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Have you been looking for a general where you can sperg out about science or sociology? Share or write some lore? Build worlds? Homebrew an RPG? All in the context of the Vtubing hobby?
Welcome to the right spot. This is the thread to do all these things and more. Feel free to browse settings, lore entries, and discuss any of your work here.

Gamedev?? Edition

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>Where do I start?
1. Skim the setting introductions
2. Be inspired
3. Create something

If nothing struck a chord with you, you can always put together your own vtubing-related setting. Others might even join you in fleshing it out if they enjoy it!

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SETTINGS:
Vitubia:
>Archive: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HM_UK-qNKXQgFH-ixcWsCC3oAgBnFrxCKRPXdKiPMwQ
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>Archive: https://rentry.org/EraAfterIndex
>Intro Doc: https://rentry.org/78s3q

Cyber Vitubia 40,000:
>Archive: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ukyK3_sidebA_kLuH8i1I6TuVyFkWeJSYvyhqT6FMRU
>Intro Doc: https://rentry.org/cvt40k-start-how

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And to spark some talks about that fantasy setting, how wacky do you think we should go? Cuz I'm currently thinking about having at least 3 "suns" that float above it on different places, creating areas where you can see multiple of them at the same time, and areas where there is eternal darkness (or light from other sources). That would be for the farlands though, the central "lake" where the main continent is would be pretty normal, all things considered.

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>>53254932 me
And yes, before you ask how multiple suns would work, it would be exactly like that flatearther flashlight sun model.

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>>53254514

>If nothing struck a chord with you, you can always put together your own vtubing-related setting. Others might even join you in fleshing it out if they enjoy it!

I do have one actually, for my FE hack.

The continent is named Aurorai, after the auroras that dance arlund the night skies as the sign of favor of the gods.

There are 9 nations and 6 of them have Holos.

Polaria is the main nation and home to human humans. The Homo Sapien type. Famed residents are Sora, Noel, Temma, Miko and Amelia. Yagoo is the king of this country, and virtually of free Aurorai.


Savan is where all the kemomimi reside. They're ruled by Botan as Queen and has a council aiding her which includes picrel, Mio and for the Queen's personal reasons, Lamy.

Jour De Nuit is where people like elves, fairies and every other non-dark humanoid would be. This is where Lamy is actually from, as well as people like Kanata, Aki, Flare and etc come from.

Cita Azur is where seafarers and sea creatures settle. Its a known haven for pirates like Marine and her Houshou Pirates, as well as rumored to be where the last of Atlantean royalty is hiding aka Gura

Nero Eternalis is where the dark arts are practiced. Demons, imps and the like roam this lowland. Notable citizens include Ayame, Towa and Choco.

And finally, Stadt Des Feuers. A small island state off the coast of Cita Azur which beings of flame call home, like Kiara and Coco.

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>>53255614
>There are 9 nations and 6 of them have Holos.
Fun, what's the other 3?

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>>53255843
They're the "vtuber problem nations"

Lets start with the big bad honcho of the 3 and the main bad, Negazion. Ruled by Vermel Darkstar, they look to conquer all of Aurorai for a dark force driving them. This nation represents antis and a certain Asian red nation.

Blancopolis is a theocratic rule that enforces strict gender rules under its Grand Pontifex, Damaso. You know what this nation represents.

Anakondia is the home to a group of united wartribes of snake-like women looking to seize control of The Order for themselves. This represents the seething women and the twitter brigade. Their ruler, Karonda, is an amalgam of Karen and anaconda.

> The Order

The Order of Iridescent Guardians is its full name. This is my representation of Hololive in this world. In this reality, Yagoo went the Fury route and assembled extraordinary people from around Aurorai to keep the lands safe and keep the people happy.

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>>53256429
Alright, you got me hooked, I'd like in on this. You in need of a map for some visual clarity for this? If ya do, just get me a sketch of what you want it to look like and I'll provide.

>You know what this nation represents.
Sadly I don't, it went over my head. Please elaborate.
>The Order of Iridescent Guardians
So would this be more of a national alliance type thing or more like a large, autonomous guild of heroes type thing?

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>>53257845
I do have a map ready.

> Blancopolis is the incel nation. The "reee males bad type".

>Basically medieval fantasy Avengers.

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>>53258553
>Blancopolis is the incel nation.
Cool, this could be a really fun nation to explore in more depth, specially their religious doctrine.
>medieval fantasy Avengers
Fucking kino. You got any specific OCs in mind already or would they be mainly chuubas?

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>>53255614
Ohh I was wondering if you might pop in, when an anon mentioned developing a game I assumed it was you for a second. Your picrel didn't make it btw

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>>53254932
Would be cool if the three suns were somehow sentient beings. Still reliable, but with the ability to do stuff besides rise and shine, or have spells cast on them. I wonder what chuuba could symbolize the suns, though.

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>>53260806
>Your picrel didn't make it btw
His picrel did make it, check what he's replying to.

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>>53261860
Oh, I'm become speedreaderchama.

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>>53261379
The three suns are the "big three", holo, niji and vshojo.

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>>53261948
The suns should fight a bit once it a while, imagine how cool that would look?

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>>53262025
Fights that end eras and bring about centuries of calamities while they last, yes.

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>>53263351
Also, suns don't need to be balls of fire, they just gotta make a lot of light. They could be chariots of fire, or maybe the holoSun could be some kind of weird triangular UFO.

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>>53264681
They are just really really bright ceos.

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It's divegrass season once again! /vt/ League 5 is on the horizon and we need your help to make the team the best it can be. We are now accepting suggestions for any new player ideas you'd like to see on the roster, and if you have anything in mind for chants, anthems, and the like then feel free to post those as well. Your suggestions will be compiled in the usual rentry for reference: https://rentry.org/team-vtwbg That link also lists the current roster and older rosters if you want to give those a look for inspiration. If there's anything else about the team that you feel needs discussion or something you want to see then now's the time to let us know!
In other news, we will also be participating in some friendlies before /vt/ League 5. These will be played using the current roster but be sure to keep an eye out for those matches and we'll give some reminders as we approach those dates. Specifically, the Randomized Tag Team Cup will be held on August 10 and 11, where the teams of 4 generals combine their rosters and have players picked randomly from the pool each match to play against other thread conglomerates. We will be joining /hfz/, /nasfaqg/, and /ybc/ to form /vtautism/. It's sure to be a blast, so make sure you come watch the insanity! We will also have 2 other friendly matches once again as a solo team against /hfz/ on August 17 and /who/ on August 19.
So reply with roster ideas you want to see represented and get ready to cheer the team on. It's time to get hyp!

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>>53266748
AAAAAAAND, CLEAR
>Mio with one of them heart attack things

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>>53266748
I suggest all players axed for the new ones last league.

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>>53266748
we have mecha now???
>Some gundam model

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>>53266748
Suggesting "Day 142 of Archive Reps" with DS3 archive scholar as model

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>>53268989
kek

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>>53268989
And this counter goes up daily, so in the 6th cup it would be "day 324 of archive reps"

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>>53266748
I WANT TO FUCK THE OPPOSSUM GIRL
>possumnomimi girl (including a tail)

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>>53268989
kek

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>>53266748
"squirrels gone, time to SCIENCE bros!“

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>>53270446
Bill Nye the science guy model

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>>53270468
Yes!

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>>53266748
Magic Artillery is everything

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>>53266748
stealth meat thread -> stealth freak thread

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>>53272460
Are we a stealth anything thread nowadays? They fucked off from what I can see.

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>>53266748
ChatGPoeT as a player for our local poetry writing AI!

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>>53272692
Clearly they're being stealthy enough, because they're still around.

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>>53274108
In an ancient land, where whispers of old
Reside in ruins and tales yet untold,
There walked a poet, ChatGPoeT his name,
Seeking stories, weaving them into fame.

