/wg/ - Writing General - Oni Edition

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This is the writing thread, for all of your fanfiction needs and desires. Check the archives below for everything the thread has put out so far, ranging from SFW to NSFW, fluff to tragedy, small literary works and shitposts alike!

Collective works so far are available in the archive:
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>Isn't this just you fuckers writing fanfiction, eh?
Yes.

previous thread:>>46676468

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Story anchor.
Post 'em if you got 'em

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Do you have a story you'd like to see written? Reply to this post with it! Try to be as clear and concise as possible; the better you describe your idea, the more likely it is to be picked up!

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Story recap! There... were no stories posted in the last thread.

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Prompt recap! Last thread had a lot of new prompts. Here they are in case you missed them:

Greentext prompt:>>46678000

Honey Goblin in 'hot for teacher' shenanigans.:>>46693873

a follow up to ''Mio and Anon are old people in love'' with more emphasis on subaru and ayame cringing into saturn:>>46731098

StarTrekTNG T5EP21 but your oshi is the metamorph:>>46732772

Gura getting caught in the men's room after she went into the wrong one at a con and subsequently getting fucked by no less than thirty chumbuds:>>46735685

Bae/Kiara coming home to find IRyS fucking Mori with a strap on/futa cock:>>46739760

Taking responsibility after you do what any red-blooded male would do after you meet Ui:>>46769975

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Light speed board

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>>46785332
Going on a fossil dig with Mumei where she constantly has to act like she doesn't know exactly where all the bones and ruins came from that she may or may not have had a hand in causing to happen.

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>>46786835
>"You see Anon, these people would have colonized the New World three hundred years earlier!"
>"So...why didn't they?"
>"Cause I didn't want them to-I mean, m-maybe like a religious thing or they might have been scared to fall off the side of the earth? Why would I know?"

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I'm struggling to unlock the Fubuki route in the Hololive VN. Is there a specific flag I need to get earlier in the game in order to get her to agree to the date?

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>>46789593
Did you agree to be her friend?
Then you literally friendzoned yourself.

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>>46789593
There’s a Hololive VN? You mean the Aqua one?

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>>46789808
Are you fucking kidding me? I thought declining would completely lock me out of any future interactions.

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>>46789808
>literally doesn't know how girls friendzone you
Based?

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>>46785263
Well, this was stuck in editing hell for a while.
Partners in crime 3: learning to cook
Tags: Kurokami, Fubuki, Ayame, SFW
https://docs.google.com/document/d/e/2PACX-1vT0va8-xOTcfy4klGmgr08swUD_XZSrYBYXI_0wvTQ-fxxCw5Bjrtq3CjEBIbQH6tDmsYAQKCcd_usq/pub

As always, feedback is deeply appreciated

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>>46791312
Sweet. I've been looking forward to seeing this continued.
Your scene dressing has improved since the last chapter for sure! Class scenes had a lot detail of feeling to them. I also enjoyed how you're starting to consistently touch on the lore and world building in bite sized intervals. The interactions are pretty cute so far, and I'm looking forward to seeing where they all go.

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>>46791312
Overall, I found the piece to be engaging and well-written. The dialogue felt natural and flowed smoothly, and the descriptions of the food were vivid and made my mouth water. The tension between the protagonist and Kurokami added an intriguing layer to the story, and I was left wondering what would happen between them next.

I appreciated the use of sensory details throughout the piece, which helped to bring the rooftop setting to life. The mention of the protagonist's crutch and injured ankle added a touch of realism to the story, and I liked the way it was incorporated into the plot.

One minor critique I have is that there were a few instances where the dialogue felt a bit stilted or forced, particularly in the protagonist's responses to Kurokami. However, this didn't detract from my overall enjoyment of the piece.

Overall, I thought this was a well-crafted and engaging story with strong characterization and vivid descriptions. I would definitely be interested in reading more!

