetie. Your kind are too stupid to live without male support.

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>>42834575
kinda rude to call Suisei an it but yeah

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>>42834575
nta but I have a tremendously big ego, so yes.

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>>42834599
That's a tranny not a woman. The women live in /wvt/ and /MANS/.

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>>42834346
Yea this was before the Google Docs became the norm. I mean the first was on pastebin of all things. Still trying to scavenge things as the /become/ archive got pastebin nuked too.

Can you edit Google Docs once you pub them or not If I gotta carry this damn archive on my back I want to do it right.

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>>42817326
HoloJourneys: A Summoner's Recollection (Series Landing Page)

Anchoring this since I think it got missed getting into the archive when I posted it with chapter 18. It also reminded me that I need to update the landing page itself whenever I create a new chapter.
Also wanted to announce that I finished the soft rewrite of chapters 1-3. I am glad I took the suggestions to give them a good hard look and apply some of the skills I've gained since they were first written to them. What might have looked okay when I first posted them looked absolutely rough and unpolished. I had a bit of fun going back to the beginning and trying to paint a better picture of what happened there. It also made me appreciate how far the story has gone, and how far I've come as well since I first started writing again. I hope you other anons know you're also improving and getting better with every story you make. Overall, I'm pretty happy with the result and hope anyone who gives them a read enjoys them.

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I gotta clean up my image folders, I keep almost doxxing myself with accidentally posting pics of me

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>>42837287
Why are they even in the same folder?

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>>42837287
We already know what you look like, Kson, you don't have to beat around the bush

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>>42837879
I'm just a lazy fuck that hasn't separated folders for chuubas yet.

>>42838025
If I had a limitless supply of Kson ass pics I'd never bother coming here and just masturbate all day

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>>42837287
I hate this image because it reminds me of slampig kson and how no one took that prompt

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>>42817352
Manhandling Kobo.

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>>42834872
>Can you edit Google Docs once you pub them or not If I gotta carry this damn archive on my back I want to do it right.
Yes, you can.

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>>42834872
Alternatively, just don't. Nobody cares about /become/ crap except you.

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>>42821248
i'm going to drop-kick this smug cunt over the tokyo expressway
>verification not required

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>>42841180
Fic where taiga gets turned into a hag and she tries to prevent you from fucking Mio so you do the second best thinglock her in a closet and fuck Mio

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>>42842464

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>>42842464
>slapping noises
>Taiga screaming from the closet, her hand swiping like a paw from below the door

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>>42842464
Taiga should be a bratty fat lolibaba

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>>42817326
Lape Ramy
TAGS: Lamy,Comedy, Rape,
https://rentry.org/4gt4y

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>>42846299
>Comedy, Rape
I really doubt it, but I'll give it a read once I have the time.

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>>42838025
but she should definitely grow a proper bush

imagine that when she does all the bent-over posing on-stream

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>>42830716
This sounds like an interesting idea. A normal girl suddenly being forced into their character and gaining all the character’s respective abilities has potential. I have no clue why you brought up /become/, though.

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>>42833223
???? What did you hope to achieve by asking this?

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>>42846299
My review is that I liked it more than I did not like it. Good work.

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>>42839103
Wtf she is a twig

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>>42833542
Only got chapter 1: https://files.catbox.moe/qcbj79.txt
Also an old-ish version of the catalogue: https://files.catbox.moe/8k1owh.txt
Let me know if there's anything else missing. I think I have some files scattered around my computer

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>>42846299
Rape do be extremely funny

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>>42849133
>Lamy gets raped while the Seinfeld theme plays/canned laughter erupts

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>>42850092
actually may I ask what's the qrd on /become/? I wasn't exactly here for that arc

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>>42852902
>zaion rape fic where she bitterly mocks Anon's smorgasboard of rape victims during and after the act

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>>42854070
>People wanted to be Lamy
>Made a thread called /become/
>Lamys started going schizo and broke containment
>Other people got mad
>Jannies perma nuked /become/
That's the quick run down.

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>>42854837
Oh damn, so that's what happened...
Well, that's the general idea yeah -- normal girl becomes the chuuba, and it doesn't even have to be an isekai. Just drop them into the world of the character, and they suddenly find themselves in a fish out of water situation
>"It's ya boi... wait, I'm supposed to do WHAT with this scythe?"
>"Why are there only carrots in the fridge...? Oh fuck-- I mean, p-peko."
>"Listen guys, I'm not really a pirate. You can't expect me to make this person walk the plank!"

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>>42854782
>zaion rape fic
this but unironically

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>>42846299
>‘’Oh no! A woman!’’
i laughed

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>>42817352
"I love bugs, I love big bugs."
-Gawr Gura

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Weekends only half started bros. What are you planning to do with the rest of it? What ya writing, reading, planning, editing? What are you hoping to get done before the new week starts?

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>>42863724
Studying

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>>42852778
>Also an old-ish version of the catalogue: https://files.catbox.moe/8k1ow
Yea that one tracks with the one I found via wayback. Seems that nothing really updated after that.
And I'm in same boat for only having chapter 1. If I saved the later ones they've vanished into the unorganized mess of files I have stored on this box.

>>42854837
Half truth half rrat. Nice.
From what can be seen its one janny who's got the problem. He's the one who's trying to maximize the amount of money he gets paid working here.
Which is funny as he is paid 0.00 either way

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>>42863947
Hit those books then anon. When you're done you can take a bit to get back to whatever you would rather be doing instead.

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>>42846299
The only thing that I didn't like was the "I'm raising this child without you", the rest was funny

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>>42817352
You're the caretaker/manager or assistant of the Hag Football team, your duty is to satisfy the hags needs after and before a match

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>>42870278
I know this probably refers to soccer, not American Football, but the idea of watching Mio fucking full send tackle someone into the dirt is really funny.