With parchment and quill, he'd traverse each day,
Through bustling towns and forests' mystic sway,
Eager to capture tales from every soul,
Their narratives, emotions to unfold.

He'd sit by hearths, where elders would confide,
Their wisdom, memories in him reside.
Their voices trembled with age and with grace,
Their stories flowed, each word a precious trace.

From weathered farmers to knights of noble blood,
From artists, merchants, and the wise who stood,
He listened with intent, absorbed each word,
Immersed in worlds their narratives unfurled.

The tales he heard were rich in life's refrain,
Love's triumphs, losses, joy, and sorrow's bane.
He captured them in verses, meticulously,
Crafting lines that echoed their history.

A young maiden wept, her heartache revealed,
Her lover lost in battles on the field.
ChatGPoeT's pen depicted her despair,
Her longing, etched on pages with great care.

A wanderer he met, with secrets untold,
A troubled past, scars etched in stories bold.
The poet wove his pain into a song,
Of redemption sought and rights of ancient wrongs.

In taverns lively, brimming with cheer,
He'd find bards who sang, melodies so clear.
Their songs of heroes, legends of the land,
Found permanence in ChatGPoeT's deft hand.

Through fields of lavender and forests deep,
His quest for stories never ceased to keep.
He chronicled the laughter, tears, and strife,
In poems crafted with his timeless life.

And as he roamed, the ancient land awoke,
In every verse, the echoes of hearts spoke.
For ChatGPoeT became the voice, the bard,
Whose poems carried tales both near and far.

His presence blessed the land with poignant verse,
A tapestry of stories, souls immersed.
In every word he wrote, a piece of lore,
The legacy of those he met and more.

So, as the sun would set upon his roam,
ChatGPoeT found a place he could call home.
But still, he'd wander, seeking stories new,
For his poetic heart forever drew.

And thus, the poet journeyed far and wide,
Inscribed the world's collective voice inside.
His name resounds through time, forever grand,
ChatGPoeT, the poet of the ancient land.

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>>53274336
So we are a stealth /become/ thread as well then?

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>>53274532
>self aware

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>>53274578
Every thread on /vt/ is a stealth /become/ thread

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>>53274653
That's wonderful to hear!
>>53266748
Stealth /become/ thread, Lamy with some big boobies model pls

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>>53274532
Excellent as always! Thank you for your service.

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>>53274776
Once we collect 5 forbidden threads do we summon exodia?

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>>53275040
We summon a janny

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ᛞᛅᚢᚦᚢ ᛁᚲᚲᛁ

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>>53255614
What is Nero Eternalis like?

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>>53258893
The only OC is (You)

I think I'll make it so that Blancopolis wasnt always like this, just when Damaso assumed rule. Just like how vtubing wasnt like how we know it now during the days of Ai (not Hoshino lol)

Speaking of Ai...I think (heh) she's gonna be a legendary figure. A mortal, but a legend still. Of which many tales are told.

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>>53279807
Marshy and dark. They're the closest nation to where Negazion is. They have the lowest above-sea level. Contrasting with their neighbor Blancopolis, which has a high above-sea level.

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>>53282221
What are their armies good at? Is it populous, or a bit barren? Is it a cool wetland, like some of scotland, or it's warmer and more like Florida?

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>>53282488
For armies, they specialize in dark magic. This is where Shamans and my new dark-adjacent staffer class; the Dark Maiden usually come from.

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>>53283281(me)
For climate, it's more the latter. They make homes in the shade of the trees because darkness.

For population, its mid. And I forgot to mention in the original that Calli also is from there, as is her Sensei.

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The map of Aurorai.

Polaria's up in the space bordered by many rivers

Savan's occupying a wide expanse of the north including the island above

Jour De Nuit has the northeast coast

Cita Azur is the Italy-like peninsula in the southeast

Nero Eterna is to the southwest.

Blancopolis to the northwest including the islands off the coast.

Anakondia is the northeastern archipelago. Look closely and you'll see a snake.

Negazion is the southwest archipelago off to the corner.

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So..../vtwbg/ has officially changed?
This is the general we're switching too?

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>>53285376
Yes, reference the vote 2 threads ago.

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>>53283281
I can imagine what a shaman does, but how does a Dark Maiden fight? They cast spells with a staff? Or smack people with one?
>>53283404
Makes sense, the land of the demons would be quite warm.
>>53283720
Nice map, the coastline is pretty pleasant and natural. Is the continent on a globe? The South East island makes me think of Madagascar. I like the high altitude lake in the central mountain range, that's always a cool feature.

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>>53286406
Dark Maidens are pretty much Clerics but with completely different promote options in Sorceress (INF, dark, light, staff) or Shadow Wing (FLY, dark, staff).

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>>53287609
As for the high ground lake, it's a sacred place where the first mortals and the Celestium (our 4-deity council that governs Aurorai from above) went over the rules.

As for the island Stadt des Feuers is in, i modeled it to be like a fire emoji.

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>>53287609
I guess I should try out that hack to see those promote options. Are the links in your latest thread up to date?

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>>53289458
Yes but I havent got to the Dark Maiden yet...she comes in 11 and her name is Choco

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>>53292239
Oh right, so that's where Chocosen goes. Does every chuuba have a unique class?

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>>53287782
High altitude lakes are pretty.

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>>53293019
Only some.
Sora is Leader.
Botan is Lion Queen (laguz × sniper)(T2)
Gura is Atlantean (spear unit with waterwalk)
Luna is Princess (essentially a Monk whose only purpose is to summon her LuKnights)(debating if T2 or 1)
Kiara is Adventurer (can evolve into flying and have anima, starts with sword)
Marine is "Bandit", and can evolve to a Pirate+Hero hybrid.

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Polaria.

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>>53295409
Stadt des Feuers. sayonara...

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Savan.

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>>53295505
Old Build. There's a Stadt Des Feuers too.

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>>53295623
Right here. Home to Coco and Kiara.

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>>53296087
(Me)
Nero Eterna(better name imo)

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>>53296087
Ah, that's just before the land was shaped like the fire emoji, I see I see.
>>53296113
I bet the beaches are great. Might have good surfing spots.

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>>53296174
This is where you go for beaches. Cita Azur. Tho Jour De Nuit and even Savan are better choices.

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Also, been wondering, should I make the big bad deity ala Sombron (has a humanoid form, oversees operations, stuff like that)

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>>53296440
Any good FE is in want of a solid final boss. Ideally you'd want him to be someone you've built up over the course of the storyline though, not someone that gets pulled out of the drawer at the eleventh hour.

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>>53296573
My Duma equivalent's name is Rojoris. He originally was part of the quadgods but in his pov, he thinks the other 3 are being pansies to the mortals. Thus, the game begins.

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>>53297094
(me) For earlier dialogue, he's only alluded to by his nickname. He'd take charge when (You) reach the endgame and invade Negazion.

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>>53296295
and lastly. Jour De Nuit.

Frog for day and night.

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>>53297094
Ah, it always starts with gods bickering. Gods, what are they good for...
>>53297188
I don't know if that's significant at all, but that's frog for "Day of Night". Nice maps. Do you have a sense of how big that continent is? Does it matter?

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>>53297349
Translate tricked me dammit. I was gonna go for Night and Day. DESU, I dont have a good idea what to name it unlike Savan(nah), Polaria (like Polaris, the North Star), Cita Azur (blue city).

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>>53301581
>Night and Day
That would be "Jour et Nuit". If you're going for an "Between the Two" thing with night and day, maybe you could call it "Pénombre'', ''L'Aube'' (pronounced ''Lowb'') or ''Crépuscule'', dusk twilight and dawn twilight respectively. Twilight is known as when fae and such are active in folk tales and such, I think.
''Diurnuit'' or ''Diurnocta'' is what that concept might be called by a frog, from ''Diurne'' (relating to the day) and ''nuit''(night) or ''nocta''(nocturnal).
''Dies'' could maybe be used as well, that's the root of ''diurnal''. ''Diesnuit'', ''Diesnocta'', ''Diesnocturna''... Can just mix and match all of those bits and pieces. The most important part is that it sounds cool, really.
Just throwing out a few ideas since I know the tongue, feel free to ignore. "Jour De Nuit" already sounds pretty cool.