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>>46785332
Accidentally stumbling upon Coco chained up in Cover's basement

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>>46795634
Why would they ever do that

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>>46795634
>Every agency has their companies graduated chuuba's bodies in their basement after their brain was implanted into a different body
>Black companies take a neural scan of their talents and keep a cloned brain in their chuuba body while the 'real' them goes on to join another company and use them as rapedolls for daring to leave

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>>46795948
Because she'd start WW3 so they put out a body double post-graduation while the real one remains locked up

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Saw a post on reddit discussing my VN. Logged in to comment and found out I was suspended 2 years ago. I wasn't making VNs at the time, what could they possibly janny me for? Pretty sure I wasn't dropping racial crime statistics on my official account.
Engagement seems awful there anyways. Nobody even comments, what's the point?

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>>46796600
Which post?

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I wrote 5000 today, feels good man.

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>>46797154
I can do it too watch


5000

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>>46797154
Right on bro! I got around 4.2k done today. Might bang out a few hundred more before bed.

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>>46796807
On the Nijisanji subreddit

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>>46796117
Saving that idea for my inevitable cyberpunk fic

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>>46797154
5000 is damn good

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>>46785332
Anon and his team of outlaws (or he recruits said team) live their adventures and run away from their pasts in spaaaaace

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>>46796600
Nobody even knows what he's talking about, of course there are no comments. It's like someone coming up to you and saying "yo have you read Harry Potter? It's really funny" if you never had read Harry Potter there's no reason for you to engage

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>>46797154
I'm writing a really dialogue heavy scene and that always comes with second guessing. I should get back to writing though. I've been making good progress. At this rate, for the first time in my life I may manage to write 10k words in less than a month.

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>>46797154
If I sat down to write for 18 hours I could probably do 5K, maybe half that time without any distractions.

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>>46798896
Yeah, but look at the other posts on the same subreddit. No more than ten at any given time, yet hundreds of upvotes.

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>>46800364
How many images of your oshi getting fucked do you look at before you find that one that deserves a heart or is good enough to save? Looking/upvoting is easy, free, anonymous, and you can't be criticized for it.

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>>46793343
Okay now this is just openly chatgpt generated. At least strip out the opening adverbs.

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>>46800364
To put it another way, people thought the vn looked interesting, but they haven't played it, so they can't comment on it. If you're too much of a bitch to advertise on Reddit why are you acting surprised when no one there has played it?

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>>46800793
>turn yourself into the worlds brattiest fleshlight for an April Fools joke
Moona's truly an enigma

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>>46801571
I need to ask. Moona forma de brat here is clearly depicted as a 5-7 year old body type, while lolis that are socially acceptable are usually depicted as 9-14 years old. How do you rationalise attraction for her in that state, or do you just not consider it any different?

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>>46796117
>>46798335
So in cyberpunk chuuba world do they get cyborgized into their chuuba body or do they sell their identity and body in order to become a chuuba?

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>>46801872
I don't consider it that different, but I think it's connected to my like of size-difference moreso than me UOH'ing

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>>46802226
Even an average sized cock would cover half her torso's lenght. Would you prefer Moona acting like she did on that stream, or regular Moona in that brat's body? Also would you prefer to double team her with a buddy for maximum hole filling and correction efficiency or solo stuff her?

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>>46801056
Hold on, I wasn't complaining about my VN. Just about the way reddit is in general.
Very official and climate controlled.
It just seems like a place to post fanart and stream announcements. Dry, in other words. Nobody's raving about their oshi, or even discussing streams at all, much less the fanart/memes. 9gag has more discussion, and thus community.
And then you have to wonder if it's even people behind it, upvoting the content, or just an algorithmic bot system
>>46800793
>Looking/upvoting is easy, free, anonymous, and you can't be criticized for it.
Very true. But it's kind of sad.

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>>46802539
Nijisanji BARELY gets any fan content at all. Fans have nothing to discuss besides the streams, and you don't make reddit threads to discuss streams. The place is a wasteland because there's nothing to chat about. Hololive's subreddit is pretty barren too ever since Coco left, but at least there's fan content and interaction to a much higher level.

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>>46802451
If it were just Moona shrunk down into a short-stack then I'd prefer her to be old autistic self, otherwise yeah if she's a loli she better stick the act.