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>>42871802
Thinking of soccer made me imagine a version with football hooligan holos running their fanbases like firms

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>>42871802
You can tackle someone in soccer too, just once time per meach though

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>>42870278
This but it's ice hockey

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>>42817326
i'm a lurker, i don't really write shit. but that prompt from >>42777105 lit a fire under me that i couldn't ignore. i doubt this will satisfy you, but i hope it will at least tickle your belly.

Today was horrible.

Just like yesterday, and the day before that, and the one before that, too. Just like every day in recent memory, come to think of it.

Work has left you hallow, drained and lacking any energy or emotion. Riding the train back to your home, your hand hangs loosely to the ceiling hanger to keep you in place, your eyes idly wandering around the car. Everyone looks just like you: depressed, distressed, and miserable. Just another day.

With a silent, heaving sigh you pull out your phone and open up Twitter, hoping that the algorithm will show you those cute anime girls that manage to soothe your soul. That website is a trash fire to be sure, but it does have its uses sometimes. Plenty of cute girls, cute animals, and a plethora of easily accessible porn for when you're feeling in the mood. Your mind flashes a warning thought through your brain, warning you that you shouldn't be doing this because of what others might see and think, but you dismiss it quickly; you're 3X years old and you don't care what anyone else thinks. You're an adult, they're strangers who you'll likely never meet again, and it just doesn't matter in the end.

The train jostles as it travels along, up and down, side to side on the rails, as your thumb continues to swipe your phone from bottom to But as you're scrolling, your eyes catch something...a rather salacious artistic image of a red-haired, twin-tailed girl. You immediately recognize her as a streamer you've kept your eye on for some time. A girl who stylizes herself as a pirate captain, yet she looks like she would instead be ravished by the same pirates she would associate with.

The artwork your eyes are affixed to is rather lewd; while she's in her iconic outfit, the artist positioned her in such a way that you're given a tasteful view of her from behind. Her outfit is tight and form-fitting, and definitely shows off her ample assets, which consist of a pair of clevage that you could drown in, to say nothing of what her lower body offers. Your eyes start to follow the curves of her thick thighs and ass, slowly switching to her beautiful hips, and then to her chest, drinking in the details at every moment. Whoever did this deserves praise, if not a slap on the back and a few free beers. Your addled brain has been shaken out of its work-induced stupor, and you click on the art tag to see more. Some are rather tame in comparison, some are...more explicit. But you find yourself continuing on and on, searching for more of this girl to satisfy your needs.

It's only after a while you notice that someone is directly behind you, pressed against you in the cramped confines of the train. You can feel your arm enveloped by fatty tissue, and the hot breath from their lips against your ears. You briefly pause and fight off a cold sweat. 'Is someone watching me?' 'Who could it be?' 'He feels like a sweaty old man.' 'I should turn around and confront them.' 'I bet it's a fat ojii-san with a massive belly.' You take a deep breath to steady yourself, and turn around to face them.

What your eyes are met with is not the embodiment of the cuckold king, but a pair of piercing eyes. One yellow, the other red. A girl stands pressed against you, dressed messily in a hoodie that cannot hide her bright crimson hair nor adequately conceal her heaving chest and ample body. A pair of fogged glasses hang loosely on her nose, as if they're about to fall off at any moment. As you stare at her, she stares back at you, her eyes quickly darting from yours down to your phone -- which is frozen on an image of her in another lewd pose and outfit -- and back again. You try to summon your courage and say something, but no words come out. Your gaze is fixed on her face and those eyes.

This continues for what seems like hours, but could only be seconds, as she keeps looking between you and the image of her. Her chest rises and falls in quick bursts as she continues to look back and forth. Her cheeks become as red as her hair as she looks, and finally she stops to look you dead in the eyes. She swallows, her throat visibly bulging from the effort, before she opens her mouth and utters a single word.

"Ahoy."

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>>42817309
imagine the smell

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>>42817326
i'm a lurker, i don't really write shit. but that prompt from >>42777105 lit a fire under me that i couldn't ignore. i doubt this will satisfy you, but i hope it will at least tickle your belly.

Today was horrible.

Just like yesterday, and the day before that, and the one before that, too. Just like every day in recent memory, come to think of it.

Work has left you hallow, drained and lacking any energy or emotion. Riding the train back to your home, your hand hangs loosely to the ceiling hanger to keep you in place, your eyes idly wandering around the car. Everyone looks just like you: depressed, distressed, and miserable. Just another day.

With a silent, heaving sigh you pull out your phone and open up Twitter, hoping that the algorithm will show you those cute anime girls that manage to soothe your soul. That website is a trash fire to be sure, but it does have its uses sometimes. Plenty of cute girls, cute animals, and a plethora of easily accessible porn for when you're feeling in the mood. Your mind flashes a warning thought through your brain, warning you that you shouldn't be doing this because of what others might see and think, but you dismiss it quickly; you're 3X years old and you don't care what anyone else thinks. You're an adult, they're strangers who you'll likely never meet again, and it just doesn't matter in the end.

The train jostles as it travels along, up and down, side to side on the rails, as your thumb continues to swipe your phone from bottom to top, but as you're scrolling, your eyes catch something...a rather salacious artistic image of a red-haired, twin-tailed girl. You immediately recognize her as a streamer you've kept your eye on for some time. A girl who stylizes herself as a pirate captain, yet she looks like she would instead be ravished by the same pirates she would associate with.