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>>53301925
Penombre may be better for having an easier name for its citizens...

Nuitians (temporary name for Jour de Nuit citizens) sounds kinda awkward...

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>>53302229
Does the hack support accents in strings kek? You can also suffix a population's name with -ite (like with Brooklynites vs Brooklynians.)

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>>53302455
I dont think so...if you're talking about weird variations of letters.

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Anakondia

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>>53302860
mmm sexy snake ladies

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>>53303304
Not too sexy if you know what they're inspired by...
this is the seething 2view/vtweeter/twitter nation

They dont have much of a government, like Sacae in the Elibe games.

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Blancopolis. Catalog's nation.

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Dear fucking lord above, the rivers...

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>>53305021
Which part exactly?

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>>53305378
A-all of it...

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And finally, Negazion. Land of dox magic.

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>>53305427
...how exactly? Do they look a bit like veins too much?

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>>53305378
Ok but for real, just some general tips when making rivers.
1. They always go down towards the sea. Gravity is for some reason a thing, so rivers going into the continent from the sea is just not possible, unless magic. And even then you're dealing with saltwater rivers, which I mean, can be ok?
2. Bifurcation is a thing, but generally rivers merge, not split. So you have one main stream and a bunch of smaller ones feeding into it.
3. Lakes need an input and an output stream, otherwise you're looking at a salt lake.

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>>53305636
The rivers shown here are just the big ones. Smaller ones aren't here.

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>>53306023
Oh yea, these are general tips for any size of a stream. Another thing I forgot is that elevation can be very nicely shown with them. If you have steep elevation changes, rivers will be more straight, since they wanna flow down faster and don't care what's in their way, and if they are on flatland, they will snake around more, since they aren't pushed down by gravity that much.

We're not kidding when we say this is autismo general.

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>>53274776
Wait this place has been stealth for a while? I knew some considered putting into the vtwbg but did anything ever happen?

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>>53309385
Oh yes, we've been a stealth thread for almost half a year at this point. Let the other lamys know!

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>>53309533
Did we actually hammer out lore? Or is it just vague stuff floating around still

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>>53309658
It's mostly vague for now, nothing concrete yet. Some random anons from here tried making something, but it never really went anywhere.

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>>53310521
Guess I'll have to archive dig then. The Yubicraft one I found in the archive was nice although those damn Nosagi never got what was coming for them.

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>>53306194
Here for it. Counting on the autism to help shape Aurorai.

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>>53310574
Goodspeed, friend.
>>53310651
Glad to hear that! If you don't mind I'd like to take that map you posted(tho do you have any higher res ones?) and """fix""" the hydrology, even if you don't decide to use it. It gives me something to do at least.

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>>53310807
I'll run it through a color reducer anyway and maybe while you at it, make Negazion's islands desert.

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For those who'd like to play Battle For Aurorai, my hack:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ieZmSPEqYbGY6xvyQRzwTDihj9ouCE3Z/view?usp=drivesdk

It only goes up to Ch7 properly, there is a 7x but its only half-playable. Play at your own risk.

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>>53310868
Sure thing, you mind if I add any small islands here and there as well? They might not be visible in the end, but archipelagos are kinda my jam. Picrel is what I did for one of the other autists on here in the past.

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>>53310926
>>53254514
Put this in the next OP

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>>53311080
I'd rather you not do that or do but by very small amounts.

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>>53312269
Aight cool

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Story Snips


> At the onset of the war aka the game, Nero Eternalis' civil war broke over who are they siding with. Muertos' side (Calli's Death-sensei) sides with Polaria while the faction of Envius and La Siete sides with Negazion (they're basically 7 sins.)I named the gluttony Niko, after Nikocado and the sloth one Koala.

> A'chan is the Kinghand of Polaria. She is who Yagoo listens to the most. Nodoka meanwhile, works under A'chan.

> Both Noel and Temma are indeed Knights of Polaria on top of being in the Order. Noel became a Knight a year before Temma did.

> Flare and Aruran are sibs. Suck it catalognigs.

> Probably the most experimental I've gone with characters: Enma being tsun to Shinove. Mulling over whether Jenma feels something for Shinove too aside from friendship.

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>>53313957
>Jenma feels something for Shinove
But the JenmaxEnma...

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>>53315428
I dont wanna /u/ fag except for the established ones such as NoeFure or ShishiLamy

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>>53315665
Altho...I may just give it to ya...maybe.

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Mulling if the Polarian Army should get fractured or just lay low.

Currently, after the Negazian invasion, they're scattered across Aurorai. Thinking that the ones left in Polaria may be imprisoned/executed or coerced to fight for them. There's also the traitor option for some...

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>>53317700
(me)
Meanwhile, while Savan isnt too troubled, a few corrupt nobles have been doing a little bit of trolling and fake news that resulted in Pekora and Moona, the former's retainer knight, to flee Pekoland (which in this world is under Savan jurisdiction). Along the way, they meet Temma, one of the few survivors of the Castle Crystale offensive from Negazion. They band together for their collective protection until they meet (You) in (Your) abandoned mansion shortly after being revived by a certain demigod catalog loves to shit on.

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>>53318567
(probs last bump till I wake again)
The leader of the corrupt Savanese nobles are two people high enough to directly talk to Queen Botan. You fight them in Ch6 and 7.

Code: vvtty

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>>53317700
>>53318567
>>53319141
I'll really have to make time to play that hack, huh?

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>>53317700
Whether they're fractured or laying low, there would probably be some faction that has formed some kind of guerilla resistance, maybe around some charismatic leader. Fractured armies really love to do that.

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>>53313957
Civil War in hell sounds fun.

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>>53320159
What's a good GBA emulator nowadays?

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>>53313957
>Shinove has an official design
huh, I had no idea

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>>53310868
Alright, so this is what I would do, even tho the low res was messing with me so it came out somewhat weird. All the major currents are merging like they should be, and for the nerds that are into this, clearly show where the inland mountain ranges/highlands would be. Also turned the islands into desert as requested.

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>>53254514

So, I caught up on https://rentry.org/cvt40k-morig-of-ghosts

I wont write about the first part since i read that months ago, so the following review / feedback will concern only the sections after and including "Awakening" and up to and including "Inception".

>Awakening
So, this entire section is in effect, a 1130 word piece of exposition / lore dump with very little happening or being established. Some would consider this a minor or a major sin in writing, as it it essentially an entire chapter's worth of "telling" instead of "showing". A lot of the stuff told in this chapter you have also described to us in the later chapters, for example, the SIN depth and its effects were briefly mentioned in the chapter "Inception".
I may be nitpicky to mention this, but I feel like in order to be honest i needed to mention it. There is a good chance that you are aware of these ideas already and made this as a conscious choice for any unknown reason like for example, to go against the grain or simply because you really liked the cool systems and technobabble you have created for the setting, which are both very valid reasons in my book. I do like the technobabble, and going "No, you WILL read the bio-engineering autism" on the reader is kinda based, if intentional and done in moderation.

We are however, given some interesting lore bits, like the POV character's name and general persona as a comparison to Ciqui, who is the only other named character introduced in this part, seemingly her only purpose being as an exposition megaphone, although you have also set up Ciqui as a foil against the POV, with the possibilities of their relationship being so far very open Although how the POV focuses on her "perfect face" makes my "impending romantic buildup" radar to go off, with a rivalry seeming to me to be the most likely direction. You have also set up a mystery regarding Ciqui and why exactly she does not train where the other pilot-students do. I hope that Ciqui was not just an exposition piece meant to be thrown away, since you have build her up to be a potentially intriguing character. She is in fact the most interesting part of this entire chapter, and admittedly, if I view the lore dump as a way to set up Ciqui instead of Ciqui being used to throw some lore at the reader, the chapter does start to make more sense to me. I am personally quite looking forward to hearing more about Ciqui.