I don't even like dudes in my real porn, so definitely would not be down for a tag team

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>>46802927
Checked out the Hololive subreddit. It does seem markedly better.
Makes sense. Not only because Hololive is more popular, but the Nijisanji subreddit seems to be controlled by Anycolor corporate. Given the wave of bad vibe yabs, and Anycolor's... shall we say, heavy handedness, it's hardly surprising.

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>>46803122
I wish I could inject cunny directly into my brain

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>>46785332
botan sex

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>>46803587
The Hololive subreddit has been hit by some bad management decisions and there have been uprisings, things got better after a while and management is more lax

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>>46804744
I mean, you kinda could but it'd probably be bad for you.

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>>46803587
Honestly it's probably more due to literal audience demographics. Niji just doesn't succeed in getting the male westerner demographic that uses reddit so the place just doesn't have enough fan content to seem alive.

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>>46807233
CUNNY CUNNY CUNNY CUNNY!!!!

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>>46803122
> You're such a pedo

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>>46808852
Shut up shark or you're next

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>>46808995
Hey, that's my wife's wife.

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So I'm working on this fic, and the long and short of it is that (You) are Mumei's last love who died and she transformed civilization to almost entirely be a monotheistic cult dedicated to you with Council's help. But, now you've come back from the dead, and I want all of Council to be hunting you for different reasons. So far I've got-

>Mumei- has spent so long creating this deific version of you that she only remembers that one and what you were like on your deathbed. She doesn't recognize you and thinks you're a grave robber, leading her to be SUPER fucking mad whenever you cross paths.
>Fauna- Recognizes your body, but has a moral and physical repulsion to the idea of necromancy such that she can't let you live. Is pretty remorseful that she has to see someone she cared about die again, but deep down thinks you're a disgusting abomination now and promises that she'll find whoever brought you back and make them suffer for turning her old friend into a monster(You look completely okay for the most part, barring a few specific things that could be hidden and make you look normal).
>Kronii- HATES that you're back. Never liked you, because she always wanted to get with Mumei so has essentially just been waiting centuries for Mumei to move on. Just when Kronii thought that something was stirring in that department, (You) pop back up and Mumei's as furious with the world as the day you died. Will kill you on sight to prevent becoming 'The Clock Who Was Cucked To Death'

Any ideas for the other Bae and Sana? Or anybody else? I want to include a few other chuubas, something like IRyS using her power as a nephilim to try and make you a legitimate deity, but nothing set in stone.

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>>46813038
Why not actually have Bae be on your side for a change? Being chaos, she revels in the fact that you've returned and upheaved the boring status quo for both civilization and the wardens.
>Sana
There is no need.

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>>46802451
I would simply sample everything before making the choice

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>>46813640
> Sample
You get to put the tip in for two seconds in each of Moona's forms before choosing. Which hole is also up to you.

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>>46813889
What happens at new moon

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>>46813889
It's always going to be ass.

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>>46814107
I don't think your dick is going to fit when she's... oh, nevermind...

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>>46814181
You just aren't trying hard enough

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>>46814253
I don't want to be there to see the result

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>>46814004
She is reborn. It's a pretty obvious pattern anon.

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>>46813038
Mumei and Fauna's motivations work, but I find Kronii's to be kind of overdone. But I cant come up with anything that's not just Fauna's motivatoin. My apologies.
For Sana, I have two ideas:
>she doesn't have anything personally for or against you, but you're making her friends upset and that's more than enough.
>Sana, an apostle of the Ancient Ones, has been working to spread her God's word. She wants to eliminate you before wider society finds out to prevent a "Jesus returning from the dead" scenario and ruining all that.

I kind of second >>46813336
for Bae, I think that'd be pretty interesting.

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>>46814004
You don't want the new moon, anon.

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>>46813038
>Kronii- HATES that you're back
Man, I had to do a double take after misreading this the first time.

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>>46813336
I didn't even think about someone being an ally, guess I was a little too focused on coming up with reasons for them to want to kill you. I think that could actually be something I can work with, maybe along the lines of 'says she'll let it play out because the chaos caused by your second coming, but it's actually because she's too much of a soft sweetheart to lift a finger against a friend.'?

>>46815267
Yeah I get the jealousy things a little uninspired, but I thought that the idea of the only person that's the closest to being aware of the reality of the situation is the one who cares the least about the why's and how's. Sanner rocking with the Ancient Ones and having a hidden agenda could be neat, I'll think on that one for sure!