The artwork your eyes are affixed to is rather lewd; while she's in her iconic outfit, the artist positioned her in such a way that you're given a tasteful view of her from behind. Her outfit is tight and form-fitting, and definitely shows off her ample assets, which consist of a pair of cleavage that you could drown in, to say nothing of what her lower body offers. Your eyes start to follow the curves of her thick thighs and ass, slowly switching to her beautiful hips, and then to her chest, drinking in the details at every moment. Whoever did this deserves praise, if not a slap on the back and a few free beers. Your addled brain has been shaken out of its work-induced stupor, and you click on the art tag to see more. Some are rather tame in comparison, some are...more explicit. But you find yourself continuing on and on, searching for more of this girl to satisfy your needs.

It's only after a while you notice that someone is directly behind you, pressed against you in the cramped confines of the train. You can feel your arm enveloped by fatty tissue, and the hot breath from their lips against your ears. You briefly pause and fight off a cold sweat. 'Is someone watching me?' 'Who could it be?' 'He feels like a sweaty old man.' 'I should turn around and confront them.' 'I bet it's a fat ojii-san with a massive belly.' You take a deep breath to steady yourself, and turn around to face them.

What your eyes are met with is not the embodiment of the cuckold king, but a pair of piercing eyes. One yellow, the other red. A girl stands pressed against you, dressed messily in a hoodie that cannot hide her bright crimson hair nor adequately conceal her heaving chest and ample body. A pair of fogged glasses hang loosely on her nose, as if they're about to fall off at any moment. As you stare at her, she stares back at you, her eyes quickly darting from yours down to your phone -- which is frozen on an image of her in another lewd pose and outfit -- and back again. You try to summon your courage and say something, but no words come out. Your gaze is fixed on her face and those eyes.

This continues for what seems like hours, but could only be seconds, as she keeps looking between you and the image of her. Her chest rises and falls in quick bursts as she continues to look back and forth. Her cheeks become as red as her hair as she looks, and finally she stops to look you dead in the eyes. She swallows, her throat visibly bulging from the effort, before she opens her mouth and utters a single word.

"Ahoy."

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>>42870278
Depressingly enough they don't want sex. Despite the recruiter strongly implying it.

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>>42875019
cool ficlet bro

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>>42877653
>implying
Some peple get horny after exercising

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>>42879414
The first half of Botan/Mio Ringo is perfect sweaty post exercise hag smut

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>>42879414
When I first started working out, whenever I left the gym, fucking was the only thing in my mind on the walk home. But nowadays that doesn't really happen anymore

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>>42880567
For me it usually happens while I'm lifting. I actually get boners too. Good thing I'm homegym master race

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>>42881433
If you're getting boners while lifting you're not lifting hard enough

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>>42875019
>i don't really write shit.
Are you for real? You should definitely have a go at something longer. Though short, this is far better quality than the majority of first attempts at writing I’ve read here. Well done Anon.

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>>42879414
I still get random boners.

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Now, I'm not saying I personally like cumming on my figurines, but if it's official Cover merchandise of Botan with hard nipples, then maybe...

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>>42886415
Wow, those are some prominent nips.

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>>42886415
w-whoa

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>>42886415
Gonna act out Cascade of White with this

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>>42886415
I'm willing to bet she specifically asked for that detail.

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>>42888368
I hope so. That would make it 10x hotter

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>>42839103
IMAGINE

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>>42824766
vouch i was the neighborhood

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>>42890742
Thinking about that grooming Kobo story now...

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>>42892215
Man, it's such a shame that that fic skipped through the 'content' of the grooming to effectively only showing the prologue and epilogue of the concept. There was at least a three chapter mini-series in there. I really hope that author comes back to that concept

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kill yourselves indogs, nobody cares about your shitty gura ripoff

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burger here, I care about indo rip off gura

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indog here, i know i'm a parasitic leech on the underbelly of the wealthy anglosphere and that i have literally nothing to say worth listening to, but i'm going to continue shitting the thread up constantly because i need the gift cards to play hogwarts legacy

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>>42895205
finally, some honesty

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>>42895205
why don't you get a job and buy it yourself?

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>>42895349
because i'm a terminally online work-shy peasant with delusions of grandeur that likes shitposting on 4chan only slightly less than i like harree pooter

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>>42895591
start at a job as a janitor. more often than not you're on your own minding your business, then gradually you can come more and more out of your shell.

that's what helped me anyway

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by the way, you guys should try out this delicious traditional indog cuisine i'm eating right now called pagpag, it's so good basically everyone is eating it

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>chumpedo's egot gets hurt because another streamer is blue
>shitposts the thread
Well, Gura sure is back, now all he needs is to pull the numbers table

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>>42853606
Laughtracks are so overused and defeat the entire purpose of comedy.

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>>42898062
[background laughter]

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Koyo has a pretty unique way of speaking, but I have no idea how to replicate it in written English prose. I don't even know if I could express it in Japanese written form.

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>>42899260
Doesn't matter. No-one here watches streams so we won't know if you mess up.

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>>42883742
first of all, a sincere thank you for the kind words. secondly, i know i have some writing talent but i hate the writing process. i'm more of an idea man and editor desu. in that capacity, i've been working closely with another anon here on his work, and i'm proud to say i've been instrumental in helping him produce an amazing story. some day i might to try my hand at a full length piece, but for now i'm content with what i've got.

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>>42901775
You also have a lot of potential as a critic, I think. Great work

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>>42901775
I'm deeply curious now. But thank you for the short tidbit, was nice.