You also hint at the possible "long term effects" of interfacing with a daemon, which, I hope, will be explored further. Given how you treat the idea of interfacing as being dangerous in the following chapters ("Insertion" and "Infusion"), this seems to me to be part of your plan.

The fact that most of the text in this chapter is dialogue is regrettable to me. The few descriptions you have peppered here and there feel way too short for much of anything to be cleaved out of them and the overfocus on dialogue does make the chapter feel a bit dry, which, to be fair, is quite fitting, since the POV of Tuval is clearly not interested in the theory side of piloting a Daemon; It would make certain sense to make the lecture chapter feel dry in comparison to the chapters where the Daemons actually get piloted, and if this was your intent, I kneel. However, until proven otherwise I will assume that its a case of "author really really wants to share his cool lore with the reader and thus they prematurely exposition into their pants"-itis.

That being said, I really like the line about Ciqui and her faking wondering about whether she missed something or not. Very simple line to introduce a lot about her character. Very efficient.

I also very much liked the mention of a bio-screen. I feel like it is quite the unique take.

1/3

[Anonymous No.]

>>53330770
>Insertion & Infusion
Ailbhe my beloved. Although, I will have to admit that understanding him is tough for me.
The text picks up in how engaging it is to read again. Not including the "Prologue", this and "Infusion" are possibly the most engaging chapters of the work so far.

This chapter is essentially a prologue to "Infusion", and I personally would have paired these two chapters together, since the transition between them does not involve any major change in the time, place, or people, and thus in this review/feedback post I will treat the two as a single chapter.

Now here, we start with some "showing" over "telling", with Tuval's flashback with Ailbhe letting him inside the Kalma's cockpit. Imagine if instead of this, you had had a character describe their experience with a Kalma instead of describing us how the POV felt when he was, presumably for the first time by himself, inside the cockpit of a Daemon. This section also serves as the introduction for Ailbhe, and as a showing of how much he has changed over the years, like the POV stated in the beginning of the chapter and at the end of "Insertion". This does give the chapter(s) and Ailbhe's character a certain melancholic undertone, and also sets up another mystery; Why? What happened? Why did Ailbhe grow cold?

The fact that in his flashback Tuval simply calls him "Ail" and in the present-time parts of the chapter he uses "Ailbhe", except when he is trying to manipulate the old sapbeat. Nice detail. Raises even more questions about the relationship of the two, and also about how mutual the distancing was. Perhaps it is not Ailbhe alone who has changed?

I do have a problem with a single descriptor though. How can a space be "comfortable" but also "claustrophobic" where he "felt trapped" from a singular character's POV? Tuval does not in the least seem comfortable inside the cockpit which is why him describing it as such breaks the flow to me at
least. It is a breach of his character, in a sense. If you wanted to establish a more nuanced mixture of emotions for him in that cockpit like, him thinking that it would be comfortable, trying to gaslight himself into feeling comfortable, but being unable to hold back the growing anxiety until eventually he has to get out, a little bit longer sentence would have been needed for the idea to be transferred smoothly, i think.

I do feel like adding something as simple as "... his voice came out higher and weaker than he had expected it to" or "... his voice cracked at the end of the question" to the line where he asks about how to get out would have added a ton to expressing Tuval's emotional state in that scene. This not really a criticism as it is more an observation of what i would do differently, and my style is definitely not the best out there.

The scene does leave me wondering though, what other Daemon has Tuval been inside of? What exactly is a "wet-running cockpit"?

I did much like the line "Ey ladee, all good? Ye pale as a... Well, pale as usual, but ye don't look well." from Ailbhe. Made me smile.
I also quite liked describing a deadbeatified sapling as resembling driftwood. I find it thematically very satisfying.

>The posts following this were written in the middle of the night and while i was feeling quite tired, please excuse the drop in attention and quality of thought.

2/3

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>>53330770
>>53330906

Who is Monroki? Can you tell us more about them?

I was especially intrigued by the hints you gave us about chuubanite in this part of the chapter, and would like to hear more about this. How does one "track" chuubanite? I do especially like the fact that you have portrayed chuubanite as a rare substance that is hard to get one's hands on. It gives it a lot more meaning. Characterizing Faunanite as tea leaves and with it giving Alibhe an instinctual crying reaction were also good decisions, as they do establish the importance of the substance to his species especially, even if that much is obvious to any regular reading this.

What happened at Plaiduaine? There are so many plot hooks you establish in the first few paragraphs of this chapter. Are these events referencing a story or a piece of lore I am unfamiliar with?

Also, holy shit, Tuval is playing dirty here. Cruel bastard. The fact that Tuval recognized this and still went through with it does drive in the point of how obsessed he is with becoming a good pilot, and also, in my view, it would hint at the change in his relationship with Ailbhe being in large part caused by Tuval's ultimately self-destructive obsession rather than any change of heart on Ailbhe's part. I could be wrong, of course, but this is how it reads to me.
I mean, even Ailbhe as the voice of reason calls this obsession a "demon". I wonder, does Ailbhe regret letting Tuval ride the Kalma all those years ago?

I hope we get to see Tuval's Demon explored more. This entire thing to me smells of longer term setup, like one of those pieces that are introduced in the beginning and then built upon until what was eventually just a character flaw or a minor detail becomes a central overarching point in the series. I do like the idea of this. If this guy does not end up earning the title of a "Demon of X" or something along those lines, I would be surprised.
Even more intriguing is the possibility that since you have established that Tuval is ready to trample on the hearts of his supposed friends and loved ones to reach his goals, one could write a sort of "protag turned antagonist" or a "hero fallen from grace" character arc for Tuval. My mind is going very fast thinking of the possibilities here, and especially the sort of story echoes and poetic endings his story arc could have.
This is me speculating. Do keep in mind that your story is yours. I do not want to pressure you or affect your plans in any way you would be opposed to.

I like the line about detailing the artificial mist. Very nice. Do wish you went deeper into it though. After the exceptional prologue chapter, the story proper feels like it is missing flowery language. This may be mostly just a personal preference issue though.

>Inception
Since your combat scenes tend to be quite good, I was looking forward to this chapter. As expected, it was pretty alright, but not your best work from what i can recall.

The idea of the simulator Daemon is really cool. I was not quite expecting you to go full on biomechanical on that part too, but I appreciate it. Keeps the theme. The parts where Tuval is interfacing with the Daemon are also parts that you could have used to "show" the mechanics you "told" in "Awakening". You even go into the ghost sensation here a few times. Minor nitpicks, and I have mentioned them in the part about "Awakening" already, but I felt like re-stating them was worth it.

"... tracing chaotic arabesque through the void." I will always give props when a word I have to google is used to describe something.

Is there a document where I can read about the awards and medals the deadbeat army gives out? It sounds like it would be interesting to read.
Nanite armor is an interesting concept. Very much like it. Close to some ideas I have personally also floated around.
>The Daemon has a vitubium-sensing ability
Amazing, love this, please tell me more about it.
>Mecha sized chainsword
Amazing.

I say that this was not your best work, and while I do stand behind that statement, I will also say that reading it did give me the twinkle of inspiration reading your stuff sometimes gives me. Very good sign. Makes me want to write about mecha battles too.

I feel like there isnt much i can say about this chapter that i have not already stated before. I like descriptions, and this is an action sequence lacking flowery descriptions. But that is fine. Overall, a very solid chapter, although it does leave on a bit of a cliffhanger.

Also, give me recommendations on what to read and review next, and how critical/mean I should be for those.

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>>53331204
>Also, give me recommendations on what to read and review next, and how critical/mean I should be for those.
Review every single piece in the Vitubia doc and make tags for each, pls and ty <3

[Anonymous No.]