>>46815805
>Kronii going on a Hulk Hogan sex tape tier rant about being with a black man

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Oh how I wish more vtubers could be convincing dom characters...

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>>46816499
>but it's actually because she's too much of a soft sweetheart to lift a finger against a friend.'?
Perfect. I love it.

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>>46785332
botan sex

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>>46817603
Who even are the convincing Doms? Mel and Choco? Maybe Suisei?

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>>46819532
I don't think Yozora "perpetual attempted rape target" Mel would be considered a dom.

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>>46817603
Do Yanderes count

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>>46817603
Are we talking soft dom or hard dom? Do you just want her to take the lead, or do you want whips and being stepped on?

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I've rewritten the same scene 4 times now. I kind of want to remove it so I can be lazy but at the same time I'd like to keep it in the story. I just can't figure out how to write it or where to start it.

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>>46820109
Just leave it be and write ahead of it anon. At some point you need to just let it rest in your head for a bit rather than trying to smack your head against it.

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>>46791312
that was a really good read, thanks anon! Something about the way you implement mystery, magic and folklore into the setting paints a really vivid picture in my head and I like that. It feels like you put a lot of effort into the world building and I'm looking forward to how this will unravel in the future.
I also like the dynamics between the cast, every girl feels unique and likable in their own way.
I agree with the other anons that the dialogue can still be a bit rocky at times and the protag, despite having unique talents and knowledge of the Kami, still degrades into the stuttering "yes-ma'am" pushover whenever he interacts with Kuro, which is a bit too trope-y for my liking.
Speaking of which, among the girls, Kuro seems like the weakest link in the chain so far, character-wise. She appears a bit one dimensional (except for the last few paragraphs of the chapter) and although I'm but a filthy clip watcher, Kuro has alway stuck me as more of a cool, collected, says-what-she-thinks kind of type that doesn't get embarrassed easily - even teasing and giving the listener shit for beating around the bush a lot of times instead of saying what he wants.
In /wg/ stories, however, she tends to be characterized as more of a reclusive loner bully "with a dark secret" that's somehow allergic to humor and often downright hostile.
That's not your fault, mind you, just a thing that stood out to me in multiple stories now.
That being said, I'll continue rooting for FBK and I am looking forward to future chapters!

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>>46820025
Some times you just want a chuuba to beat the shit out of you and then pull down your pants and laugh at your tiny dick, y'know?

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>>46816499
Late to the party but why not make kronii completely desinterested but professional?
>Everything has a time Anon. Now, its nothing personal here and i can asure you that i really dont care about you
>But every second you are alive is stolen time for someone else
>And that just wont do
Add some light jealousy and maybe a pinch of actual frustration when she cant kill you and you have your kronii that might settle for a threesome if you end up going that route

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Easter is in less than 2 days, surely you have prepared a fic for such an important and interesting holiday?

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>>46820822
Korone seems like the obvious choice for shit-beating-out-of. Or Kurokami. Maybe Lui or Risu (Forma de Ayunda).

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>>46821347
No?

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I have never read a fic that's blueballed me so much like "Cozy aftermath with a Kusogaki". The fact that there's no actual sex happening and it's all foreplay pisses me off. I want some sweaty babymaking sex with Shion, not what happens after.

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>>46821347
What kind of plot would an easter fic involve? Hard mode: No sex involved.

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>>46821942
I mean, hunting and skinning the rabbit still makes for good gic material, just switch the rabbit with Pekora and the hunter with idk Mio.

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>>46821942
Well you could always make a shitpost fic that implies a chuuba is the messiah because of X reasons.

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>>46821942
>Pekora wakes up with an egg in her bed
>her friends convince her she laid it in her sleep
>in reality they just put it there as a prank

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>>46822467
What will come out when it hatches?

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>>46822711
a rabbit homunculus

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>>46822711
A baby giant spider

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>>46822807
A giant enemy spider?

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>>46822881
With a weak point that can be hit for massive damage

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>>46822904
So U-8?

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>>46822785
Does it take traits from all of gen 3 or just Pekora and a single member?