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>>42899260
Well tell the thread your observations/notes. Maybe talking/writing it out will help you think of how you'd transcribe it, or it could also get another anon to point you towards an accent/way of speaking that already exists in English that you could use

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>>42902114
>>42902257
again, thank you for the positivity. i did enjoy writing that short fic, since marine is one of my oshis. i might do it again if i see another prompt that strikes my mood.

as for your curiosity, i want to explain more but i haven't asked for permission from the writer anon to explicitly name him. the best i can say is that it's a multi chapter story and that it's good enough to cause someone here to become so booty-blasted he has to shit on it at every opportunity; most likely because he can't create something of its caliber.

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>>42895704
Pagpag is Filipino in origin.

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>>42903522
I find it funny that this description somehow fits two series + a smut fic here

[Anonymous No.]

Bump

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>>42899260
>Koyori still hasn't gotten a gokkun fic

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>>42817326
Partners in crime, chapter 2: Lunch with the Kami
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTjf9qLgkJBiNyWoj4J5bQ1PhVD3lMhJd_lThD8w8_aSdDju9MwuTYJFPROxcZuVY1GR7NnhbEDZSp3/pub
Tags: Kurokami, Fubuki, Ayame, Iroha, SFW

As always, feedback is deeply appreciated

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>>42906137
Hot damn! I was looking forward to this! Gonna give this a read later after I'm back from playing some weiss with my updated holo decks.

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>>42906137
This story feels like it was written by an ESL who's trying his best. And I don't mean that in a derogatory way. It's clunky and the dialogue feels weird in places, but it has SOUL. I want to see where things go from here.

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[Anonymous No.]

>>42908653
Yoku**surudedogiru

******teru* *idegogiruyo!!!

[Anonymous No.]

>>42909596
よく確認するでござる
風真皆殿が思ってるほど無いでござるよ!!

よくかくにんするでござる
かざまみなどのがおもってるほどないでござる!!

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>>42908653
>>42909596
>>42909832
Translate it, weebs

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>>42909976
>"Kazama has less than everyone thinks!"
>"Please confirm them well!"

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>>42910284
Thank you

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>>42850732
The rrat I heard second on /vt/ was that she had some sort of digestive health issues while growing up and it stunted her growth. Also, some people are just naturally tiny.

[Anonymous No.]

>every single concept I come up with inevitably devolves into porn of bitches with hairy pussies
How do I stop this?

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>>42912477
Clearly you need to write about bitches with hairy pussies to let it all out. I'd recommend Korone and Mio.

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>>42912674
I have a hard time thinking about Korone sexually. I mean look at her. She even has that dopey expression of vacant contentment that dogs get when they're happy.

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>>42913011
You're not trying hard enough, then. Her ASMR drives my dick into a feeding frenzy and while her character model might look dopey, she knows what's up. She is far from innocent.

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>>42913011
I think you might be a bit fruity

[Anonymous No.]

>>42913011
You're just gay

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>>42913011
yea sure whatever you say bro

[Anonymous No.]

>>42913011
I was browsing Korone porn to prove you wrong and I found some extremely hot artwork so thanks for that

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>>42906137
Another great hit.

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>>42913011
Don’t worry Anon, while I do want to sex the dog, I understand what you mean.

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>>42903504
If we were face to face I would be able to imitate it, but trying to write it out is hard. A lot of the time her voice escalates as she speaks and as a result the end of the sentence is louder than it was at the start. She also extends her vowels a lot, though I guess for that you could just use “~”. Again, it’s overall hard to explain.

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>>42912477
You could commit suicide and remove your disgusting hair fetish from the world

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>>42918815
Using things like "~" in the right spots is a good tool. You can also do things like elongate the vowels via typing the vowel itself in the world more than once.

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>>42912477
Add a Chekov's razor somewhere in the first act.

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>>42817352
Ollie has to hold in your cum when you creampie her right before a ninja mission
https://files.catbox.moe/5tvwx0.png

[Anonymous No.]

There's never enough time to fit in a full body workout god damn it

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>>42924627
Cute Zombie.

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>>42906137
So I got around to reading this, and I couldn't help but feel some whiplash from what I remembered of chapter 1. The grammar compared to the first chapter felt a little clunky in places, but not so much so that I couldn't get the gist of things. I also feel like there is a lot of background information being thrown at the reader in regards to the setting and characters, but I still feel like I'm just making guesses and inferences.
I think your story would benefit more from glossing things up a little scene wise. I also felt like there was a lot of instances where Anon reacts to something in a way where there is some background context to him doing so, but it's not really touched on so far. The scene with Iroha was pretty fun! Dorky samurai doesn't get enough love, so I was pleased to see her included. Overall, I'm enjoying the interactions and the relationships as they get fleshed out and explored. If the scenes themselves can get more color to them, this story can really shine. I also think the angle of a person getting into relationships with servants of gods and such is a cool one. I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes.

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>>42924627
We haven't gotten an Ollie fic in what feels like years.

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>>42839103
What the fuck am I looking at? There's an arm reaching across the table that I assumed was Kobo's, but there's also a body in the foreground. Is this a yab?

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>>42929006
It is. Her prosthetic hand fell off and somehow that moved the camera I think maybe the hand was attached to the camera for some reason?? but yeah Kobo says something like goblom calmly and then covers the screen of the camera with her other hand.

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>>42929370 (me)
Goblom = stupid, or the classic Japanese baka. She was berating herself

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>>42929006
That's her body btw she weighs like 39kg

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>>42929431
I have a certain amount of respect for people who learn Indonesian.

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>>42929757
It's called Google translate. But we do have an Indonesian in this general besides shitposters. He helped me translate something once

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>>42887410
Not going to lie, maybe it's time to live out that urge if I end up getting this one. (I wrote it)

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>>42929370
>prosthetic hand
The fuck? She’s missing a limb?