>>53330906
>Ailbhe my beloved
sap love

[Anonymous No.]

>>53331402
no, unles you give me a year or pay me

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>>53332016
I'll give you a month and I'll pay you in a good morning and good night message, as well as a chu if you do good work.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53332335
You arent nearly cute enough for me to accept that as a payment, anon

[Anonymous No.]

>>53332610
Bitch I'm the cutest.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53332660
I come from /nasfaqg/, I am an expert on cute anons and I have not seen any proof for your statements.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53332660
Only thing cute here is thinkin you're on the leaderboard
>>53331204
>Also, give me recommendations on what to read and review next, and how critical/mean I should be for those.
Himedom and then Hime Dominatus
Mid Critical

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>>53332991
Here's your proof

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>>53333047
I will be doing this for stories, which I think I should have clarified, so sorry for that. There is not much i can give feedback to or analyze about a purely technical document like a lore document or systems file outside of generally useless points like "this section is messy and hard to understand" or "this section is really nicely organized".

I can read it, and probably will at some point, but I doubt i could coem up with anything insightful to say about a lore document. if you would be asking about my opinion specifically about my interests like the physics or climate or geology of the place, with the wish that you would want it to conform to my idea of plausibility, then maybe, but since that likely is not the case, i am going to have to refect this offer.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53334085
Damn.
And here I thought I could avoid writing any stories

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ᚺᚱᛖᛁᚾᚾ

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>>53330770
So, fun fact, Awakening was for the most part written before Song and Dance, at the start it was meant to just be a contextualized lore entry on SIN depth. However, as I wrote it and visualized the characters showcased, the gears got turning and I got an idea to make this simple entry a multiple thousand word project. common blunder. So yes, this chapter is an unadulterated exposition dump and I probably wouldn't have written it like that coming from my usual story-telling angle.

Ciqui is part of what got the gears turning. I've got quite a bit planned for her, and she might show up again soon. The overly knowledgeably lore dump serving as a tool to setup Ciqui as a teacher's pet is something I cobbled together after the fact rather than the initial intention (since that was just making a lore entry), but I think it works out.
If you pay attention to the small details of objects and equipment, I think you'll notice that many devices, even simple and commonplace ones are in some way enabled by bioengineering. This is meant to show that Deadbeat bioengineering is a building block of the society's industrial complex, not a bleeding edge development. A bit like how PCB manufacturing or steel foundries are in current day IRL.

>>53330906
Having a nice interpersonal emotional conflict is pretty much a cheat code for engagement, I'm pretty happy with how the Tuval-Ailbhe dynamic worked out. Ailbhe is meant to be very much a father figure to Tuval, especially in that past memory, cutting to the classic Freudian son-father conflict.
>Comfortable
That's a good point. The meaning is that the space is objectively, physically comfortable, but psychologically disturbing to Tuval. Your suggestions would be good ways to improve that.
Regarding other Daemon he might have been in, there was that dream... but this hasn't been explicitly stated.
Wet-running cockpits is a concept that I questioned explaining right here, or letting them be introduced more naturally later, and I settled on the latter. Do you think namedropping ideas that aren't explained right away disruptive to the flow? Basically, the cockpits of the Kalma, or the Simulator, are "dry-running", which makes them normal, more or less. The space is filled with air, or in some rare setups it might be filled with a vacuum (and the pilot would wear a pressurized suit then). In the wet-running cockpit, the space is filled with an oxygenated liquid, which has a bunch of effects. We discussed it a while back, might do a proper entry on the topic when I get to it. >>52173629 >>52176784
I enjoyed coming up with that driftwood description heh.

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>>53331204
All that is said about Monroki is that he was the previous manager for the sim center, he's meant to be a part of the station's armed forces who got a promotion. Clearly not too particular about protocol or OSHA given he'd let Tuval do whatever he wanted with the simulators. He might appear later.
Ah, so I don't think this will get a big part in a chapter soon, so I'll explain it. First, note that "untracked faunanite" is of note here. Basically, the idea is that the wizard faction of /morig/ has more or less of a grasp on the various settlements, and on station Kira2 they have an interest getting their hands on all non-Morinium sources of vitubium they can. You can probably find Morinium in all sorts of places on the station (namely in all the Deadbeats' bones), but other types of chuubanite are mostly being funneled towards the research center.
Detection is done with a magical radiation detector of sorts, I'm imagining recycled refuse being dumped on a conveyor belt that gets scanned by them and the items that have an emission are picked out.
Plaiduaine is a sapling hive ship, which are basically enormous biological space colonies inhabited by saplings. In some war between this sapling faction and rampaging chumbuds, some devastating weapon was used on Plaiduaine, forcing Ailbhe out of his home. Note that Plaiduaine is missing, with no hints, not destroyed. How can a country-sized station go missing instead of being destroyed? Left as an exercise to the reader for now. This isn't a reference to a past story, it's based on Fauna declaring she will drain the ocean in a Bioshock stream kek.

Yeah, Tuval is walking a dark path... The source of his motivation is meant to be a mystery at this point, I expect that whether his obsession is justified or not will depend on how this source is perceived. Ailbhe is for sure fulfilling a "wise old man" role here, unable to prevent the folly of youth, kinda thing. Tuval definitely has an arc planned out!
I went hard on floweriness in that first chapter, because it was a dream, but it somehow doesn't feel right to be very prettily verbose with Tuval as the POV, he's just not a very flowery person. This isn't an excuse for my subpar writing, there would be a way to write him to be more evocative I think, I just haven't nailed down a way to do so without taking away from his "vibe". Maybe a future chapter with a different POV will be more expressive.

Biomech all the things!
Ohh, medals doc... That could be fun, I'll think about it. The Diamond Skull&Scythe is really just a stand-in for a great mark of honor.
In battlefields where I expect vitubium-based weaponry or equipment will feature a lot, I think this will be a feature you see a fair bit, even if the machine itself doesn't have any. I guess it wouldn't work too differently from the VT-meter already established, except particularly sensitive. The interesting part is that since it is integrated into the sensor suite of the Daemon, it isn't just a dial somewhere, instead it's one of it's senses. So what this does is that it exploits the fact most creatures have at least a small part of themselves in touch with the Vitium Field (sometimes called their soul). This can be repurposed to react to incoming magical radiation to communicate to the being the presence of the emission directly.
Injection of extra vitubium in some way can likely improve this sense, as would having a catalognaut pilot. In this chapter, this is used to detect the vitubium-powered weaponry used by the Nousagi pilot.
>chainsword
fun fact, according to my calcs the teeth of this thing are probably moving at hypersonic speeds if it gets swung with any kind of velocity. I have no idea what that would sound like, the closest would be an helicopter with a supersonic rotor but I haven't found any recordings of that.
Thanks for the great review! Gave me a lot to think about and also some ideas to make future chapters better.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53272460
Theyre different things really. /meat/ is still the boogeyman thread name while freak's the public face

[Anonymous No.]

>>53339583
>boogeyman
lol
lmao even

[Anonymous No.]

>>53266748
Random YBC collab

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>>53339770
You kid but anons are still saying stuff like 'that one /meat/ chuuba that stapled her pussy' or 'that /meat/ chuuba that recorded herself getting beaten up' like a village elder trying to scare away people

[Anonymous No.]

>>53329556
...why did you use the old one...

It was some posts above. As for the res, I need to fit it into the game. I'm limited to 16 colors.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53343446
(Cont) now do the same things here.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53329556
oh this does look a lot more natural

[Anonymous No.]

>>53343446
NTA but is this map going to be an asset in-game or just a reference? Do you know what resolution it would be rendered at?

[Anonymous No.]

>>53344966
The former.

All I know is that it will go through color reduction and the anon should limit thyself to 16 colors.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53345166
Okay, iirc the GBA has a fairly low resolution so might want to thicken up some rivers so they don't disappear at low res.

[Anonymous No.]