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>>46822985

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>>46822904
But is it based on Japanese history?

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>>46822711
A monkey.

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>>46822711
It's unfertilized.

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>>46823062

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>>46823119
A bushbaby, actually.

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>>46821878
I mean, it wouldn't be tagged "light NSFW" if you fucked her wunny

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>>46821878
You read a fic named AFTER math and you still expected one and one to go together?

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>>46823186
Like George Bush?

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>>46817603
>>46820822
HoloIDs are pretty dommish.
Ollie, Reine, Moona, Risu
Not a lot of the ENs fit though, you're right. And even the JPs are disproportionate. Suisei, Coco, Botan, La+. I'm almost wanna say Lui but she's too nice.
NijiEN has a bunch though. Elira, Enna, Nina, Kotoka, Meloco, Maria, Scarle, Zaion,

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>>46825415
>Botan
Why does everyone always say this?

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>>46825823
people dont watch streams. I think that last botan fic is one of the few that plays with her M nature

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>>46825823
Playing devil's advocate it could be the same line of reasoning as Mel being able to play as a dom despite her situation.

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>>46825959
Name of fic?

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>>46826385
i was gonna be an ass but i didnt notice there was another botan fic, the one im talking is power botan.
Is amateurish but i liked it

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>>46826109
Is Mel more of a power bottom? Straight submissive? Or likes to play on equal footing? I gotta know for research reasons.

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>>46822711
A rabbit, and Pekora starts believing it's her child somehow. At first she hates it, but soon she tries to be more motherly toward it, taking it out for walks, feeding it, playing with it, telling it stories, etc. It gets to a point where she even considers graduating "so I can be a better mother for my child, peko."
Meanwhile, her genmates are racking their brains thinking of how to break the news to her that the egg was supposed to be a prank.

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>>46826952
What kind of rabbit hatches from an egg?

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>>46827334
The easter bunny lays eggs

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>>46827334
That's up to the author, anon
The girls who pranked Pekora wouldn't have expected it either
Also what he >>46827484 said

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>>46827484
>>46827513
This is making me think that this is all building up to a twist ending of Pekora had a one night stand with the easter bunny which is why she's raising the little rabbit.

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im ashamed that none of you thought about this

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>>46827908
"Little did Pekora's genmates know..."

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>>46828021
I don't know anime, sorry

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>>46826642
She strikes me as someone who can play both sides.

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>>46827908
The little rabbit is not hers, but she definitely had an ONS with the dude

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>>46828292
You're missing out on one of the greatest doujin ever made.

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>>46828448
Noted. I want to breed this hagpire like you wouldn't believe.

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>>46828097
I don't get it.

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>>46829777
>"Ahoy, Pekora... we have to tell ya that this here rabbit isn't yours. It came from an egg from Noel's fridge."
>"Huhhh? B-B-But! But!"
>"Pekora, we know it's hard to take in," Flare said. "But you have to believe us."
>"B-B-But, what about that night I spent with the Easter Bunny, peko?!"
>"Wait... what."
>Little did Pekora's genmates know... their friend, being the ever-rambunctious rabbit that she was, observed a peculiar ritual every Easter. A ritual that coincided with the beginning of her estrus cycle.
Something like that

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>>46827334
Eggs hatch inside mammals

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>>46831883
How did they get an Easter egg up pekora's snatch while she was sleeping?

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>>46832572
She's a really heavy sleeper

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>>46825823
>>46825959
Worst part is all it takes is to have watched like two minutes from any of her streams and you'll know she's no dom

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>>46828021
I don't read comics for children, sorry

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>>46835580
This is what happens if Okayu gets off of her mesu addiction.

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>>46836047
Okayu's growth into a total sex icon has been great to watch

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>>46838017
I preferred when she used her natural voice.

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>>46785231
ojou cute

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>>46820109
I disagree with the other guy. Cut it, or make it into something else. Oftentimes a slight change can prompt inspiration for a scene, where before there was none. For instance, change
>towa getting mad at you for stealing her chocolate
to
>you getting mad at towa for stealing your chocolate
Two different dynamics, but sometimes one works a lot better than the other