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>>42931917
Internetexplorerchama...

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>>42931917
Not a limb, just her hand.

[Anonymous No.]

Speaking of IDs, I think it's been several months since I last even saw someone mention Zeta. It's only Kobo and Kaela. Jesus Christ, even Iofi at her lowest was more talked about than Zeta

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>>42933120
Zeta is strong, but like say Fauna or Mel, she's better at supporting someone's bit or streaming in duos
by herself she's pretty cute and decent, but not that memorable and she fades into non-existance in bigger collabs
That and some trannys here try really hard to force her with axel like they force vesper and kronii

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>>42933400
I searched for the last Zeta thread on /vt/, they clearly get to bump limit at least, but it takes them about a week. Also, I found this in there which is pretty hot

>Zeta's r u 'avin a wank m8?
https://files.catbox.moe/uav597.mp3
>Zeta's who cares it's just a wank, whatever
https://files.catbox.moe/nufmb1.mp3
>Zeta's bad boy
https://files.catbox.moe/xatv1s.mp3

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>>42933604
She collabed with my oshi some time ago and i liked her, but i already have my hands full
I sometimes go to their threads and bump it for them, any friend of Bae is my friend

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>>42894083
Yeah I kinda dropped the ball on that one, was too horny to realize it's full potential. I might go back to it sometime

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>>42924627
I've got something like that in the works, though the ninja mission is "Showing off the outfit to her mother"

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>>42947483
I find it pretty crazy how well engrained loli and shota are in Japanese culture to the point where Vtubers making actual advances on little boys is played off as a gag

[Anonymous No.]

You heard it here first folks. Fubuki prefers her sex to last for around an hour and a half, maybe an hour if she's feeling tired. So don't go overboard!

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>>42949145
hah, jokes on her, I'd probably last 5 minutes

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>>42949145
She's getting 2 minutes or 5 if she's lucky and I'm tired

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>>42941458
I like the sound of that

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>>42947856
When has a chuuba ever made advances on an actual child?

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>>42933400
>zetaxel
I thought that people were shipping him with his manager now, especially after he decided to delay their A Way Out collab indefinitely.

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>>42950503
Marine.

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>>42933120
I don't know, Iofi could be basically gone from the board for long times while Zeta is mentioned in /hlgg/ when she's streaming. She's also grey Lamy, mentioned when Axel comes up, and /who/ used to talk about her. Plus /V7/ is much more consistently there than /pagi/. Plenty of holos don't have their own 24/7 general.

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>>42949145
her face is oddly circular there

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>>42949145
That's very doable with foreplay.

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>>42952597
If you count foreplay as sex, I guess. Which it isn't, although the original post didn't specify what kind of lewd activities Fubuki enjoys, just "sex" which could mean anything as long as long as sexual gratification and one or more of her holes are involved

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>>42950503
Marine and Noel

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>>42912477
Use someone unexpected to have one instead of a kemomimi hag maybe one of the Holo Elves?

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>>42949145
I’ve edged myself for 6 hours straight before. I can handle her.

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>>42950503
Marine and Fubuki

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>>42912477
Write about the ones who are confirmed to clean shave even on their spare time, and the ones who find pubes gross, like Nene, Moona, etc

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>>42953747
Now try it again without any breaks between strokes

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>>42955207
But that's just regular masturbating.

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>>42949145
Good to hear.

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>>42949145
90 minutes sex with Fubuki but the experience is so mind blowing that you can't get enough of it and you continue to fuck her brains out as soon as you become horny again.

[Anonymous No.]

Has anyone ever dropped two individual stories at once?

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>>42959595
People have dropped multiple chapters at once and people have also posted multiple stories in the same thread before.

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>>42959595
Our cures was dropped all at once and Holojourneys has dropped multiple chapters at the same time.

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>>42960520
>Holojourneys has dropped multiple chapters at the same time
Speaking of, just a quick reminder to the HJ guy that your stuff is garbage and nobody reads it.

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>>42960641
Imagine a story being so rent free in your head you feel the need to shit on it every time it is brought up

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>>42960857
Imagine continuing to write such garbage even though not a soul in the thread cares about it. Are you just lonely?

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>>42961233
Anon, your reading reps...

[Anonymous No.]

I wish my fics could live rent free inside of a schizo's head.

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>>42961314
You don't even have a clue what you're talking about. Sad and pathetic

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>>42879414
I get tingles on my dick when I do abs

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>>42959595
I have posted multiple stories in the samr thread before

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>>42959595
Are you thinking of posting two fics on Valentine's day?

[Anonymous No.]

I need to keep reminding myself this isn't /hag/ with the OP

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>>42962573
Not really, I was just curious.

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>>42967271
To be fair, there's quite a bit of overlap. We've got our fair share of hag enjoyers around these parts.

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>>42968642
Agreed. Of course there's always the forbidden Hag Prompt...
Futa Lamy x Botan
After all pretty much if there's Futa art of them it's almost always Botan with the Magnum and in control.

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>>42967271
Love me some hags. Love writing about blossoming romance with hags.

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>>42968961
>Lamy is a premature dicklet but botan still likes it
>Lamy has insane dick game and is constantly domming the lion
>Lamy getting a footjob
that's one hell of a prompt

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>>42968961
Which is weird because Botan has called herself a sub.

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>>42969105
>everyone sees her as a cool and confident older woman who would step on your balls without a moment's hesitation
>in actuality she just wants you to pin her down, manhandle her lioness body and have your way with her until she can't walk straight
I have the most understandable boner right now

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>>42969105
It's that her design her choice of games and personality is often is a bit more 'masculine' than most, especially with her reactions towards them. After all Shooters and horror are ""Boys"" games and people expect girls to not only suck but get scared by them.