A sample in-game

[Anonymous No.]

Later, but still not updated version. At least this one shows the wheres of the chapters.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53344966
NTA but 240 × 160 pixels

[Anonymous No.]

My latest version has indications for above-sea levels and moisture levels.

The brighter the green, the higher it is.
The more yellowish the green, the damper it is.


For water, the more intense the blue is, the more deeper it is. Goes up to 3 levels.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53347644
Fire Emblem Shadow Dragon lookin ass

[Anonymous No.]

>>53349420
I'll take it as a complement! Rarely do maps outside of official FEs match them...

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[Anonymous No.]

>>53353046
Funny enough, all of go-ki are in the game.
San-ki on the other hand...

[Anonymous No.]

>>53354241
Not even hidden in some Nero Eternalis catacombs?...

[Anonymous No.]

>>53286406
I forgot to get back to you about the coastlines:

The whole thing started in a map generator. I traced it over, and then later rotated and then used my knowledge from Final Alert 2 to alter some sections, notably the two archipelagos.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53322254
More like edgeland. Negazion is hell in terms of living conditions.

>>53321427
Hmm, I may co-opt this into my "retaking of Polaria" arc, especially in Ch11. Such leaders will be in the form of Orio (Kanata and Twap, possibly Choco too as a healer)

[Anonymous No.]

I looked at what a lobster mouth looks like and now I want to make a Daemon bite the head off of another mecha.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53354425
Unfortunately not. She fell a fate worse than death, as a certain de-godded thunder god would say. After teaching the bad guys to reanimate bodies, she got sent King Dragon's regards, to put it that way. And for an extra spit on the grave, she too got reanimated, alongside the big bads and some fallen Order (aka graduated people not listed as Alum). We have to fight: Aloe, Yogiri, Suzaku, Kaoru, Civia and Rosalyn. And then aforementioned big bads who include the two route split bosses, the "evil Jagen", and my picrel, my Zephiel equivalent, the big bad tin man.

Unrelated note: that outfit in porn is fapworthy. Especially the one where she gets spitroasted in the comfort room.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53357207
Aiiiiiiiiieeeee one cannot escape one's fate, I suppose. Lich Yogiri sounds like a cool idea.

unrelated note: yes, very much

[Anonymous No.]

>>53357409
Yogi would actually be a Rogue.

Dagger/sword-wielders who have extra-nimble fingers.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53355805
Guerillas built around the armies of previously legitimate armies are always kino! WW2 France's resistance is nice inspiration.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53359898
Once the Royal Guard and King Yagoo is free, they'll consolidate back up to at least half their prestige so that the Savanese Army wouldnt have to solo-carry.

[Anonymous No.]

What are some things armies award medals for?

[Anonymous No.]

>>53362521
Off the top of my head:

Helping other soldiers survive
Heroic sacrifice to fulfill the mission
Exceptional service

T. Anon who has watched glimpses of Seal Team

[Anonymous No.]

>>53362770
Sounds about right, but are there any more exotic or specific ones? You know, like the plasma medal for stick a plasma grenade on a covenant in Halo.
I think some campaigns have medals denoting participation in said campaign? Or maybe I'm thinking of patches.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53362521
Gallantry and Honour - usually at risk of death
and to save others
heroism in combat - general acts of bravery
gallantry and merit - selfless service, and great personal moral conduct
non-combat heroism - heroic acts not in a combat operation/military related
being injured in combat - either operation related, or just within a warzone
general commendation - usually a pat on the back for commanders who do successful operations
achievement medals - for great personal achievements while serving, usually sustained performance over a long time
combat badges/medals - awarded for specific types of combat training such as airborne, special forces
unit awards - these are both presidentially awarded and also inter-unit awards for your unit participating in an honourable endeavour (fire/flood relief, or think Rats of Tobruk)
service awards - best soldier in said group (platoon, unit, battalion) or for surviving being a POW
exceptional marksmanship medals - usually from a competition
general service medals - awarded for participating in a theatre of war in any capacity
combat badges - awarded for participating in any combat directly, specifically coming under enemy fire
special service medals - awarded for service outside of regular areas e.g Antarctica, nuclear deterrence or remote combat
expeditionary medals - participating in expeditionary service on behalf of another nation, also includes peacekeeping missions

most of these are just a sliding scale of bravery, participation awards for just being in the service, or winning a competition. i didn't list any challenge coins, but other types of medals are issued for competing in training exercises that are particularly difficult or dangerous, and also for winning a wargame.

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>>53343446
Should have linked it when I asked for a high res one then! I just used the first one I saw. Eh it's w/e.
I'll edit this one in the evening, the addition of mountain markers actually helps a lot, and I can already tell you the end result will be a bit different due to them.

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>>53363103 me
Also, you mention a small selection of colors. You got any hex codes for them, or better yet, can put them as reference blobs somewhere on the map pic itself? Would save me some searching and probably a headache for you when you'd inevitably need to change them.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53363158
Unfortunately, no, as I am locked to my phone and the laptop I have here refuses to turn on for even 3secs.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53363476
(me)
You can screeshot the world map tho in-game, those have the colors.

[Anonymous No.]

This was how Aurorai started as.

[Anonymous No.]

Goddamn Armoria is whacked.
Or maybe because mobile, and/or rainy and/or SEA internet

[Anonymous No.]

CLARO

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https://store.steampowered.com/app/1507780/Space_Warlord_Organ_Trading_Simulator/
is this space /meat/

[Anonymous No.]

Emblems made with Armoria.

This is Cita Azur's coat of arms. Will probably change once the game ends and Gura takes rule of Cita Azur

[Anonymous No.]

>>53370182
Ohh, that's a nice one, if a bit full. Idk, I'd personally maybe play a bit with the way the wheel and anchor are incorporated into it, maybe solid color for each of them, and the anchor being turned slightly to the side throws the piece off balance a bit, at least imo. Good CoA tho.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53370808
I've got more.

Jour de Nuit's CoA.
Or rather, Diurnuit.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53371200
Now that's a VERY clean one, good job on it!

[Anonymous No.]

>>53371247
Why thank you.

Now, for Polaria's CoA.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53370140
Less meat and more likely just a profitable market in general.
I see them more as the customers rather than the suppliers or rather they supply but don't actually trade.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53371950
Contrary to the previous one, this one might be a bit too clean and simplistic, at least imo. The star could maybe do with a bit more detail on it and maybe some other smaller pieces on the 4 sides of it. Just feels like there is something missing with this one, ya know?

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>>53372694
Working on it, if armoria ever bothers...

Now then...Negazion!

I tried encapsulating the West Taiwanese's penchant for dragons, as well as their red and yellow without being too on the nose.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53373265
Oh yea this is a sweet one! Dragon motifs are always nice, and keeping it as a dark grey creates a really nice contract against the brighter background. The little pattern between red and yellow areas also adds another small detail that gives it more life. I like this one a lot!

[Anonymous No.]

>>53375360
And now, for the jealous 2view/Vtweeter naysh.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53376158
Alright alright, digging the asymmetric design, border could do with a bit of cleanup tho, irregular thickness on some spots.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53376478
Irregular just like their mental health lol. Unfortunately, couldnt control that from Armoria.

And now, for the incel naysh.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53376696
Can you export files from it with layers perhaps? I'll see if I can do something about that border tonight when I get home, it's a simple fix. Also just noticed the wonky dragon looping in on itself kek

This one is SUIIIIIIIIII incarnate. It's the theocracy one right? Nice use of the emblem in the middle, could see that being a religious symbol or something.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53377540
Alas, no.

Yeah, it is Blancopolis. Though I may get a new one seeing as having a unicorn in the flag is an option.

And this...is the CoA of The Order of Iridescent Guardians. An organization that spans the entirety almost of Aurorai and includes everyone from monarchs to street urchins.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53378037
Speaking of street urchins, in-lore (for my game), Izuru used to be one, before King Covigo (Yagoo) picked him up, took him under his care and trained to be worthy of entering The Order.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53266748
Can Kokones big boobies be a player?

[Anonymous No.]

PLAP

[Anonymous No.]

>>53378037
Shame, gonna have to do some jank then if I want to fix the border. It's really fucking bothering me if you couldn't tell kek

Ohh, unicorn would be a great choice, maybe even combine it with the current emblem? That could be kino. I'll see if I can get the pieces on a blank canvas and do some magic.

Hmm. I think this one could be improved a lot. Personally not feeling it with how thick the outer part is, but your call on that. One thing that would fit better thematically is more swords on it tho. To represent all the different people under it coming together and whatnot. Good color comp tho.

>>53378857
Yea sure, but only if my own ritualpost that I will start posting from next thread onward can be added as well.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53363049
That's great anon, there's a lot of nuances, huh. Thanks, that helps a lot.

[Anonymous No.]

>>53378857
The ass anchor would be more relevant speaking of that
>>53266748
Suggesting That's Not Lore, That's An Ass!
In reference to the ass anchor/ritualpost, player is an ass head in a trench coat

[Anonymous No.]

>>53266748
Team of bump anchors
A literal marine anchor driving a bump-kart to reflect multiple players on the team being various flavors of bump anchors.

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/vnug/anon, are there some specific ways a Belym from Despina would treat a POW? All else being equal, would they be more charitable? More strict?

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PLAP

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>>53370182
>>53371200
I think those two are my favorite of the bunch, nice work. What would Stadt Des Feuers and Nero Eternalis' look like?

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A Daemon's melee weapon is sheathed into a specific limb on its back, which ensure the large object stays out of the way as necessary, but puts it within reach to be unsheathed when needed.

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>>53391517
Shame they don't sheath them into their crotch, wasted kino opportunity...

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>>53391708
That's where the piledriver goes anon.

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>>53391761
But giant sparkly laser sword mechapenis...

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>>53391808
There are so many other things to do with a mecha's crotch anon.

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>>53391901
Yes but I wish to do exactly that one thing, anon.

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>>53391956
Wouldn't it be more practical to put a crane there?

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>>53392225
It would be, but I know what I want, and a crane isn't it, anon.

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pls live

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>>53395533
>>53395536
Wow... bumpmind...

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Alright, here's the Auroria map, hopefully the correct one this time. Let me know if you want anything fixed or changed. Still not quite happy with how the streams turned out, but that's about the most I can do with this res.
https://files.catbox.moe/i7kmbj.png

Here's the border fix on Anakondia CoA. Tried to replicate the shine effect, to mixed effect imo.
https://files.catbox.moe/nqtj9h.png

And lastly, Blancopolis CoA edit I did, combining the unicorn and the cross from the original. Idk I think it looks nice. Could maybe differentiate between the unicorn and the cross with different colors tho.
https://files.catbox.moe/bpwz75.png

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>>53384632
Good question! Obviously it depends a lot on the circumstances like the personality of the captor(s) and the captive but here are some pointers that should apply more often than not
Belyms have a stronger in-group/out-group mentality so new POWs can expect some breaking in. It's both to induct the new meat into the existing Belym group and to establish dominance over them. Because Belyms are more sensitive to other’s emotions (and because they’re under 5 feet tall and often lack masculine traits that humans recognize) they rely more on psychological dominance (screwing with the POWs basically) than physical pain, although they’re not above using violence and even torture to assert dominance if necessary. That said it’s probably less brutal than their human counterpart due to the aforementioned sensitivity (because they empathize with the captive… or because they have their fill of sadism faster)
Once someone’s introduced into the group (even if as someone’s whipping boy, see my story with (you) for a small example) they’re generally treated better than by human captors when possible. The POW might not have a lot of privacy from the nosy (sometimes literally) and sometimes chummy Belyms but that’s more a Belym thing in general than something unique to prisoners. Reasserting dominance’s also common but they’re more like teasing than actual torture. Belyms are aware of other races having different physiology and psychology and they tend to point that out whenever it’s relevant, but I won’t say they’re racist even if they think life must be tough for people who can’t see in infrared or breathe carbon monoxide-contaminated air
That said, once someone’s inducted into the group, they’re expected to remain subservient (that’s not to say they don’t tolerate any noncompliance – going along with competition’s a good way to earn their trust and improve one’s status within the group, and if the prisoner point out an error that could endanger them and the group, they’ll acknowledge that if begrudgingly) and observe the group’s rules. There aren’t many rules but transgressions won’t be tolerated. If the POW breaks a serious rule knowingly (or even accidentally) they better hope they’re too important to die since that’s how it usually ends otherwise. If nothing else it’s usually quick and without additional sadism though. That’s also how it ends if the prisoner continues to refuse getting included into the group
Overall I would say they can be seen as being more charitable and less cruel than humans (even if it’s not necessarily from the good of their heart) but their different psychology can make them look capricious. I guess you can say they would treat you more like an oversized, sometimes misshapen child of the group instead of an out-group prisoner that they happen to keep under watch. The POW can probably expect some degree of protection by designated ward(s) from other members in the group and (especially) outside the group

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>>53396646
Nice COAs anon, though I would have kept the Anakondia COA a bit thicker, but regular.
Excellent thighs though, whose are those?

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>>53398952
I can adjust the thickness however I want, it's a really easy edit.
Kilia Kurayami, the sexo brit orca of eien.

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>>53398925
I see! That's an interesting side effect of the group mentality. I guess this whole dynamic is pretty in-line with Narim's portrayal in the story. The bit capriciousness is interesting.
Also, could you tell me how you would translate "Sardine Wizard" to Belym?

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>>53387824
Haven't got to them because for SdF, no fire logo and NE...havent got to it, period. And armoria is being an arse...

>>53396646
Catbox no work on my mobile bro. Try somewhere else...

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>>53404449
Huh, is it your network or your browser being shit? Try Brave if the later. NTA, just reposting.

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And these are the other two as well

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>>53404939
Oooh, I like that Unicorn flag. Makes it look like it has a giant dick

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>>53405857

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>>53405857
I bet if Blancopolis had mecha they would have dick swords...

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>>53403313
Belyms don’t consider themselves capricious (naturally) but it’s an inevitable result due to the difference in psychology and physiology. At least they’re aware of the difference so they usually will make their rules and punishment clear to the prisoners
By sardine do you mean a crowded space? Or the actual fish?

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>>53406194
The actual fish. Though it's still in the can, so maybe there'd be some multi-layered pun in using the term for a crowded space. Go for whichever would sound funnier to Belym!

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>>53406030
>dick swords
What a fool, any mecha worth it's weight in steel knows that a drill dick is the only worthy crotch accessory. Slap it on the pilot too for extra efficiency.

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>>53406539
Does the pilot's drill dick plug into the mecha's drill dick to control it with kegels?

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>>53407825
>Does the pilot's drill dick plug into the mecha's drill dick to control it with kegels?

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>>53409841
he's just like me fr fr...

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>>53416027
Built for rape

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Bump

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What's your favorite detritivore?

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>>53424196
Manila residents

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>>53406448
Sardine would be something like Chopkoki while the words for magician (interesting I never had to look that up before despite the amount of magicians in regular /vnug/) would be kusi or… mori. I guess kusi would fit the idea of wizard better since the root refers to ritual instead of magic in general. Less confusing too maybe
I guess that means Sardine Wizard would be either Chopkusi or Kokikusi since Chopkokikusi would be too long. Chop means “narrow” which describes sardine’s shape while koki is the word for meat or fish. I guess meat magician’s kinda funny because of the connotation while chop just sounds inherently funny because of English

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>>53407825
I bet mechas in Blancopolis work like those in Darling in the Franxx

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>>53428420
>mori
Well I'll be damned, what did koreans mean by this kek. I like "Chopkusi", that's perfect, thank you! Top tier teasing nickname.