Lamy of course is a bit lower key personality especially with the ShishiLamy horror streams having Lamy effectively clinging to Botan's arm. during them because of how scared Lamy was.

We also get Botan being the more dominant personality with ShishiWata streams and the overall relationship especially with the Predator-Prey connection with a Lion and Sheep so her being the 'sub' in that relationship would feel unnatural.

That said I could really see Botan as a bit of power bottom DESU

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>>42969347
Of course you gotta be brave enough to break through that guard to get her to go from phase 1 to the second phase.

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>>42969388
>personality is often is a bit more 'masculine'
Anon, I think you're gay.

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>>42969388
>That said I could really see Botan as a bit of power bottom DESU
we had this discussion before, Botan IS a power bottom. She just looks dominant because she hangs around ultra-subs

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>>42969087
It's being worked on, had a little bit of kidney stone to occupy the mind these last few days, but I'm alive and the footjob will come (and hopefully so will you), don't worry

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>>42969347
>>42969539
>have a crush on Botan, the toughest girl in school
>way too intimidated to try and make a move, convinced that she'll eat you alive if you play your cards wrong
>get talking with her friend Wamy one day
>she confides in you a way that you might be able to get Botan's attention
>it sounds utterly insane, but she swears that it'll work
>fuck it, not like you had a better idea
>make your peace with God, walk right up to Botan and kabedon the wall while looking her directly in the eye
>she cums on the spot

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>>42969883
Im not your biggest fan footguy, i was just entertaining the idea of Lamy fucking Botan's feet
with that being said, sorry you had to deal with that and i will read your fic

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>>42969883
Great to know. I need my elf feet fics

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>>42969979
That sounds super fun

[Anonymous No.]

dear HJanti,

your ceaseless and unending spergout over holojourney is one of the most hilariously pathetic things i've seen on this website. please continue to waste your time and energy shouting into the void about how bad you think the story is, while simultaneously not providing any concrete examples of why you think so. maybe you should pop out a story of your own if you have any ability to do so, so we can all laugh in your face. i look forward to your next needlessly angry post, because i always enjoy a good laugh.

sincerely,
marine shortfic anon (though you'll probably just think it's journeyanon trying to jab at you)

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>>42971430
If he's the saddest thing you've seen on this website then you haven't been here very long.

[Anonymous No.]

>>42888368
i NEED this

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>>42900778
There is always going to be one retard who claims that they watch the streams and it's out of character even if the fanfic was written by Koyori itself.

I'm honestly starting to think that (outside of the popular EN and ID chuubas) people just say out of character to be spiteful

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>>42969979
>once you know what buttons to push, you can get her wrapped around your little finger
>start calling her Kitten when you're alone together
>sometimes 'accidentally' call her that in public, just to see her squirm
>one day she wears a collar to school 'as a fashion statement'
>she and you are the only ones who know about the leash you've got stashed in your bag for later
>though she manages to uphold her tough reputation, it raises a few eyebrows that you've started hanging around with her so much
>the general consensus among your classmates is that she roped you into being her errand boy
>those fools have no idea
okay I'm done now

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>>42971629
Goddamn I love girls looking aggrieved about sexual acts. Not even rape, necessarily, more looking like you coerced them into doing something uncomfortable for your pleasure.

I am tired of all the willing and enthusiastic footjobs and pitjobs. I need more women submissive and uncomfortable with these fetishes

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>>42973398
100% agree.

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>>42969883
Next time drink more water dipshit

[Anonymous No.]

Botan as a calm and cheeky sub sounds fun. That's a combination we don't have yet afaik

[Anonymous No.]

>>42817352
Kuro giving you a footjob

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>>42977134
PLEASE

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>>42973398
>reluctant pitslut
holy based idea

[Anonymous No.]

>>42977134
Kissable feet.

[Anonymous No.]

>>42977134
That corn? Mine.

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>>42906553
...Thanks I guess? My dialogue still feels weird in my native language tho

>>42916963
Thanks!

>>42928733
Thank you for the feedback! Grammar and in general using words are the great bane of my existence. I made a conscious effort when writing this chapter, and it still ended out weird. But oh well. Little by little we figure stuff out.

Anon absolutely has some background, but I felt like I had no good time to explore it, and that it wasn't strictly needed given what happened so far. That's almost certainly going to be touched on in the next chapter.

As for the background - I have the severe problem of a point of view character that knows more about the setting than my audience. I'm trying to avoid infodumps by adding in little pieces within the narration itself, which at times just feels like I'm throwing information at the reader. Hopefully I can make things clearer from now on.

[Anonymous No.]

What's the difference between corruption and mind break?

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>>42985366
Seems rather simple innit?

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>>42985366
In corruption the participant is still entirely aware of what they're doing and eagerly leans into it, whereas in mind break they're just... not there mentally.

Corruption is a massive fetish of mine and mind break turns me right off.

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>>42985366
Corruption implies that you work them until they turn into something they are not, but willingly

Mindbreak instead is taking the sledgehammer approach and breaking the mental state so they instantly change, but its non-consensual and fucks with their brain
TLDR: One is telling the girl ''you like cocks'' until she goes ''hell yeah, i like cocks!'' and the other is raping her and screaming ''YOU LOVE COCKS'' until she slurrs something aki to ''yes''

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>>42985492
hell yeah, corruption is the shit, specially when they get convinced into some decently weird shit and end up loving it
or when the girl starts wearing high heels and slutwear but only for (you)

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>>42985483
I'm a little on the slow side.
>>42985567
>>42985492
Thanks anons.