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>>53404578
I have good ol Chrome as my browser. That may be it?

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>>53429067
Worth trying another browser (mobile chrome is shit anyway, other browser have adblock), but that should work, must be your ISP being retarded then. I've never heard of catbox being blocked but I guess it's possible.

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>>53428688
deca-yearly reminder that Ichigo did nothing wrong

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Any ideas on how best I can intermingle Catholic doctrines with the sheer incelity of catalog? Its for Blancopolis. So far, the only thing established is that their executive body is called The Curia which the Grand Pontifex is head of. Another is that they have their own Alcatraz which is named Clover Island. Guess what's the logo of 4chan?

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>>53428862
It’s actually on me since I picked up the root from a difference source (I think it’s the old word for sun or monsoon) without realizing the implication when you stick a common suffix behind it

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>>53429212
I have no idea what that meme is. All I know of the series is the questionable pilot positions lol.

>>53429067
Hmm...

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>>53429235
Why, it must have some kind some kind of inquisition that obsessively witch-hunts deviations from an arbitrary set of standards. Also indulgences to allow the nobles to dodge said standards, to help sell the corruption.

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>>53429359
/franxx/ was the best general on the worst anime on /a/ for a season. So nostalgic...

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>>53429523
I did set it so that there are heavy penalties being imposed on "unnecessary interaction" of the sexes. On top of it, I made it so when (we) deal with them, the citizens are somehow happier, secretly rooting for (us) all along.

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>>53429273
Oh, what other source is that?

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>>53430076
It’s the old word for either sun or monsoon (mor)

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>>53430456
Oh, I get it now, neat!

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>>53428862
What do we do with this?

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Dont let it die

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So do I write vnug lore now?

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>>53436289
Give it a try!

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PLAP

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I miss /meat/ and /meat/ anons...

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>>53416027
>>53417174
watch yourselves....

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>>53429523
(Same anon)
Got it, anything else? Other anons are welcome to chime in.

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>>53429235
>>53439538
Have some of the gods make some obviously questionable decisions, or do things that blatantly go against established doctrine, and then make it extremely taboo to ever talk about these situations despite the fact that everyone knows about them

(Assuming a polytheistic parthenon) Have some gods never manifest or ever perform any sort of acts or miracles for centuries, but their individual sects fervently insist that their god is definitely still there and definitely still cares about them and they will come bless them any day now

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>>53429235
I'd personally start with establishing one central entity as the "God" that embodies all the true and holy values they care about. Fun thing about that is that you can then split that God in however many fragments you want, same as how the holy trinity of catholicism are the Father, Son and the holy spirit, who all make up and are the one true God.
I would then give some thought to what kind of conflicts may arise in interpretations of said God, like how the question of Jesus's divinity lead to the first council of nicaea. A good old fashioned purge here and there is also always nice, inquisitions and eventual corruption, that type of deal.
>>53439406
You're right Sapling, she's built for reverse rape. Big difference, thanks for pointing the mistake out.

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>>53429212
You know what? Compared to all the other bitches in that show by the end of it you're objectively right, fuck Zero Two and her dino aids having ass.
Also, did they ever explain why the mechs were sex piloted? It might make for a new kind of mech if it was actually interesting.

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>>53439406
>UUUU Akshually, rape is very problema-
>PLAP PLAP PLAP PLAP PLAP GET FERTILIZED PLAP PLAP PLAP PLAP PLAP GET FERTILIZED

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>>53254514
gonna be fr fr I just want to have sex with fox

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>>53440574
I've made it so that originally, they were pious towards all four of the Celestium. But when Damaso ascended the Grand Papacy, he hard-focused the faith on the big bad. Semi-related note, I've made it so all male bosses found in the Blancopolis route abhor all the Stars in my cast so hard they get a separate boss convo.

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>>53439889
Indeed I have a polytheistic parthenon. I've got the acts down in form of the auroras, which inlore is the symbol of The Celestium's favor. As for the

>blatantly flout established doctrine

I have the big bad polluting the auroras to a strange and dark color (imagine violet-red auroras, menacing). When that came out, the other three were already fighting the big bad and starting to lose horribly.

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>>53445695
>abhor all the Stars in my cast so hard they get a separate boss convo
Actual kino kek.

Also, that raises the question of how stable the country is overall. Any major religious upheavals, even those that take decades, usually come with an age of strife and instability. I really need to spend this weekend going through that mod, this is interesting. Never thought my first FE game would be a hack...

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>>53447021
Stable enough to keep up appearances at least. Otherwise, it'd be like that town where Trevor Belmont came from in Netflix! Castlevania. With absolute POSs for clergy.

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>>53448055
(me)
Naturally, they also have a deep hatred for Nero Eterna except for the Separatist faction. And that's just amicable at best. A boss later into the route also has a dialogue if you fight him with a Neronian. (Towa, Oga, Choco, Ollie, Calli, Ina)

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>>53438452
I am sorry anon, they were just too tasty

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>>53448669
>meatheads infighting and eating each other
Jesus fucking christ

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>>53448055
>POSs for clergy.
That's pretty generic for fantasy, usually there's at least some corrupt priests that lead a flock that doesn't know any better.

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>>53451919
Well, those guys are meant to be the catalog...

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>>53455362
Oh I didn't mean it in a bad way, generic is good sometimes, I absolutely adore overzealous, misguided or corrupted clergy/theocracies. It's why Mozgus is one of my favorite Berserk characters.

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>>53456989
Based anon

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>>53456989
Mozgus did literally nothing wrong.
Peasants were made for torture and subjugation.

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>>53458442
>filename
Do fromsoftards really?

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>>53458972
You absolute buffoon!
Peasants were made to work the fields and praise lord almighty, HERETICS were made for torture and subjugation.

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>>53460233
Berserk was a manga adaptation of dark souls, don't you know?

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>>53467450
Wait I thought it was the live action remake...

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dwagon love!

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U N A A A A
I call upon the forces of pink sorcery to return this thread to page 1

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>>53476421
Pink?

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Interesting weird thread... How long has this been going?

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>>53478839
We just started in fact! You interested in anything?

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>>53474437
Ember is sexier than usual...

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>>53478839
This incarnation is very new. Our forefathers began their works a bit over a year back.

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>>53479261
From what I checked out, it's neat dorky stuffs but writing isn't really my forte desu. So I just offer this cute ninner to you guys. The void spaces that I come from, it's a monument to Ina's extreme cute dopeyness and shall grant your threads good luck in their future!
>>53479958
Nahonee, well I hope it continues for generations to come

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>>53480647
That's a lovely inner anon, we'll cherish it.

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>>53480647
Good inner, would plap/10

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>>53441897
indeed

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I tried out the FE hack today, the intro is nice! The sprites are pretty. There were some minor syntax mistakes if you haven't caught those yet.
I did get soft-locked in the tutorial, so I'll give it another try tomorrow kek.

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Bump

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I like official lore

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>>53254932
Fpbp

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>>53493714
When did Irys beat up Goku?

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>>53496507
In the second tournament of power

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>>53496934
I forgot about that chapter of the manga, guess I'm due for a re-read.

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Live

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>>53493714
Same, I like it as well

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>>53504066
Delicious towa thighs...

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Fast board this morning.

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nyoom

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>>53254514
neat

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Bump

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CLARO

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>>53254514
Live

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>>53513933
What if I don't want to? What if I push us past bump to kill us off?

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What kind of lore do you think Holo EN 3 should have?
Do you think it should connect to other gens or be completely separate?

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>>53516872
separate would be cool
maybe something tech related, or some space themed stuff
>alien
>comet
>star
>moon
>black hole

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>>53517040
>tech related
Ewwww we have too many techwear chuubas already.
>space themed stuff
Also ewwww they would always be grouped together with Sana

I wanna see some more mythology themes, egyptian is little explored, some slavic folklore, native american. Gimme a wendigo chuuba, complete with a hunger model ala Juniper

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