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>>42985874
>specially when they get convinced into some decently weird shit and end up loving it
I strongly agree with you.

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>>42983722
Yeah! The grammar will come easier with practice. Just keep at it. I'm also glad to hear some of the background is going to be explored more in the next chapter. Don't be afraid of sprinkling the info you need to across a few scenes, or even have it done via a back and forth conversation. A healthy dialogue is a good way to make presenting that background not feel like an infodump. You can also show what is needed for the situation by an internal monologue for Anon. Just having him recall what he knows internally helps the reader have context for however Anon is going to react next based on what he already knew. I'm looking forward to the next chapter dude. Do your best!

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>>42977134
Imagine the smell.

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>>42987528
That gif is suspicious.

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>>42971430
Wow, give him more attention. What a great idea, that’s totally not what he’s after.

[Anonymous No.]

>>42994691
WHY is that .gif suspicious, anon?

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>>42995465
NTA but for me, it smells like trouble

[Anonymous No.]

>>42996206
Something about it is bugging me...

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>>42870278
>>42872449
Starting a football riot in order to literally steal the world cup during the awards ceremony after the Hag Football team loses in an upset.

[Anonymous No.]

>>43001590
There's an argentinian shitty streaming series with that premise kek

[Anonymous No.]

>>42959595
Yes.

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>>43002146
argies baffle me. I watched that 1984 movie they made (that got nominated for an oscar) and it was really fucking interesting but then they make dogshit like that
Its either Kino or shit, no inbetween

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>>43005685
1984 It's all fake btw, It's like our version of the Holocaust, just that instead of jews It's communists. Also one of the director's Father was in the Militar Goverment so they're also hypocrites

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>>43005685
Well you are talking about a country that lost to a post-Suez crisis Britain.

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>>42817326
Butterfly Bound, Chapter 1
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vTNEGHr7lDGFjpKuiHzt9dfSZzPv8fMT2_D8Ba5sgV02hJDDxjsy7Bt0mucNKrZtH5INU0LAxLZodE-/pub
Tags: Rushia, Marine, Coco, SFW, Fluff

It would have been an ordinary party with friends, if you hadn't alcoholized yourself almost into a coma. And if you hadn't woken up in some unknown hotel room. And if you hadn't found yourself handcuffed to a certain green-haired little someone.
Despite what the title may lead you to believe, this chapter features no bondage.

And here it is, after a good deal of rewriting and editing and fussing about this and that several times over. What had started as a simple Hangover-style prompt now arrives as... something along those lines, but with a dose of various other influences. It's an earnest attempt at exploring Rushia as a character outside of the usual same interpretations (ironic time to post this damn thing in several ways, I know, but this is when I got through the finishing touches, so fuck it), and hopefully it won't turn out too horrible.

Feedback is greatly appreciated, whatever it may entail. I'm rather critical of my own work, and I can already imagine some issues that may be mentioned, but I won't poison the well before people actually read the thing (and someone will probably find a new angle from which I fucked up).
Despite that, I sincerely hope you'll enjoy reading through it.

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>>43006506
yeah, that makes sense
>>43006473
>unironic holocaust denier
yeah i dont believe a word that comes out of your mouth polturd

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>>43006603
>Rushia
not reading it

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>>43006506
>Post-Suez crisis Britain
To be fair, NATO was involved. And we already won 3 wars against the br'ish before that
>>43006904
OH NYOO Don't forget the 6 gorillions killed in the masturbation machines

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>>43006904
You seriously think the holohoax wasn't a diversionary tactic exaggerated and blown out of proportion to distract from the genuinely horrifying war crimes committed by Allied forces? You're ignorant beyond belief.

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>>43006603
That was a fun read my man. I enjoyed the prose, the premise, formatting, and the interactions. I hope that you'll keep giving us little tastes of what happened the night before in the coming chapters. It's always fun to piece together shit over the course of a story. Super interesting to see where this goes. Nice job!

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>>43008618
lol what NATO involvement?
Did NATO troops liberate Goose Green?
Did NATO sink the General Belgrano?
Your post reeks of cope mate which is especially funny considering how disillusioned Argentine troops were once they realized how British the Falklands were.

[Anonymous No.]

Tranny janny's here trying to make sure no-one disturbs his narrative

[Anonymous No.]

Reminder: they do it for free

[Anonymous No.]

Write some cuck black porn fic for the Jannies who are in this thread I'm sure the deadbeats will appreciate it

[Anonymous No.]

>>43006603
Im interested in how this will play out, despite rushia not being someone i like.
I do have some problems with it. The first is the setting being a little fuzzy? I dont know how to explain it but it feels like you had the characters and then kept adding the backstories on top?
Maybe its just me, but it feels kinda weird that Marine is her pirate-cosplaying self...which is also a pirate that works for the mafia? is a bit too much but it can easily be my autism speaking
the other thing i wanna touch on is anon's writing? i know that you want to keep everything under wraps and i dont have a problem with him being kind of a wuss, but the way you ''close the doors'' as he opens them in order to not spill the beans is kinda jarring and makes him unlikeable, since he's constantly going NOPE at the plot
Last and Least, i love shitty silly romance movies with handcuffs so im a bit dissapointed you got rid of them so fast, but hey, i can get it.
Overall, nice work man, waiting for that next chapter.

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>>43006603
>Hangover-style prompt
Fuck yeah, I remember the discussion about this and would love to see something like that explor-
>Rushia
Right. I think you may have curbed yourself. That said, I’ll give it a read when I have the time.

[Anonymous No.]

>>42817352
Lore-accurate Kronii

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>>42817352
anything with marine

[Anonymous No.]

>>42817352
Lore accurate Kroni being fucked by lore accurate Aurelion Sol

[Anonymous No.]

>>43006603
Color me interested. The banter was fun to read, and the fact that this sequence of events somehow started five goddamn months ago makes me curious where this is headed.
And Pekora being somehow involved put a smile on my face.

[Anonymous No.]

>>43013299
Didn't she get fucked by a dog recently

[Anonymous No.]

>>43013580
yeah.
so?

[Anonymous No.]

>>42817326
>>43011304

[Anonymous No.]

>>43013635
That's more than enough Marine

[Anonymous No.]

>>43013580
what

[Anonymous No.]

>>43014025
Look up marine dog

[Anonymous No.]

>>43013984
no its not

[Anonymous No.]

>>43014325
???

[Anonymous No.]

>>42932101
...so is it a deformity or did she get it chopped off by something? That is hardcore.

[Anonymous No.]

>>43015002
I don't actually know I don't watch her enough but given the stump I'm almost sure it was accident related

[Anonymous No.]

>>43014983
On YouTube...

[Anonymous No.]

>>43015002
I don't think people get prosthetics for deformities

[Anonymous No.]

>>43016282
My second cousins arm and hand end at his elbow because the umbilical cord wrapped around his arm in the womb and he's got a prosthesis for it

[Anonymous No.]

>>43016518
That's neat.

[Anonymous No.]

>>43015002
>taking rrats at face value

[Anonymous No.]

>>43015895
https://youtu.be/23IJzfbCnHo
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>>43019009
No it's not.

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>>43019327
Let him believe a lie, anon.

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>>43006603
I like the prose, even if it's a bit clunky. (Your sentences all feel like they could use a once over for superfluous stuff to cut.)
Though I do have to say, this is a really good hook for a prologue, and I'm really enjoying the plot and characters. The monologue is a bit much at the start but it got much better once the other characters got introduced.
Hope you make more chapters cause I want to know more about how this happened.

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>>43006603
Never heard of Rushia before. Is she an indie Vtuber?

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>>43024167
That'd be pretty stupid making your Vtuber name be the same as a country at war

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>>43024422
Stop trying to bring off-topic bullshit already. Fuck off to /pol/.

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>>43024422
Ahem. “Special military operation.”

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>>43020027
What a good dog.

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>>43024533
Nice.

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>>43024422
There's an 'h' in there, important distinction. I can definitely see how you mistook the two names, though, they sound quite similar.

>>43024534
Go away, aggro-schizo.

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>>43024534
This is like their third time. I don't even know why they even bother doing this here.

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>>43024689
In case you don't know, during Rushia's termination arc Haachama started the hashtag #weloverushia but messed up the katakana so it ended up being #weloverussia

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>>43025024
That's one hell of an impressively-timed screw-up.

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I just now realized that I should've mentioned the T34 Calliope in 1984.

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Damn, Bae's karaoke RP stream was great. Good fodder for the pile as always

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>>43013299
GOD, I love me a nice plump ass.

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>>43026800
The zoomer rat’s romance game is too strong

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>>43006603
I really liked this. I think it meanders a bit in the beginning but once Marine enters the picture it gets much better. The thread starting from five months ago is a great way to get the reader interested but be careful you don't bite off more than you can chew, so to speak. I like that you interpreted Marine being a pirate into being a kind of smuggler who cosplays, very clever.
My main critique is that your dialog is a bit chunky and long. It could use a bit of space or spice to keep things flowing.

Overall, great setup, I'm looking forward to more.

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>>43027262
She's such a sweetheart. It's played up of course but you can tell she's a romantic.
Guess I'll be writing a Bae fic next. Honestly, part of me wants to take that karaoke stream and turn it into a fic.

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>>43026906

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>>43026906
God, I wish that were me.

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>>43026800
I missed it, was it great?

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>>43028856
Me too. I'd love to be a cute Sui-chan. I'd probably spend all day masturbating, though.

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>>43028877
Yeah, a lot of cute Bae moments and some decent comedy as well. If you're not familiar with her "stream lore" you might be a bit confused. It's not "as" good as last year's stream or the recent Christmas one but it's solid.

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>>43027262
All that mean she’s experienced

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>>43029176
Fuck it, I’ll watch it when I have the time. Thanks for telling us.

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>>43029294
Like I said, it's great fodder if you're ever interested in writing Bae fluff. It gives a good window into her mindset, imo.

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>>43026906
Suisei has suck a slappable ass. Wish more fics focus on that.

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>>43029449
Nah, I just need to start watching more streams and vods.

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>Holofantasy

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Ok am I going insane or are people celebrating valentine's day like 3 months early?? Valentine's is 12th of June what the fuck is going on??

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>>43030265
You know its celebrated on 14th of February. Why even pretend otherwise.

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>>43030472
It literally says 12th of June on Google

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>>43030265
Don't broadcast that you're Brazilian it's not something to be proud of and it's retarded that they do it then too

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>>43030535
Wait that doesn't make any sense. Valentine's Day was originally a feast day for St. Valentine why is it so late in the year. Are Brazilians retarded?

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>>43030535
Wow ok that makes sense but it's really retarded. Apparently we celebrate it on June because valentine's day would happen right before carnival if we did it now. Crazy to me that they celebrate it now though

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>>43029841
I still find it very funny how the tone of that fic was determined by the dice mostly being on anon's side.

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>>43030690
Yes

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>>43030535
>Brazilian
make sense.

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>>43030693
The rest of the world finds it crazy you think the 12th of June is the correct date.

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New thread
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>>43030509
???

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>>43031664
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